Simple mortal who likes ponies.
Crossover of movie Hunger games.
4 tribes: Ponys, griffins, zebras and wolves must choose 6 "players" to go survive a living nightmare, Hunger games.
"SHALL THE GAMES BEGIN!"
-Luna! What are you doing here?!
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Cool story and i think you chose right with choosing RD as Katniss, at least that's what it looks like, with them having the same aggressive personality. I am wondering how you will put the hunger games aspect into such a friendly world though. I guess i will see where the story goes but you have my eye. I am not going to like the story without it progressing farther but good luck and good writing.
Came across this story, and I will tell you now, that I have no interest in reading it or even trying to read it. Now, before I come off sounding like a total jerk, allow me to explain why.
1: Description screams "DON'T READ ME!!!"
I will be blunt and say that there is no way in any variation of hell that you will attract any readers with that description. The fact that you put author's notes before your story description was warning enough that this is probably a story to avoid. If you have something to say to your readers, please use the authors notes box at the end of each chapter.
2: Hunger Games is no longer relevant.
Seriously, no one writes crossovers for Hunger Games anymore. The trend is dead, and no one is going to read these things anymore. Choose a different story idea.
3: Confidence is Essential!!!
No one is going to want to read a story that the author isn't even dedicated to. Trust me when I say that you do NOT sound very enthusiastic about this story. Have some confidence man!
4: Don't make it sound like you have nothing planned out.
That is more of a turn off than anything else. Even if you don't have anything planned, DO NOT TELL US THAT!!! That will turn us readers away faster than a fat man from salad!
Anyways, that is what I had to say, take my advice and good luck in your writing endeavors.
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Thanks, but no thanks... You said your view of my story and I said I can deal with any kind of criticism, to be honest? I saw it, something like that will appear in comment section, but like I said, You said your view. Now I’m going to explain some of these.
Maybe yes, maybe no. But like this description says, I’m new at it, this is my very first fic, but thanks, nextime i won’t do same mistake twice.
I don’t really think if there was any Hunger games fictions at all, maybe I’m wrong, if I am, please write title on comment. (thanks)
I don’t say anything about I don’t have anything planned. I do have, maybe it sounds like I don’t... I said I don’t know how to write it... It’s a bit diffrent, When first tells I don’t have anything but prologe, second tells I know how to story going to be, but I don’t know how to write it, it’s little bit harder, you have 6 stories, I have nothing but this, you know little more than me...
For this, Okay, I don’t scream at your face, "You are going to **** read it!"
I will try write some next chapters. (after all, everyone has to begin somewhere). Maybe I am a little obstinate, but i wan’t to just delete this story, I don’t want to give up. I saw some good stories cancelled because of 1 mistake. If i fall, I stand up and go. Maybe it’ll have many dislikes, but it also can be a whole opposite... Nobody knows...
Well, if you are going to answer this, or better, help me with these "amateur" mistakes, I will be only happy.
6293057 Okay, perhaps I should explain my reasoning in a way that is a bit more understanding.
When I said...
I was being extremely and brutally honest. Instead of giving the potential reader a description to reel them in, you put down authors notes that pretty much said "I don't know what I am doing." That tends to draw potential readers away rather than towards. I would advise against that in the future. (Yes, I saw that you changed it, good for you! Though it could be make to be more attracting. At the moment, it looks generic, a little to short, and boring. Try to come up with something more appealing to read while describing what you story is about; without giving too much away of course. I would suggest making it sound a little personal.
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When I said...
I poorly informed you that Hunger Games is a very used up and old idea that no one wants to read anymore. Also, yes, it is VERY overused. I could possibly find over 100 stories that relate to Hunger Games, and guarantee that nearly 99% of them failed. It is just not a story anyone wants to read. Try if you want to, but I don't think you will get more than a few likes for your effort. To me, it wouldn't feel worth it.
When I said...
I was perhaps a bit overzealous. In my defense, I was VERY tired at the time, and it just appeared that way. Sorry for assuming.
When I said...
First off, I did not claim that you screamed in anyone's face. I was setting a point, thank you very much!
Second off. I respect that you don't want to give up an a idea, I had that mindset at one time as well. However, sometimes you have to realize that it is just not worth the effort if no one is going to bother to read it. I know this far too well. Yes, someone has to start somewhere, but I am not entirely sure this is the story idea to start with; especially since it is unlikely that you will have a mass of people reading it and offering advice.
I'll leave you with this advice. Stay with this story if you want, but I cannot guarantee you that it will succeed and I doubt you will get much of a learning experience from it; you would be lucky anyone else bothered to look at it. I would suggest taking time to come up with either a original idea, (least as original as it gets with ponies...) or do some research on this website to see what people are most into nowadays, pick a favorite topic or genre of your choice, and write a story based off of it.
You would probably be better off trying that than keeping with this story, but that is only my suggestion. Do what you think is right.
PS: I haven't had much to do these last couple of days, aside from barely writing my own stories, and you seem like someone who wouldn't mind learning a few things. I know my way around writing stories, generally know what people like, and I am a pretty decent editor. So I will extend an offer. Give me something to do aside from lazing my days away, and I will help you with any story you have; even this one. Feel free to PM me if you are interested.
I Really like this story
Please update if you have the time to do so.
God, how I love this book! I think the adaptation is a little shorter than the book!
Many do not fully understand the depth of this wonderful book. If you want to understand what I'm talking about here, you can read the essay about The Hunger Games https://phdessay.com/free-essays-on/hunger-games/ and understand how important everything is, the details in the storytelling. And in general, creating a dystopia is the most interesting story :) But everyone who loves the film will also check it out.
I think every fan of the Games will support me.