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Nice story as always BB! When I find the time I'll get to nitpicking, but until then, great job! It's always fun to see stories staring the cakes!
6247136 Thank you. And much appreciated, I'll be waiting for it!
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Now for a long overdue NITPICK TIME!
Technically it's everyPONY, but even the show's writers skip the horse puns sometimes.
I believe, "was doing his best," is the correct tense, but I'm not sure.
Since I believe these are two separate sentences, a semi-colon or period would be better. Also, remember to use a coma when a character is addressing another person, or pony, in this case.
Just another missing coma.
Squiggles!
Not professional, but fun to see!Nothing wrong here; just making a note.
These two words never go together. So... what exactly is this supposed to say?
Microsoft Word can produce longer dashes for these situations. Also, the quotation ends the sentence so... small typo I believe.
Would that be, "she said as she rolled her eyes" or, "she said, rolling her eyes"?
I believe there was a missing comma here.
It may not show up on some fonts, but that second quotation mark is backwards. Technology nowadays.
Should this be italicized?
Minor stuff
Capitalization
And...done!
I must say, I've forgotten how fun it is to nitpick. Sure it takes some time, but I feel it was well spent. I know you're a break from writing BB, but I can't wait to see what you come out with next!
6314309 THANK YOU. I learned some details that I didn't know about writing this time around, so that's always good.
The squiggly lines are a staple of my stories at this point, so I kept them.
The 'everyone' bit was done on purpose, actually. Why? For the sake of being consistent with the show at least ONCE.
Anyway, good to see you came back to do your nitpicking! Thought you had forgotten.
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Me? Forget? Never! I merely... got busy... with stuff... yeah... Oh don't give me that look AJ!