Set before the events of Friendship Is Magic.
Each pony tribe had made peace with the others, banishing the deadly Windigos into the pits of Tartarus, never to be released upon the world. Calm spread throughout the land, and each mare and colt could finally be safe.
But nopony expected the Windigos to use the last of their power to leave a dark curse upon the ones who had defeated them. The mares were lost, the curse taking control and leaving them to what they believed were the hooves of death.
Or so it seemed.
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Thank you.
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....you... may need a grammar check.
cute.
I guess the only QW I have i have Is about apple horse and miss flutters.
weren't they already living there?
lets hope thats answered in the next part.
I'm kinda the silent reader type, i sometimes leave a comment but it's a rarity..
Don't take my silence as negative judgement! If i see something's amiss i will comment about it, so if i don't comment nothing is wrooong.
Btw, i only saw some slight grammar errors, such as two speakers having dialogue on the same line of text.
This makes it difficult to tell who's saying what, as two separate lines of dialogue for two different characters are separated by a line of space.
'new line, new speaker'
"However," He said, indicating to an example, "You can have this type of speech, where the same character is speaking, but their dialogue is separated by a brief pause of description."
"That's whack yo'!" The awkward forty year old businessman shouts, trying to be 'hip'.
I don't know where this is going any more... Great chapter btw.
It's good filler!
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Oh, well...thanks!
So... Did Rainbow has a crush on the new pony??? I'm only teasing XD. But maybe was she need is a rival sort of... I don't know how to explain it.
Ugh, why is Rarity such a bitch?
My guess is that RD does read everything they were told to read, that's why she is nervous about and is pretending not knowing.
just my guess. :P
Surprised to see this still alive.
Brilliant chapter!
Ow! Ow! Ow! Ow!
"Ye olde timey speeche!"
"Thou" is only used in place of "you." "Thou art a braggart, churl!"
"Thee" is only used for a direct object: "I pray thee.... Shall I read to thee?"
"Thy" and "thine" are used for the second person possessive, in the same places "my" and "mine" go for first person. "Thine apples are divine, Yeomare Applejack. Whither be thy brother?" "Victory be thine, beast...."
Here's a really useful Wiki article. Thou
Describing herself, Luna would most likely use "we" "I" or "one." And, well, Luna would not sound old-timey to Clover of all ponies....
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Yes, I do apologize. I'm not very good with writing in Luna's type of speech she first used, and I'm really thankful you showed me this Wikipedia page. I'll make sure to look it over and make revisions.