About thirty years after the last Dragonborn Rathion defeated Alduin, the world was again disturbed by a new dragon named Secronel Nistrn the two beings fought furiously till Secronel opened a portal and threw the two into a now world. The world was filled with color and life just like Skyrim but it was too joyful for the two. Now both are separated and these ponies are about to encounter a Demonic Dragon drives by madness and Revenge. While the Argonian male was driven by hatred for dragons and the many Daedric lords he served loyally.
Editor and proof reader Requiem17
Chapters (3)
FIRST!!!
Also, why Skyrim? Why does nobody ever write a story about the OTHER Elder Scrolls games? We are all aware that there are other games that were better than this one, right? Well, at least as far as alchemy, magic, marksman, story line, and equipment slots were concerned. Oh wait, that's practically the best parts of the game. -.-
Now that I'm done venting, the story was somewhat bland (to me, not everyone's opinions are the same, don't take it too bad) and the fact that you played an Argonian is just not cool. Everyone knows you can't best an Orc (archer). XD
6189784 I mostly write things on dark souls or other things I think of this is my first Skyrim fic ever. So I apologize if I get the lore screwed up a bit but I'm relatively new to the game so bare with me here. Also I don't see many Skyrim fics myself so I'm sorry if this displeased you. Also Skyrim is the only elder scrolls game I've ever played
6189792 Ah, well, in that case I jumped the gun.
Skyrim was meant to cater to a new generation of Battlefield and COD players that never played an RPG before. I apologize for that, most people have already played one of the other Elder Scrolls games before.
Speaking of which, I would recommend Oblivion, the fourth one. It has a much more centralized story line and plot, and a FAR more climactic ending than either of the main quests in Skyrim.
6189807 Yeah I'll see into it but I like Skyrim because it has good graphics and there is just so much you can do!
6189811 Like I said, the previous games actually have MORE to do. The game was, frankly speaking, "dumbed down" for a newer crowd that never really played a classic RPG before.
There is MUCH MORE to do in Oblivion, and a CRAP TON more to do in Morrowind. Plus, just in case I haven't tickled your fancy yet, you can make your own spells in Oblivion. That is all.
6189818 Damn you can?! Fuck this I'm gonna check that out!
6189826 Like I said, that's not all. That's just a gateway drug, so to speak. There is EVEN MORE!!!
You can also ride unicorns, join an evil cult, and own a castle as your home, if you purchase the GOTY edition. Again, that's just the tip of the iceberg.
6189840 Damn you make it sound like they're still updating the damn game
Check mine https://www.fimfiction.net/story/254038/the-dragon-kings-rebirth
I'll check yours?
6189852 Sure I'll check yours out
Hey, you can use this website to translate English to Dovah, in case you want that dragon to say something in his own Tongue, or if you want to create your own Shout. Just thought it might be useful.
http://www.thuum.org/translate.php
Also, you can look around this website to get your information regarding the lore of the Elder Scrolls.
http://elderscrolls.wikia.com/wiki/The_Elder_Scrolls_Wiki
And just because you said you aided the Stormcloak rebels, you might want to know that Ulfric is a sleeper agent of the Thalmor. He is working for them in fact, even if he doesn't know it hemself (yet).
If you don't believe me, there is a Thalmor dossier on Ulfric Stormcloak in a chest in Elenwyn's Solar during the 'Diplomatic Immunity' quest, detailing that the Thalmor want the Stormcloaks to drive out the Empire. If you want to be a thorn in the side of the Thalmor, it would be better to join the Legion. Just though it was an important bit of lore. You can ignore me if you like.
Anyway, an interesting story, a few grammatical errors, but otherwise fun to read. Keep it up.
6189939 do you like it so far? I put a lot of work into the first chapter and my editor helped me improve it. In just hope my hard work isnt in vain ya know? I want this story to be successful and liked but I can't control that. But anyways thanks for the advice and links
6189969
Just trying to be helpful.
And yes, I did enjoy it so far. Not many stories catch my interest these days, but you seemed to have pulled it off.
I wish you good luck, and don't be affraid of asking me or anyone else in Skyrim Equestria for advice.
6189996 Alright I'll have another chapter for you all most likely tomorrow my editor works fast
6189846 Yes, I know, but it's just because you haven't played it yet, that's why.
There's too much content to mention in a comment post, so I'll just let you figure out the rest on your own. You can get the game on Steam for really cheap nowadays, seeing as how the game is from 2006.
Hey, I just noticed that you didn't mention the Dawnguard or the Volkihar Vampires in your title-description. Haven't you played the DLC yet, or are you not in possession of the Legendary edition?
6192680 I've played the dlc the things you mentioned don't really show up in the story
6192680 also I would put it in there but those things are so minor in this story. But yes they are mentioned in the second chapter and a little bit more later on.
6193840
K. Just thought I'd check.
Hmmm, I got to be honest I have read a lot of these and this one doesn't seem to stand out. I like the idea of having an Argonian, would fit in better than a human. The character also seems a bit over powered and perfect, kinda Gary Stu.
My biggest gripe is the pacing of it, by this I mean it moves fast, like really fast. While that's not a bad thing, I enjoy stories that paint the scene for me on all levels. A story should tell me where I am, time of day, weather, so on. I should be introduced to characters and be able to relate to them.
You have great ideas! Develope them, draw things out a little, have characters reflect on the things, use description and comparison. I know we are in a land of talking magical ponies but keep it grounded, unless you are going full cartoony in which case keep it tamer in its gore.
I say this not to discourage, please, keep going.
6194844 its fast paced at first because I have to get the ponies into the fic so it could be published but its going to slow down now. Also my character is based on the one I have irl for skyrim. Plus the dragonborn is kinda op to begin with. I cut back on the shouts like bend will and slow time because in my opinion those are op. But I'm doing my best to cut back on the op stuff and right now this is as weak as he gets unless he has magic restraints put on him also have you played skyrim? Because to normal skyrim played this guy is average in power. The reason the ponies see him as powerful is because of his th'um if he didn't have that he'd be weak as shit trust me. He bearily has magicka and is slow because of his heavy armor and all the crap he carries around. The only thing that keeps my character alive in skyrim is how much resistance, strength and HP he has. When he hit AJ and sent her flying that was basically him using a lot of his strength and power.
But right now he's still developing in some ways so you'll see improvements soon!
6202958 I see.
Yeah I've played Skyrim, like it.
Well let's see where this goes
6203733 well tomorrow I'll upload the next chapter and post it. So from there you'll see more of my views in skyrim. And a lot of them will be things people might say to you out of game play like they would irl
IT FIRST SENT ME IT GOT UPDATED NOW!!! WHY DAFUG DIDNT I GET THESE 2 OUT OF 3 CHAPTERS MONTHS AGO!!
..why did i only get the third chapter on my tracking list now?
Interesting. Mora cares for the Dovahkiin's wellbeing, yet he has never acknowledged any dragon being a true threat. What makes Secronel so special for Mora to take personal interest? I am intrigued my friend, and glad this got updated again.
Can't wait for more, or for Discord to meet Sheogorath.
6461396 Its going to happen trust me. the reason this took so long to post was I was debating on how it would be receipted. I thought it was going to get tons of hate so that's why it took so long.
6456878 because I posted it yesterday
Very nice. Surprised to Mora in the story. Looking forward to seeing more soon.
6554522 he's my favorite deadra and in my opinion the most powerful for multiple reasons
Lord of the Rings
SURE, lock up a practical demigod, leave a bad impression on ponykind, practically declare war on skyrim (maybe), and COMPLETLEY ignore everything twilight just said about self defense, have the guards attack/arrest him, accuse him of being the villain, only worsening the situation, need I go on