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I suggest
Read something somewhere that kinda fits this chapter abit.
Never go looking for adventure. Adventure is another name for being hungry, cold, and running for your life 98% of the time.
Spoken like a true disgruntled old-timer.
which happened to be ?
I think Tarnish should meet a mob of ponies convinced the volcano was his doing.
Also: find them an orphan! One that starts following them shortly after they get on the road!
Yes! Airships. Airships are cool.
Hinting at something are we?
Nice chapter well done!
Hehehe grandfoals... Poor tarnish
This story is just... Wow...
The last time I've been this enthralled in a story was the original FoE. You done good with this. Very good.
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Books are funny things... like history, they can be manipulated and made to say anything that the writer wants.
Even untrue things.
At first I thought that Maud would be a bad love interest, she seemed flat and boring. I have flipped my opinion 180 degrees the other way and have beat my old thoughts into a bloody pulp. They are great together! Maud may be a rock, but she is showing a deep soul that makes you feel for her, and seeing Tarnish grow into a thoughtful and tender husband and stallion is great too.
As this chapter ended, you have Tarnish and Maud already talking about leaving on another adventure. I am sure you will give the readers a little break at the Pie farm before they set off, I feel that Tarnish's time with the family is a bit rushed and he is not getting enough time bonding with the family he has just joined. Some of the family have not had a lot of story time and their personality have not been fully flushed out and I see an opportunity in this. I would like to throw out an idea to help out.
As Tarnish and Maud set out on their next adventure it would be interesting if some of the Pie family tag along. I think one of the sisters would be a good choice. Like Marble and Sonneur could accompany them on their adventure. This would give Tarnish a opportunity to be a big brother to Marble and become friends with a possible future brother in Sonneur, who is we know very little about except that he is shy and likes books, it would be very nice to see him grow under Tarnish's help and advice, to become a strong stallion that can sweep Marble off her hooves. Humor can aways be added with awkward moments between the two pairs.
Another idea is to have Limestone go with them, again Tarnish learn to be a big brother with her and bonds, and perhaps she could find romance somewhere on the road.
Who says that you can't have slice of life with adventure. I bet you can do it, and make it fun to read.
If this story idea helps out with your next story ark, and you think you will like to use it, I will happily delete it from this open post so it won't ruin it for future readers.
Going back to Fillydelphia... I hope a certain pony doesn't recognize Tarnish... For his own sake...
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I saw frock after I posted, I edited my post less than a minute latter and I am surprised you saw my first draft. That sentence was hidden like a flower in a bed of weeds, or perhaps a weed in a bed of flowers?
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Summon snowcone. I dunno.
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Ponies always talk with much good grammar, yes they do.
6726207 Hahahaha! A drink that will knock you on you arse! Cheers!
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Summon Snow-cone
Cost: 12 mana points
Type: Ice based Magic
Effects: Causes 20% DR, +2 to Strength Endurance and Agility; -1 Intelligence, Charisma and Perception to all allied foals nearby before snow cone is given; if the number of summoned snow cones does not equal the number of allied foals hostility’s may break out between foals. After snow cone is received DR returns to normal, -1 to Strength, Endurance, Agility, Charisma, and Intelligence. Small chance of foal getting brain freeze (brain freeze causes the adverse effects of the snow cone to double). For an additional 23 mana points you may summon a flavored Snow-cone (Flavored Snow cones double positive effects with a minor increase in chance for brain freeze)
Restrictions: Must have the Foal at Heart Perk
i regret nothing.... except for my typos
Yup, conservatives would hate this
6837291 you're right, reading this story sets my oil pumping steel heart aflame in a furious blaze of unbridled anger. The heat and force of this hateful combustion pumps carbon monoxide out of the many unholy orifices of my fat and bloated body Already have these caustic fumes melted a significant amount of both north and south poles. Truly all of my conservative brethren feel the same way as they sit in their homes and businesses strewn with the heads and pelts of game they hunted with their baleful and greedy hands. Never before has my hatred of all things loving and good been so fierce, and surely the only way to appease me would be to personally cut down a forest with my chainsaw like teeth, all the while strangling forest animals with my own pair of greedy and baleful hands.....
but more then that I feel kind of annoyed at the generalizations being made. Shockingly enough, the average conservative isn't a gasoline guzzling, and environment erasing bastard. I'm taking this way too far and i'm aware. So hopefully you can forgive me that....
this was fun to write though.
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Conservatives like Republicans, or conservationists like Teddy Roosevelt or John Muir?
*Stand by for titan fall.
7702634 Why?
Downside to airships you miss everything in between