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PinkieYukari


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Right after finishing up the 8th grade, I - Zackery - feel a tremor during a sleepless night, and witness a purple bolt of lightning that knocks me out. I awake in a dark room with nothing but my clothes, my headphones, my phone, and a purple-furred animal near me. What I see when the purple animal switches on the lights is staggering, and the testing begins!
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Categorized as Comedy, but since it's kinda my first story, it might be a bit dry or sparse.
Written in first-person, present tense.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 8 )

Good for a first try. May want to add the OC character tag at the bottom, as well as removing the Comedy tag. You can change it, you know.

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Hm, I thought the OC tag was for OC ponies alone. This is a HiE story, so... that's confusing. :applejackconfused:
And as the description states, there might be a sparsity in the comedy until I can get to a humourous part in the story.

I know the story is dead, but I wanted to just say that I've enjoyed reading it so far. Just one little nitpick:

Probably to spread the idea of at least quasi-harmony to us humans, who always seem to be at each others’ throats, I think.

This is something I see many times in HiE fics, and it's bad every time I see it used. Please try not to force misanthropy into a story that doesn't need it. I'm happy that this story isn't as bad about it as others, but that quote still set off a few alarms. Still, I guess it doesn't quite matter by now. :twilightsheepish:

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