Years before existed Nightmare Moon, there existed another pony whose very actions would come to shake down Equestria to its very core, he's an earth pony with a lot of strength and valor, he's Connor Stronghooves, the adopted son of Princess Luna. A pony made god by the darkness in Nightmare's heart, and alongside Celestia's children did they all become Nightmare Moon and The 4 Stallions of the Apocalypse. The events of the story start during season one's pilot as the fallen stallion of War works alongside the mane six to stop Nightmare Moon and the other stallions and bring peace to their country.
Credit to Masteroflag of editing Chapter 11 and Chapter 12.
Chapters (13)
The Four Horsemen - Metallica
Yup, after this I'm going to be on a hiatus, even if another chapter comes up this will still be on a possible further hiatus. Sorry for anyone liking this but I need to establish good ideas for what comes next and possibly have this more of a crossover thing than just Darksiders and Gurren Lagann
Kind of hope Spike becomes Death
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This is the STALLIONS of the Apocalypse, and don't worry, he's a main character later on in the story, he'll play out a huge ass important role in this
Alright, your story seems promising enough. The idea of the four horsemen ponified has been done, but it always makes for a decent story. That being said, there are a lot of mistakes that can be corrected, and I'm here to do just that. Since you've got an editor for your chapters, they seem to have all been hammered up right proper. Since that is the case, I will instead review your story's description. Now hold my hand, and we'll delve into a review, with color coding! Red for spelling errors, blue for grammar errors, and purple for commenting after reading shit that makes no sense at all.
As I said, your story has potential, but the parts you haven't fixed really need work. Gary Stues are a no-no. And don't worry, I won't be throwing you to the Train Wreck Explorers, either.
Keep writing!
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I honestly haven't seen any other 4 Horseman stories on here, I've only seen one but that was just weird to read. If you thought this was bad, you should have read that one. Its got something interesting going on, but there was always one paragraph per chapter, one. Not to mention a couple of mistakes here and there but that's not the point.
I appreciate another big writer on the site has decided to bother themselves with something of mine, and no, Connor isn't suppose to be a Gary Stu. I did not intend him on being one, and neither will the other Stallions. I get that it isn't perfect but hey it's my first fic. I honestly am just starting, but thankfully I actually get some feedback from SOMETHING. Either way, I think I'm just glad that there was mostly just comments than grammar errors and whatnot.
Well if you did read it, great! That really pleases my jimmiez.
Hope the story has been good to you, and I'll take you up on your advise and do better.
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You're welcome. Always a pleasure to be a part of others' writing.
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Well all in all, what do you think? I mean, the most good feedback I got was your criticisms and that this had potential. Are you only saying that because it's just another 4 Horsemen story or what?
1567148 Oh no, the characters are well-written and OCs have personality. Your writing style is pretty good too. Love the way you've described the settings.
1567161 Oh god that made me feel good to see that comment.
But yeah, I'll take your criticisms to heart, you did have some good points on the description to see, and I appreciate that one person even cares about this story enough to give it critical acclaim, even care enough about it to show what I did wrong with one big bit of the story. And I'll look up your story too, just to see how good you do. 
1567179 Really? Thanks! If you want to look up my story, try the comedy rather than the Grimdark. That one was written because my cousin wanted me to, then abandoned. If you like it, though, that's cool too.
I sense a romance between Connor and Trixie.
1567238 Oh, who knows?
Most likely me. Or maybe I think that there's gonna be a love triangle between those two and Twilght.
1571286 I honestly really hate those, hell, I even hate shipping in general. But if it brings in something promising then I might let it in, who the hell knows?
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You
1572574 Eh, well bottom line is, there is no love triangle, not at all. Those are over rated
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Well, I can dig that.
1575477 You can also use a drill to dig things.
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I'm a human drill.
1577252 Cool story bro
Darn cliffhangers!
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Only with me does this happen.
CURSE YOU CLIFFHANGERS!!!
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Cliffhangers after all this text?
Also why does this not have more view. I'm submitting this to Bronycurious just to get some more views on this, for good or ill.
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Honestly, its not the best work of fiction, but nothing ever is. Its way weird at the first 5 chapters, and it only really starts to get good after chapter 9 or so, and I doubt people have all this time to really get into it, especially all that's going to meet them is a really good troll of a cliffhanger.
I don't really mind where you submit this story too, just so long as it isn't anyone as harsh as the EqD fanfic guys. That would be horrible.
2328347 The EQD guys are just a bunch of Trixies anyway.
Seriously unless it's by popular demand they will critic every little thing to keep from posting something. It's why this video makes a joke about it at the start:
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Lol I saw what they did there. Idk, EqD is very informative and correct on some levels, but when it comes to fan made stuff (stories, fan animations, videos, etc.) its pretty broken and some accounts it is very unfair. I have submitted this and man, it was pretty harsh. But enough of that, EqD is now nothing more but taboo on this website anyways.
But what is bronycurious? Do you have a link to it? I never really heard of it before.
2330476 he's an artist doing a Trixie comic who also does reviews and such on youtube.
I don't know if he still does it, but he did try to make a fanfiction only review podcast a month or so ago and on his tumbler talks about fanfics all the time.
http://bronycurious.tumblr.com/
http://www.youtube.com/user/GoldenOaksBookClub
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Really? I'm not seeing it, but hell, I've only seen the first two pages so I guess I just might have to look more here.