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The hell? This is REALLY strange. :twilightoops:

I shall read on. :rainbowderp:

Why, OH WHY IN THE NAME OF CELESTIA can I imagine Fluttershy doing this? :facehoof:

Was NOT expecting this.

Also, remember to start a new paragraph when someone different begins speaking.

At first I was like :pinkiesad2: and then I was like:rainbowhuh: and then I was all like :pinkiesick:

What is this I don't even, and sadly I am curious where this will lead too? Hopefully nothing cupcake based...

At first i thought it was an altered version of cupcakes. REALLY got me hooked.

:flutterrage: MOAR, GIVE ME MOAR!!!!

It's always the quiet ones you need to worry about...and fear.

ha ha i have no idea what i just read :pinkiecrazy:


This is the face I was left with for about 3 minutes after I finished reading this chapter.

No, there will be no deaths/gore if that's what you're referring to.
This is a clopfic, not a horror fic.

Glad you liked it.
One of the reasons I decided to write this was that I felt there was a lack of watersports clopfics, and kinky stuff in general.

This made me laugh so much. Generally when I am reading anything pornoliterary I am doing it for a laugh, not for arousal. This is rather well written, and the only real issue I have seen is that mistress moon has been being taught how to speak normally so as not to be feared by everyone.

Pretty good characterization. Interesting character choice (still don't get why people think Luna the old fashioned would enjoy anything like this). Fluid if not the most vivid imagery. BEST METAPOD METAPHOR EVER. I gave it a 4 out of 5.

Who am I? I am Not. The rest of the internet might know me by another name, but as a brony I am Not.

I'm flattered that you think it's well-written. It's basically the first fic of any kind I've written, and I know there is room for improvement, but at the same time I felt I couldn't spend too much time on each part or it would take too long and never get anywhere.

As for reading clopfics for the laughs, I tend to do that too. I just can't help laughing at the use of words like "hot member" or "pulsating rod" (which I beieve I used myself at one point) when reading the sex parts in clopfics. It's hard to avoid using them without becoming too monotonous, but they're just so cliché. You have no idea how many times I laughed and facepalmed while writing this. :rainbowlaugh:
At some points I considered using more silly penis-synonyms, such as "wang", "dong" or "johnson", but they just didn't seem appropriate.
I do have some more humorous and original dick-words planned for later use.

As for characters, there will be more characters involved later. The S&M club (they haven't told him that's who they are yet though) is only the first part I have planned, and the next two chapters at least will involve Luna and Pinkie Pie. However, I also have plans for later chapters involving among others Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash and Rarity. (Not necessarily at the same time)

As Pinkie Pie mentioned, Luna is just visiting from Canterlot, and is actually a member of her own S&M club there. For some reason, I always thought of the canon Luna as having a rather dominant personality (she does act like it in Luna Eclipsed), and it seemed logical to me that she would be the type who would be into bondage/S&M in a dominant role.

I can't wait for more of "Ze magics!" :coolphoto: I can't wait to see what Luna does :twilightblush:

I. This. Uhm.

I...I'm definitely not one for this type of clopfic, but it is written nicely. I can see why others would like this.

Yeah, obviously it was never intended to appeal to everyone.
There are already plenty of the more vanilla clopfics around though, and more being written all the time, so I see no real point in writing another one of those.
Instead, I choose to focus on writing about more interesting, kinky and out of the ordinary situations, in a way that doesn't take itself too seriously.
Preferably ones that haven't been done a thousand times before.

In case it wasn't obvious, a major fetish of mine is watersports, so there will be lots of that.
What I've written so far is only the beginning, and barely scraping the surface of inventiveness compared to what is to come.

I greatly appreciate any feedback, whether it is along the lines of "What is this I don't even..." (makes me chuckle) or "GIEF MOAR!", and have been positively surprised at the number of views this has gotten in the relatively short time since I posted it. :pinkiehappy:

Sexy indeed, though her new "wet mane" look from "Sisterhooves Social" is even sexier.
I'm planning on writing a chapter with some "wet Rarity" action.

Oh god, is there gonna be like...rimming, or pegging or something else? :applecry:

Why do I read clopfics

I don't even

32681 im wondering this myself.

I wasn't planning on either, but I can't entirely dismiss the possibility either.
Lesbian dildo/strap-on action is more likely, but if there is it will more likely be taking place in the background, than anything focused on.
After all, this fic maily focuses on Spike as the protagonist.

Presumably, you must have derived some sort of amusement from it, or you wouldn't have bothered coming back. :derpytongue2:

For a good laugh? I know I do.

Anyway, I'm rather looking forward to writing the next chapter, which will be taking things away from the more conventional sex of the previous chapters (lest it be too much of the same thing), and into the realms of inventiveness.

I'm thinking the same thing

At first when reading this entire story I was like :rainbowhuh: Then I was like :rainbowhuh:

Heh... there I was, thinking that pinkie's party would be some bigass orgy. Thinking that spike would rape both rarity and sweetie AT FULL FORCE.

Son... I am disappoint (if you don't continue this story, that is).

:rainbowlaugh: this is great, my sides are hurting from reading the predicament that spike got himself into. But then again he should be happy and enjoy this, it's not every day that you get to f*ck a princess and have her use the "royal wee" on you. :rainbowlaugh:

Comment posted by Xtermanator@deviantart deleted Jun 20th, 2015
Comment posted by Xtermanator@deviantart deleted Jun 20th, 2015

ohaw fgawd, i think i need the acid for my brain, but i will put on my sceince facticous face to say,

good clopfic, and nice effect with fluttershy, altough kgdmr would kill you if he found that part out, then me for reading it!:rainbowlaugh::fluttercry::derpytongue2::facehoof::scootangel::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp:

I find this strangly erotic :moustache: is that bad?


Comment posted by Xtermanator@deviantart deleted Jun 20th, 2015

I'm not sure if you mean this in a *liarjack.gif* way, or seriously, but either way, I can say that there almost certainly won't be any scat.
Why? Because it just isn't my thing, and I don't think I could write a clopfic about something that just doesn't turn me on, so I'll leave it up to someone else to write scat-fics.

The next chapter will be a wrap-up of the S&M club "arc", and probably will not contain any actual intercourse, though there will certainly be general sexiness.

After that I might create a new sequel story for the following chapters (which will no longer take place on the same day), or possibly change the title of this one to something other than "Spike's Day Off".

:ajbemused:Lets see if I can end this before it begins...*Loads 3 rounds in empty revolver, points at screen, pulls trigger**Click* :fluttershbad: Fuck :raritydespair: Fine I guess I'll give it a shot :twilightangry2: uggghhhhh

My reaction after the second sentence.....:facehoof: so it begins

lol Nice one spike excellent recovery :rainbowlaugh:

:ajbemused: Great I knew what I was getting into now I have to follow through. :twilightsmile: Curiosity and boredom..:flutterrage:YOU SUCK!

:ajsleepy:The only way you're writing can be this discriptive...:ajbemused:is if you had experience. I'll admit though, not my cup of tea but I did get a chuckle out of it. :ajsmug:

Royal wee lol nice one.:moustache:

:ajbemused:Not gonna venture into this weird part of the brony community again.

you know you liked it, you reached chapter 5 :trollestia:

what a :twistnerd: (u c wut i did der) :flutterrage:??? :pinkiecrazy:????? (insert non exisent luna icon ...) ????? :rainbowhuh:

ive heard of luna rape and pinkie rape, but ive neva heard of flutter rape :rainbowhuh:

Comment posted by Xtermanator@deviantart deleted Jun 20th, 2015

Reading can be morally wrong? :rainbowhuh:

As they say, you can't please everyone.
In any case, I don't think I will be able to top the wackiness of chapter 5.
At least not in the next few chapters.

If i were spike I wouldve braeathed fire onto Luna's "Mound" just to see what would've happened.

That wouldve made for a very counfused celestia:rainbowlaugh:

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