Don't understand why most Griffon's have to be such dicks. Razor was cool though.
Good chapter.

Razorwing was a pretty cool character, she was nice :D I like her!
And this was a cool chapter, that bit with the changing their clothes...

Heheheh eue
Nice job!

Wow... I hate to say this, but this guy really is a pansy.

I would find it difficult to be afraid of a pony, just their eyes the size of a human head is enough to make them seem less fear-inducing.

But, perhaps I would fear them if I got hit by one...

5882851 Getting hit by one that travels at who knows what speed, I would be slightly afraid of them.

5882881 I would for a little bit, then I be reminded how adorable they are by hugging the Princess of the Sun.

I liked this chapter. I see how he's starting to open up just a little bit, that slightest crack in his emotional wall.
I happily await the next chapter. And it's Pusspuss' turn to update nau :v

Much good,
Very like.

I like the gradual development of this story. Looking forward to more.

alright, i had to stop mid chapter to write this because i cant imagine most people putting up with this situation.
Spitfire hospitalized him before he even got to their house and the first thing she does in the morning is dump water on him while he sleeps, while still holding grudge against an accident. i'm going to finish reading the rest of the story but i cant see anyone who would sit there and take it and not snap. Screw the housing issue, and screw spitfire.

Post Edit* Ok, Celestia's ambiguous answer would have left a curiosity that would give Spitfire a chance to explain herself, but personally, I'd still be cautious about approaching her either physically or philosophically.

Story seems good so far, though there are some things that could be done better.

The flow is a little off, it's not easy (and I'm not good at it either), but it sounds like a list, particularly in the first half of this chapter. Just pick a paragraph and count the sentences that start with "I (verb)". There are some better examples in the FAQ writing guide about the difference between "showing" something to the reader and telling them.

The other thing is you seem to have a case of lavander unicorn syndrome. Though it is very minor, it kind of disrupted the flow of the story at certain points.

I'm curious to see where the story will go.

5869662 Still wouldn't be afraid.

Bloody pancakes...everywhere you go and read its always pancakes for breakfast...don't you peoples ever eat anything else beside pancakes. :O

5885397 Because pancakes are delicious and waffles are gross.

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5886414 HA...you lose...as you can see i managed to get 3 thumbs up on my comment and no thumbs down...so whatever you said about pancakes and waffles is WRONG now wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee =D =D =D

5887714 Ha. Then those people haven't looked at Enigmatic Otaku's comment about it being the Season of Pancakes.

5887733 I love this story.

Please keep up the good work sir :)

5887733 Pfff...that's just a creepy drawing someone made...also my thumbs up have increase to 5...so resistance is futile at this point.

ACCEPT YOUR DEFEAT O_O

5889001 I'll never accept defeat.

5889659 ACCEPT DEFEAT O_O look my thumbs up has jump up to six.

5889665 I'll accept defeat if it reaches 15.

5889668 Pancakes are evil...and cause diabetes...ehhhhhhhhhhh :P

5889676 What doesn't cause diabetes?

5889740 Water :3

5889751

5889771 what its true X3

5889786 I know it is. I wasn't really expecting to be given the obvious answer.

5889792 hehe

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I'm pancake!

Like the cover art.

5917325 Thank you. All credit goes to Pusspuss for making it.

5917514 MOAR YA SICK FUK! You do make interesting stories. Definately favoriting :)

5882240 DAT PIC THO

Im loving the story so far.

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5917325
Meh. I give it a 4/10.

5921841 I give the artist a 3/10.

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I give it a like outta like/dislike.

5922112
Hmmm... Maybe.

5922350 Anyways, don't you have my chapter to read, or writing your next one instead of complaining? If you also end up moving their tails, I want in on that.

5922469
Hahaha. We will see. But yes I have to start working on my chapter.

5922485
We're distracting Puss with our comments and stories, now Puss will never get anything done!

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5922485 Then Puss needs to do what I did when I watched his stream and read his story.

This chapter was better, though Spitfire is still being a prat, I was confused by something.

she was angry at Mark because he saw her taking a shower, but wasn't angry when she allowed him to watch her change?

I hope whatever secret she's hiding can make up for her attitude. I'm still on the fence on that one. . .

So why can't he press charges on Spitfire for assaulting him?

Her name is Steel Wing.

Is she Super Effective at her job?

Ya no, this story just doesn't cut it for me. It seems very average and brings nothing new to the table. I would be more pleased if the Human OC wasn't such a pussy though. I'm not talking about some overly-macho superpowered human OC-that's ridiculous. Just a OC that doesn't take shit from ponies with Spitfire's attitude, gets a job and housing on his/her own power, and describes the hoops and difficulties associated with (at least) semi-integration into a established location. I'm just glad I'm not reading another "Human OC lives in Mane Six's house who is the designated love interest right off the bat" formula which is overused as fuck.

Meh, at least the story is written well enough and solid storytelling. The characters are believable which is always good. It's a fairly standard, run-of-the-mill HiE fic I would recommend someone new to the fandom.

Best of luck to you.

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I had to stop mid-read too for the same reasons and more. I don't plan on finishing it, I've read enough like it. It's a decent story.

5883731
That's the silver lining here. Gradual development. It's good gradual development and not some rushed crap.

5884357
Dominant? Hot indeed. But this punk attitude is a huge turn-off especially when you're not even friends. As a couple, sure. Otherwise no IMO.

Spitfire’s back was turned to me, but I could hear the scratches of a quill on parchment. She seemed deep in thought as she wrote on that parchment.

Friendship report?

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I like the gradual progress they are making in opening up to one another.
Will continue to read.

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Not all of them are adorable and lovable. Look at the Flim Flams, Blueballs, Suri, Starlight, most Nobles... Also why does it always seems like that most of the asshole ponies are Unicorns.