6489132 Because they're really close friends. They're also close together because I have it work with ponies being more intimate with each other depending on how good friends they are.
I nice chapter. Been awhile since the last one. Can't wait to see more and good job as always.
On a side note I wonder what Mark is going to do with getting back at Luna and Cadence? Get help from Spitfire and Fleetfoot to prank them? Or doing something more devious? I can't wait to see what he could come up with next.
Again, I went to answer before a loud pop sounded near her. I saw Fleetfoot’s feather levitating in front of her, making me chastise myself for forgetting it back at the throne room.
Did she suddenly become a Unicorn for a few moments?
6522125 yes we all do care about the stories that's why we read them I know you said there was going to be two more chapters and I'm really really miss not getting to know what happened on the date please don't end the story this way.
Oh please don't do that, this is damn good writing. Please,this is fucking awesome,one of the best stories on the site! Why would you think this was in any way bad?
Don't do this now. Do NOT do this now! You're gonna be one of those guys that writes a fucking amazing story and cancels it right before the end? This is too good for that!! Don't be that guy!
6522125 6522702 6522769 6522807 6523105 As of right now, the cancellation is only temporary. I have yet to come to a decision, but setting it to cancel will help me to decide what happens with the stories.
6523168 Because it wouldn't get the desired result that I want. Hiatus, to me at least, means that I will come back to it. With a cancel, then it shows a chance of no continuation and I need to know if that is something I can deal with.
6650875 there is really no need to downvote a story for things like that, if you dont like it then whats the help in downvoting the author which would just make them feel worse and be less motivated to improve? No logic. Unless its genuine shit like "Twurlite spurkel said hello and then raritio got married the end" then just post the comment and thoughts and then yknow... go read another story? Ive read a fucking truck load of fics and Ive only downvoted 2 or 3 in the entire time ive been here, most of the time there is just no need.
While some situations are incredibly cringe worthy. This isn't a bad story. Yeah Mark is really Gary Stu to me, and stupidly dense to a point where I believe if he jumped off a roof the ground would crack, he'd get up, brush himself off and go about his way like nothing happened. Usually if a character has way to much going for him I stop reading a story. But I don't see very many spitfire x human stories and this is a first for Fleetfoot so I'm willing to shrug and read it anyway because it's still decent even if not cheesy as hell at times. You could do with someone to help edit and change a few things around, especially when I see the over use of some words.
I gave a small frown before leaning back in my chair. “First off, what you did was a little out of line in my view.” Cadence gave a hurt expression, her ears going flat until perking up again as I continued. “Although, if it wasn’t for that, then maybe I wouldn’t have reached this point. So I guess you kind of cancelled both the good and bad out.”
For me, emotional, physical, and mental manipulation of a human being is offensive to me because it is a violation of that human's free will and their ability to make decisions whether beneficial or detrimental. What Cadance did not only violates what it means to be a friend, but it also breaks whatever trust which she might have otherwise have had placed in her previously. Forgiveness is as easy or hard as you make it, but trust which has been broken is not easily or quickly regained, if it ever can be regained, that is.
Okay, so first off bless you for making a human x spitfire fic, seeing Fleetfoot enter in and take that first step not gonna lie surprised me. I was actually expecting Spitfire to make the first step.
Okay this out of the way. I’m surprised at the amount of bay sayers. I personally enjoy this fic so far, it’s an easy read, and honestly the humans in Equestria always seem to be dense so that’s normal, but I like this guy, he’s got a real feel.
Next, another praise. The fact you are making this this long of a story shows determination, and I like that in a writer. Plus I love long stories since I don’t really like them to end sometimes. This being said I do hope you completed this story since too many stories get left incomplete, especially the long ones.
Another praise. So I’m not gonna lie I have caught myself Awwing, laughing, and cringing feeling the pain of the character as he tumbled through this life. At first with how they treated him I thought I wouldn’t like the fic but I pressed on. Now I rather like it and am eager to continue my read.
Lastly, an observation. Okay so I made an observation when he was in ponyville, I realized you started the story really zoomed in, close up, just him, these two mares, and a few friends in the castle. It’s when you zoom out and see just how many friends ye really, has you start to realize that Mark is one of those guys that never met a stranger. This makes a remarkable glow around his decision to stay with thee two mares after how they treated him. He could have gone anywhere…. Like anywhere and had a place to stay. He knew this…. But he chose to stay with Spitfire and Fleetfoot, I think he knew that they were deep down very kind mares. His determination to bring that out and up to the surface makes this a great read.
Nicely done. Looking forward to more.
It looks great on this chapter
An amazing job as always. Keep up the good work!
This was a wonderful chapter, I really liked it, I can't wait to read the next chapter.
6489132 Because they're really close friends. They're also close together because I have it work with ponies being more intimate with each other depending on how good friends they are.
She makes him a suave hat with the feather sticking out of it.
this was a nice chapter
stayclassy
6489248 *Pats on the shoulder* Nope.
Not sure how foggy he can be on the whole herd relationship after that.
Next chapter is gonna be a treat I'm sure.
Also looking forward to his prank revenge on Luna and Cadence. I'm sure it'll be epic.
After the date
fleetfoot (pov) what are you going to do to me in a Seductive voice
Mark (pov) your going to get it
I nice chapter. Been awhile since the last one. Can't wait to see more and good job as always.
On a side note I wonder what Mark is going to do with getting back at Luna and Cadence? Get help from Spitfire and Fleetfoot to prank them? Or doing something more devious? I can't wait to see what he could come up with next.
Well now, even without the authors note it was getting clear shed make a return somewhere along the line.
Oh I so want to see how this plays out when Spitfire finds out about it and shes all like... OH no! And But maybe? And just freaking out lol!
Well done chapter man, awesome sauce work on this!
heheheh, love that feather bit, so awesome.
Caught up!
Very well done as usual. Can't wait for the date to happen, I await the next chapter!
Did she suddenly become a Unicorn for a few moments?
This was a great chapter, I really like this it was sweet and funny and I hope to read more of the growing love.
6498265 Cadence is the one that sent the feather.
I am hopimg for a herd for mark
Can't wait for the sauce ;)
Damn good
6515141 Yes it was.
Noooo...... please don't cancel this story its way to awesome to die now
6522125 yes we all do care about the stories that's why we read them I know you said there was going to be two more chapters and I'm really really miss not getting to know what happened on the date please don't end the story this way.
Oh please don't do that, this is damn good writing. Please,this is fucking awesome,one of the best stories on the site! Why would you think this was in any way bad?
Don't do this now. Do NOT do this now! You're gonna be one of those guys that writes a fucking amazing story and cancels it right before the end? This is too good for that!! Don't be that guy!
6522125
6522702
6522769
6522807
6523105 As of right now, the cancellation is only temporary. I have yet to come to a decision, but setting it to cancel will help me to decide what happens with the stories.
6523114 why not go with the on hiatus tag instead?
6523168 Because it wouldn't get the desired result that I want. Hiatus, to me at least, means that I will come back to it. With a cancel, then it shows a chance of no continuation and I need to know if that is something I can deal with.
6523197 ahhh ok just curious
You gon and made me shed tears of sadness
Is this still on. I really like it and would love to see more.
6571460 It is, but it's a long chapter that's coming up.
6571940 DAM bro be dumb.
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6574033 That was good. Very nice representation there.
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Maybe that's where Mark got the idea from. He was heading to a BAR so maybe he decided to pull a BENDER.
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...Tough crowd.
6574314 The crowd is always tough.
Ok cool. I'm really looking forward to it.
Just one tiny mistake I saw:
a moment,
Anyone have an idea when the next chapter is
6597802 Don't really have an exact ETA. I'm just going as I can, but this one does require a lot of attention to make sure everything goes smoothly.
6650875 there is really no need to downvote a story for things like that, if you dont like it then whats the help in downvoting the author which would just make them feel worse and be less motivated to improve? No logic. Unless its genuine shit like "Twurlite spurkel said hello and then raritio got married the end" then just post the comment and thoughts and then yknow... go read another story? Ive read a fucking truck load of fics and Ive only downvoted 2 or 3 in the entire time ive been here, most of the time there is just no need.
Dude this freaking story is amazing can't wait to see what happens to mark in the next chapter Ooooooo is going to be good
While some situations are incredibly cringe worthy. This isn't a bad story. Yeah Mark is really Gary Stu to me, and stupidly dense to a point where I believe if he jumped off a roof the ground would crack, he'd get up, brush himself off and go about his way like nothing happened. Usually if a character has way to much going for him I stop reading a story. But I don't see very many spitfire x human stories and this is a first for Fleetfoot so I'm willing to shrug and read it anyway because it's still decent even if not cheesy as hell at times. You could do with someone to help edit and change a few things around, especially when I see the over use of some words.
For me, emotional, physical, and mental manipulation of a human being is offensive to me because it is a violation of that human's free will and their ability to make decisions whether beneficial or detrimental. What Cadance did not only violates what it means to be a friend, but it also breaks whatever trust which she might have otherwise have had placed in her previously. Forgiveness is as easy or hard as you make it, but trust which has been broken is not easily or quickly regained, if it ever can be regained, that is.
Okay, so first off bless you for making a human x spitfire fic, seeing Fleetfoot enter in and take that first step not gonna lie surprised me. I was actually expecting Spitfire to make the first step.
Okay this out of the way. I’m surprised at the amount of bay sayers. I personally enjoy this fic so far, it’s an easy read, and honestly the humans in Equestria always seem to be dense so that’s normal, but I like this guy, he’s got a real feel.
Next, another praise.
The fact you are making this this long of a story shows determination, and I like that in a writer. Plus I love long stories since I don’t really like them to end sometimes. This being said I do hope you completed this story since too many stories get left incomplete, especially the long ones.
Another praise.
So I’m not gonna lie I have caught myself Awwing, laughing, and cringing feeling the pain of the character as he tumbled through this life. At first with how they treated him I thought I wouldn’t like the fic but I pressed on. Now I rather like it and am eager to continue my read.
Lastly, an observation.
Okay so I made an observation when he was in ponyville, I realized you started the story really zoomed in, close up, just him, these two mares, and a few friends in the castle. It’s when you zoom out and see just how many friends ye really, has you start to realize that Mark is one of those guys that never met a stranger. This makes a remarkable glow around his decision to stay with thee two mares after how they treated him. He could have gone anywhere…. Like anywhere and had a place to stay. He knew this…. But he chose to stay with Spitfire and Fleetfoot, I think he knew that they were deep down very kind mares. His determination to bring that out and up to the surface makes this a great read.
Sincerely,
Pony Clopperfield