A Royal guard, banished alongside Nightmare Moon, returns with her. This is his life after being thrust a millennium into the future.
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Ahh, the proverbial crap to the fan cometh! Exciting.
Also, 'A flash of pain briefly perched itself on the stallions face' is missing the apostrophe on the stallion's. Figured you'd want to poke it. :3
Well the murder plot-line seemed to have come out of left field, especially with how the previous chapter ended.
5595962 I thought I foreshadowed it a bit a few chapters back? Will have to go check. x.x
5595943 Thank you; will get it when I get a chance. :3
5595983 Aww yeah. I like where it's going. Barrier is gritty, and I like some grit. :3
Something tells me Barrier isn't going to be able to go though with his vengeance. I can see Luna offering no struggle against his attempt on her life and Barrier not being able to take it.
Definitely not how I thought Barrier would meet Octy. This is much better!
Great chapter, but there's a couple of things you may want to edit.
You may want to delete that quotation mark.
And that should be "stallion's".
Just waiting for somepony to remind him that he would be taking away not only Celestia's family, but Cadance's, and thus his own, in a way, since he and Lina will technically be in-laws after Shining and Cadance get hitched. If you want to make Luna suffer, you moron, you don't kill her.
(Stupid ancestors are stupid.)
What the fuck... he is clearly a psychopath since he just woke up one morning and decided to kill luna.
yeah the murder plot definitely came out of no where. I can fully understand him not wanting anything to due with Luna but this is extreme.
Also i REALLY do not like how you discribe nightmare Moon. NMM IS LUNA, no other outside force. Normally I would down vote and leave at the hint of it. But i read the alternate story of this so I will stay for now but as of this moment Anotehr Path is looking like the better story.
Ah, the chapter that introduced Octavia (as well as her father), and thus begins the misadventures between her and Barrier.😄
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Actually NMM had been shown as another entity. In the Comics. Admittedly they're not canon. But still it has been shown. And personally, I think the comics did what the show tried to do, Better.
Sorry but this is bull.
Was promising but now is just emo shock value.
Meh.