A Royal guard, banished alongside Nightmare Moon, returns with her. This is his life after being thrust a millennium into the future.
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Looks like Shining Armor, really interested in Twilight's cutie mark, named MAGIC Barrier. Well what his hunch is isn't hard to guess, suppose the "meat" will have to be the reaction. Only complaint I can think of is the chapters are pretty short, but no real problem
Nice chapter, but there's a few minor things you may want to edit.
I think all of those should be capitalized.
That should be "unicorn's".
And I suggest adding a comma after "majesty".
5552914 Done, changed, and done, thank you. :3
I certainly like the possibilities this story has. I would suggest you work on making he chapters a bit longer, or, in your case, combining a few. The grammar is quite good, and very fluent. Keep it up!
5554142 Thank you - I'm actually in the process of trying to lengthen my new chapters. Hoping to get to an average of 2200-2500 per before long.
First: after thousand years he wouldn't really have to work I mean he was in duty all the time... so thousand years sold is overdue.
Second: I see where this is going twilight is his grand grangrangran a whole lot of grans later grandchild
Would DNA even be able to be tracked after a thousand years? I mean, I guess it can/should, but wow, that's a long shot. (We all already know the answer, but whatevs.)
Slipped by the editors:
and me
EDIT
Chapter 9:
The dialog is great.
But it's missing the spark that the first chapter held.
Ah'm not talkin' about some flashy fight scene. Rather, ah'm talkin about feelin and whutnot.
Yer character sounds robotic.
Story is still good. But ah'm hopin' it becomes great.
Hmm, what's the blood test for DNA matching? Fingers crossed that
Twilight's not related.
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6147513 I agree...
6817580 Image isn't loading for me. My guess it that it's either a crowd face-palming, tactical face-palm, or double-face-palm.
I’m fine with others admiring Waifu, but if they hurt her, that’s another matter entirely.
So long as that doesn’t happen, perfectly fine.
This dude is owed so much back-pay...
Magic BARRIER, Shining ARMOR, Twilight SPARKLE. I see where the stallion has his mind. He's wondering if Twilight is his Descendant.