Sweetie is reluctant to go to a hearths warming eve party because its hosted by Diamond tiara and her dad filthy rich . But after being forced to go she sees a chance to confess her love to her crush Button Mash. However she is not the only one though. Diamond Tiara sees her chance to steal Button from Sweetie. Who will get button mash?. Who will be crushed? Most importantly who ate the last cookie? Find out the answers in The belle under the mistletoe
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Chapters (2)
Capitalization and punctuation: learn them both.
A bit of sentences without punctuation. Good shipping and characterization so far, though!
Without the grammer distracting me consistently, I would say this was a good chapter. You editor needs to get on your case, though.
Great start!
Why does this remind me of the Gala?
Yay good story so far
Aaaaaaaah suspense suspense SUSPENSE AAAAAH
Hmmmmmm, I like where this is going.
Oh no, diamond you stay away from button, you hear me you little B**H!!!!?!?!?!??!?
Good story so far.. If you don't mind a few suggestions
If you really want to see the story intriguing (this is my OCD talking here) you should really put capitals in your chapters
Ex. "I Don't Want To Go"
Idk to me it seems more official
And put a little punctuation
Other than that the story is going pretty smoothly
Just for you to know this is just advise nothing critical
Gah!
Stay back you fiend
Button Is all Sweetie's
YOU HEAR ME?!
All HERS!!!
Whoo got a bit carried away there...
Now... let me just say... I NEED MOARRRR!!!!
I see a lot of double spaces and no or incorrect punctuation some places. Also, some capitalization us needed. Other than that, I love this.
This is nice, I wonder why is it on hiatus. Still, since when would Diamond be interested on kissing a blank flank?
Please tell me this story is not going to be unoticed