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Books over coffee

Night loves his everything about his job except all the mares that pester him. But one mare may very well change his view on mares and maybe even the world.

Thanks to Bluegrassbroke for helping me with this story and even writing a bit of it for me check m out her Fimfiction page http://www.fimfiction.net/user/BluegrassBrooke

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Unstable Imagination

Unstable Imagination #1 · Feb 8th, 2015 · · ·

Decent start at a story. However, there is a mighty need for a proofreader and editor. The lack of quotation marks where needed, lack of capital letters to start a sentence, and the beginning of the story randomly going place to place made reading the story a bit hard. If you haven't already, you should read works by Pen Stroke or BronyWriter; they're pretty good at what they do.

All-in-all, not a bad plot from what I've read so far, but you should work on the kinks of grammar and spelling.

May you write on in the future! ~ Unstable Imagination

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