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SuperPinkBrony12


I'm a brony and a Pinkie Pie fan but I like all of the mane six, as well as Spike. I hope to provide some entertaining and interesting fanfics for the Brony community.

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Diamond Tiara has had it up to here with her mother, and her father's apparent refusal to do anything about her behavior! Unwilling and unable to put up with such nastiness any longer, Diamond does the unthinkable and runs away from home, leaving her trusty tiara behind in the process!

The filly moves into Carousel Boutique with Rarity, despite the surprise and protests of not only Rarity herself, but also Sweetie Belle. However, it seems nothing can change Diamond's mind. Reluctantly, Rarity agrees to let the troubled filly stay, for a while.

But when Diamond is kidnapped by the diamond dogs while on a gem hunt with Sweetie Belle, she will be surprised by the pony who comes to her rescue.

(Takes place after "Applejack's 'Day' Off" but before "Spice Up Your Life". Proofread by Smity1038 on Deviant Art, and proofread and edited by deadpansnarker on FimFiction.)

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Comments ( 32 )

not bad: not bad at all...

Well, I would have kept some of the more 'questionable' jokes, and substituted words, but good job all round, I think. :pinkiehappy:

Not much I can say other than, great job on this story. Excellent work on the exchanges, emotional content, action and wrap-up in all the right places. I'll definitely be looking forward to more of your work as soon as time and inspiration will allow.

7441812 Thank you for helping me with it. :yay:

7441835 Nah, I'd say all the credit goes to you. Well, maybe 70-80%... :scootangel:

THEME:

by Phil Spector, Ellie Greenwich and Jeff Barry
© MCMLXVI Trio Music and Mother Bertha Music, Inc. (ASCAP)
Courtesy of PolyGram Special Products, a Division of PolyGram Records, Inc.

This was a very interesting story, actually as Rarity herself might say it was absolutely faboo!:raritystarry: You pulled a impressive feat here, I don't like Spoiled in Canon, but here you actually have made likeable. For pulling that off alone and providing a great story in general, you get a fave.:raritywink:

7441971 It's funny how much I still dislike canon Spoiled, yet in the span of a month I've written two fanfics that redeem her.

7441901 Nah, here's a better 'THEME'

7441995 Hey, who knows? She may have some good in her, though I severely doubt it. She's only had a major role in one episode after all. Maybe there's some hidden backstory with her yet to be revealed...

7442002 Maybe, but I doubt it. Although I do subscribe to the head canon that her own upbringing was just as harsh, the only difference is that she didn't have enough self confidence and chose to submit for the sake of pleasing her parents. I also like to think she'd be a sort of "Even evil has standards" type of villain, as opposed to ponies like Svengallop and Zesty Gorumand who don't seem to care what they have to do to benefit themselves.

7442123 Possibly, no, probably actually. On another subject but still relating to the story, why did you make it one long-shot instead of dividing it into multiple chapters? Sorry, but wouldn't it be easier for people to swallow so to speak?:applejackconfused: Not meant to be insulting, just curious.

7442139 It probably would've flowed better that way, but I originally planned for it to be a one-shot and it was much easier to send a completed long-shot to my proofreader than to break it up and send the story chapter by chapter.

7442145 Ah, I see. Makes sense, I suppose.:twilightsmile:

7442002

To be honest, when a person is THAT much of an asshole I don't care if they have the saddest backstory in the world. She almost ruined her daughter permanently, and used said daughter to inflict what would be traumatic-levels of emotional damage on the other foals of Ponyville. She can burn.

7442878 Gotta agree with you there. I was just speculating.

7441971 I see you almost everywhere on this site, and it's amazing.

I hope they get my name right this time. The second part starts with an ‘R’

Took me a second.... XD

7449213 Hey, nothing wrong with being sociable right?:twilightsmile::twilightsheepish:

It's a good story *see the dislike* WHO ?!!

Why has nobody done a Christmas Carol parody with Spoiled Rich yet? She's perfect for it.

7727623 But who to play the three ghosts? Filthy Rich is probably a good Bob Cratchet, and Diamond Tiara could work a little for Tiny Tim (Spoiled's already verbally abusing Diamond, whose to say physical abuse isn't going on behind the scenes?).

7727662 I would want the characters to be themselves, not the characters from the novel. Something in the show's universe, like For Whom The Sweetie Belle Toils. I imagine Celestia, Luna, and Discord as the "spirits". Maybe the spectre of Spoiled's mom filling a similar role to Marley.

Diamond Dogs still get no dimension.

Twilight sighed at the growing consensus around her. “Oh, very well,” she finally caved in, before telling Spoiled. “You’ve got ten minutes. If you’re not back by then, we’re coming in after you, is that clear?”

“Of course it is, ten minutes should be more than enough time to teach those darn dirty dogs what happens if they mess with the Riches!,” Spoiled replied, as she jumped down the hole. The last thing that could be heard from her, before she disappeared from sight was “Hold on, Diamond Tiara! Mother’s coming!”

“Do you think we made the right choice?” Starlight pondered out loud.

“I sure hope so, for both their sakes.” Twilight replied, feeling just as nervous as every other pony around her.

Eh, maybe we'll get lucky and they'll kill each other.

8209558 Spoiled and the Diamond Dogs?

8210091 Yep. Then that's two problems solved.

It's about time someone made a story where Spoiled Rich isn't abusing her daughter and starts acting like a real mother!

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