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This story is a sequel to Harmonics-Legacy
After the Changeling Invasion and peace has been established in Equestria Princess Chrys of the Changelings now lives between her mother Queen Chrysalis and her father Shinning Armor, but with strong tensions between the two and the restoration of Ponyvile and departure of her teacher Twilight Sparkle soon both parents decide to take the other to court with their daughter's fate in the balance.
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The premise is good, at least.
Not bad....... Needs proofread though badly
Great story so far. I do agree with nordic though, this could use some proofreading. I look forward to you continuing this one.
Thirding what was above. Love the concept but ewe knead ay proof reeder badly.
I'd actually imagine Pinkie's theme was going to be something more along the lines of law and order. Even with the *dong dong* sound between transitions
Eh I wanted to read this but seeing that ppl still say you need to profread it I will wait till you do this or get editor
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Well this is the proofread version, and I might not be getting an editor anytime soon.
A little too much exposition at one time for my tastes, but the humour at the expense of Shining Armor is rather amusing.
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Well better sooner rather than later on the exposition so I tried to spice it up with a few jokes.
You are EVIL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great chapter by the way.
You did that.
You monster.
5336550 Yup
5336471 I am a monster
That was plain evil. I love it
5337449 Yup, I am evil