♪we'll have a battle!we'll go all in it!let's have a battle!bath!Battle!battle of the bands.♪
The Dazzlings return to Canterlot High, desperate for more power. After someone fixes their pendants, they're more powerful than before. Meanwhile, at school, there's a new kid that Sonata can't stop making goo-goo eyes at, while Adagio is more concerned about her own plans. Adagio comes to a realization that there's something quite familiar about this new guy. ...She knows him from somewhere, but she has no idea where.
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Remove 'and'.
Their.
Space after comma.
Than.
New sentence.
Capitalize Sonata.
Capitalize Adagio.
Change on to about.
plans. Adagio comes
Change in to about.
guy. She knows
Somewhere
Where.
Gotta be honest, with this many mistakes in just the summary, I'm not feeling like this is even worth reading.
If the long description is any sign, I'd better keep Weird Al's Word Crimes song at the ready.
5769709
Really rude comment, but funny nonetheless.
Ok, I gave it a shot...needs fixing then it would be interesting
5769727 he's always posting that video. Unfortunately, a lot of the stories he posts it on have lots of grammatical crimes
5769706
I have to agree. I'm wondering if English is even this writer's native language.
5771805 English is my first language if you think its that terrible i'll just delete and there done
5769706 there fixed the mistakes you have stated into what you said it should be
5770024
5769727
I am?
5774343 well, someone is. I guess I see your name on a lot of stories that have that video commented.
5775001 I've posted the video once. You might be thinking of ChangelingLumin.
5769709 if its that bad I'll just delete the story since everyone hates so much I don't really care if I delete it or not
6009220 Or you could get an editor and proofreader.
6009222 I need to find someone who has time for it,i've tried the writers group but no ones ever gotten back to me,but yeah I'm pretty aware of that I'll just have to try harder to find a editor
6009230 Well, you can always try the Looking for Editors group. Make sure to post your thread when there are 2000+ users online (as shown at the bottom of the pages). Or I could make the recommendation of Never2muchpinkie.
6009240 OK,thankyou, I just joined the group,you're a real help
5771805 English is my first language can't you keep your rude comments to yourself I have feelings you know and your rude comments just make me feel awful
Strange last time I checked this story had 5 likes 9 dislikes what happened to that 9th dislike because now its 7 likes and 8 dislikes
I don't understand why people hate this story so much.
The overall concept is interesting, (constructive criticism begins now) but it might be the fact that you tend to forget to put in a space after a comma or period. Other than that, keep it up. 
6166927 I typ my story's on my tablet so i can't honey say its easy for my to notice that
5776326 Did someone call me?
Crescent Souls' picture?
6129876
I know how it feels when most of the comments are about that you wrote something wrong