Today was chaotic in Ponyville. Apparently a new book came out that became really popular overnight. I managed to save up enough bits for this book. As me and Death Kitty strolled happily back to Sugarcube Corner with the book, Light and Dark in my hands, I bumped into Princess Luna.
(On a side not Light and Dark needs more views. Make it so!)
Anyway after that obvious attempt to boost views on the fic.....All right all right I'll shut up now.
I ran into princess Luna, who was still mad about the prank I pulled on her.
She didn't want to talk to me though and quickly trotted away. Now I should mention that earlier today Pinkie gave me one of her exploding paint balls, I'm sure you can see where this is going.
Anyway I took it out of my pocket and chucked it at the back of her head. BIG MISTAKE!
The guards that were with her took that as a threat and quickly subdued me. Now me and Death Kitty have found ourselves in the dungeons for a harmless tease.
Now after that obvious plot device/big lip alligator moment, a guard told me that princess Luna and Celestia had summoned me. I was lucky enough that they told them not to chain me up.
Guard: "Follow me please"
Me: "Are you taking me to Chuckie Cheese?"
I hope the guard has a sense of humor, mmmmmm Chuckie Cheese.
The guard ignored me and dragged me into the throne room, where Celestia and Luna were waiting. Celestia had a disappointed look on her face, and I couldn't help but feel a bit of gult.
Celestia: "Tell me why did you attack my sister like that."
The ice in her voice hit me like a ton of bricks. Death Kitty was hiding behind my leg. SHIT JUST HIT THE FAN!
Me: "It was only a harmless joke...."
Celestia: "A joke! How can this be a jock to you! Attacking a member of the royal family, weather it be a small tease or not is never a joke!"
Me: "But...."
Okay, I can tell you now being told off by Celestia is not a fun thing. It seems my stupidity had done it again. Back on earth I had the same trouble with the police, mostly it was just fun and games but I still got into deep shit with the law.
Celestia: "Didn't your mother ever teach you anything."
Now that statement slapped me in the face hard. I haven't told you guys this, and I'm sure as hell not going to tell the ponies about this, but I am an orphan.
I never knew my parents, I always lived from one home to another never really having a family. That's why I do the things I do, I just don't know better.
Well the cats out of the bag now, so I might as well tell her too. This is going to sting, I know it.
Me: "I.....never knew my parents...."
I was right it did sting, Celestia's mood had changed in an instant. First she was the strict dictater Celestia, and now she became the poor you Celestia. Lunas jaw dropped as well.
It's surprising how a simple sentence can have that kind of effect on both people and ponies.
I went silent, I didn't want to speak at all right now. Sure I might be nineteen, but I still behave like a child. Lucky me....
Celestia: "I.....I had know idea...Curtis why did you keep this a secret from us."
Me: "Because I don't like to talk about it...... You see, when I was born I was taken from my birth parents because they tried to murder me in a fire...."
It's strange on how I can remember my life from that time. I can tell you this isn't a joke, I still remember it well. It still gives me nighmares at night. I guess I must have blurted out that memory because the princess's were looking at me with long sad faces. I think I might have mentally slapped them in the face and then kicked them in the mental balls. My bombshell had completely stunned them to the point that they couldn't speak. Even Death Kitty was feeling sorry for me, he was busy rubbing up against my leg.
Celestia and Luna exchanged glances and started whispering to each other. Only an idiot wouldn't guess that they were talking about me.
I picked up Death Kitty and turned to leave when....
Celestia: "Wait."
I stopped and turned around.
Celestia: "I err, we. My sister and I would like to ask you if you would like to stay the night in the castle again."
Okay, now I know what you're thinking. "Why does he blah de blah blah Marry Sue," so stop trying to close your browser and continue reading........
I was stunned I didn't know what to say. I nodded and now I'm in a room at the castle for the third time.
(I'm sorry if there was no laughs in this chapter. I wanted to make another story arc. This can be a serious fic at times too.)
The end of part one.
Adoption, eh?
What will happen, maybe Luna adopts you or something else like this?
Hm, I think I'll just wait and watch.
Throwing an exploding paint ball at royalty isnt funny? I loled very hard even if you had to face the law
this was me reaction,
When I said, "is there nothing you can write that doesn't make me laugh." that wasn't a meant as a challenge.
But anywho whats done is done now and I look forward to whats next, bad and all.
Ha ha.
546069 There will be sad parts. But not in this fic.
bro what about mom???? and is that what really happened to you as a baby...I always thought it was just you being left at the hospital???? I'm confused now.
547462 Cory some things in this fic are made up. Sure this is based off my life, but not everything is true in this fic. It's the readers job to figure what is true and what is fals. Obviosly you failed, next time try to read in between the lines and try to find the hidden meaning.
547753 *derp* I can't really see the hidden meaning. Good fic by the way
547776 Being able to read between the lines and asking questions about certain aspects of your fic, is key to making it perfect. This is standerd grade 12 english, and common knowledge. Try to implament that into some of your chapters and ask yourself questions like:
Is this consistant with my story?
Are the charicters acting perfectly?
Should I add more detail?
What can I change?
Does this scene fit in with what I want to happen?
If you ask yourself these questions and read over the chapters you write before submiting it, then you have yourself a perfict fic. Now I will admit that I don't always use this method but I will try to do this in future updates. Also have a good dictionary with you, if you want to use a word and are not sure what it means then look it up. If the word doesn't fit in then don't use it.
Also make charicter maps to flesh them out a bit more before putting them into the fic. This is perfect for OC's that you want to make as it helps with telling you how that charicter will react in a given situation.
And even though I already said this, Proofread your work at least three to four times, and add any additional detail to draw it out more.
Anyway I hope you enjoyed this english lesson.
547999
Helpful advice to anyone.Thanks, Sahib.
547999 wow bro. you did something my highschool english teacher couldn't do, and actually taught me something meaningful and made it interesting. You should consider a job in the education industry my bro
548622 All teachers need at least 6 years of training in unaversity or college first. I don't have that kind of time.
a good chapter, regardless of the little bit of humor in it. cant wait for more.
Well, we always could go 'Onwards and Upwards.'
If you know what I mean.
551796 I don't Know what you mean.
The Mental balls part cracked me up
I like how your able to mix Funny with seriousness.