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Hmmm.... I really want to know what this story is so disliked. I would appreciate it if the people who disliked and the people who liked to comment. I need this to know what i am doing bad, and what i am doing good. I am an unexperienced writer, and need advice.
Nice redraft.
531161 so, i am doing okay so far? i am a very, VERY bad writer. I don't think that this is anywhere as good as a lot of the other fanfics out there.
but what do you think?
531373 I like it.
To be honest not the best ever 
but very good still. 
531403 trust me, i know this is NOWHERE near being the best ever. If you want to read a really good one, go to http://www.fimfiction.net/story/851/Living-The-Dream
I started writing my own fanfic because of this one. Then, I almost stopped writing because i would never compare to this. Still, i (think) i have like 6 fans out there so i keep writing. I have big plans for this series. I am thinking. i will keep writing this whenever i can. I will write this until i reach 1,000 chapters, or nobody likes it and i stop. I WILL get high up in chapters though. I take forever because i suck at writing, and i have to try super-hard to get just ONE chapter out.
531437 I know the fic.
Hell it was one of the first ones I read here. And convinced me to write my own story. 
Also I understand the stresses of wiritng. 
531473 Thank you for understanding, and re-reading. Did you read this before i restarted? if you did, i am sorry 'bout that. I just jumped in, not really having common sense and all that shnazz. I do hope you continue reading though. I need somebody around to tell me what i am sucking at. or doing good at.
531495 Ya I read before the redrafting. I had offered you my OC remember? It is ok if you dont. It was a while ago.
531505 o yea! i just looked at my messages and saw that. I can add him in next chapter, if you wish.
531515 Hey you are the writer. It is your story. If you still want to add him do it when you want to. I can wait.
531540 Well, get ready. Bass Chord is about to enter the world of Equestria, and crash into Faint.
Doing a lot better then the first run.
I have faith that this will develop into something really good
531557 Thanks for the pep. I need it to keep going, like a train. OHH!
" ALL ABOARD THE COLE TRAIN, WOOT WOOT!" - Gears of War 2, Cole.
531550 Ouch! That sounds painful to me.
531572 don't worry, Faint cushions his fall. He will be hurt way more than Bass.
531584 We shall see.
531597 as you can see, i didn't do it. I decided to change it, because i forgot he was an earth pony.
..I dont recall that ever happening but that is so what I would have done.
533577 recall what happening?
533583 The encounter with faint. Lol. I was making a reference to Futurama.
533585 oooooooohhhhhh.
So what do you think so far? have I potrayed him okay enough? or should i re-do it again?
533637 I think you portrayed him perfectly. He would be shy but once he would think Faint is cool he would joke nonstop. [Even to the point of being annoying.]
He loves playing around.
533645 Thanks! I'll keep the joking in mind..... I have something real mean planned now, as a joke. There will be cupcakes, Vinyl Scratch, Pinkie Pie, Celestia, Rainbow Dash, and Applejack. Now you KNOW something big is going down.
:vinylscratch:
(I made the last one up. it's not real.)
533669 It should be though. And I can not wait. Oops look ar the time. Sorry I got to go do something. chat with you later.
Cant wait for the next chapter. 
533680 Sorry i take so long to update. I still have school and I hung out with my friend and brother for a bit. I will get started tonight or tomarrow though.
541313 Dude no prob. Take your time. Like I said before I know how it is. I can wait.
The reason this story is so disliked is because you're moving a bit too fast with th plot here. Don't get me wrong, its a great plot, but maybe if you spread the first chapter into more like 3 chapters, it would get better feedback! Remember: show, don't tell.
Hey, would mind adding my oc into this?
562603 no problem. contact me sometime, and we could discuss.
561052 alright, thanks for the feedback. i think i could seperate and add in fillers and things.... well just have to wait and see!
564966 Happy to help!
564970 alright, my skype is: faintwolfe. Yes, i posted that publicly so that others who want to join can add me.
564963 I'll pm tomorrow k?
I have to get off in a few min so I can't do now.
565052 alrighty then. see ya!
ok this story is good, but slow down already you are going to go through your ideas fast if you don't slow down, but I like story and I am favoriting it, and also FIRST
566798 coolio, and i accidentally published this. It was one of my ideas, i need to work on it more.
566798 Well. I hope you know that my goal for this story is going to be over 1,000 chapters. That means that you guys will have this continuing (somehow) for over 4 years!
I need something else in life, so this helps me a lot.
this, was a serious D'AW moment...
568062 that is exactly what I went for. I need to show more feelings of passion, discomfort, happyness, etc.
Nice Chapter.
Why not Faint Chord.
But you may want to slow down a bit. Try and set ur norm early on. [I mean your pace.]
570497 alright. it probably will be like the next chapter. but a lot of people say that. What, perchance, do you mean?
Like, slow down the plot? Because if that's what you mean, it will be done. Or Ill try to. I suck at writing. 
570574 Give that a try and we shall see. Oh and cant wait for the next chapter.
Good story! Tracking.
Not bad, but you are in dire need of an editor. Maybe it'll help!
574313 that'd be nice. :D
Hmmm. Now what happens? I have been intrigued! And poor Shadow he gets a date for the heat. Hopefully he does not faint during the heat.....but if he does....
Who the hoof is Calyptico?
This chapter, to be honest, was WAY to short. It's perfectly fine, i get it was only meant to progress the story. However, you still could have draged it on a little more, it was just a overly convienient (pardon my crappy spelling) way to link the worlds. I'm sorry if it sounds like i'm ranting, but the point i am trying to make is that, the story is going too fast. I mean, you would expect something like "what is the meaning of life?" or something corny like that. It just seems your just trying to get to the point ASAP.
Rant that wasn't supposed to be a rant in the first place (again i apologize) over.
Good chapter. My only complaint is that the whole 'twilight has learned a spell that can see a ponies past' (cue pokemon move learning music here) was revealed a bit soon. It would be like telling everyone you have a flush in Texas Hold 'em.
Nice to be a part of this story!
Also, who is this Calyptico? 