The original story was going to be about a nymph who was nearly destroyed as an egg, and as a result was born with many defects, including a silver carapace. She was bullied by the other changelings because of this, and eventually driven out of the hive.
But then, when I came across the story months later after writing it (originally written July 2014), I realized that the whole story premise was terrible, so I made a slight modification to the prologue so that it would stand as one story.
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I think it was a great concept and would actually like to see a full story come from this and not just a one shot.
sorry for the thumbs down i just dont like it
and i agree with cssalpha but you need to improve some of the concepts
6106476 I hit the thumbs down button myself.
It's a awful story.
its ok
It would have made an interesting adventure to hear about the life of the changeling actually. Now I want to read it.
Omlette de fromage!
6107066 Oui!
This is actually very interesting. A little rough around the edges, but there's a very solid idea here that I'd love to read about in a full story.
Have a like.
This has potential...
I like it, except for the lack of backstory in the story itself. If I hadn't read the description, this story wouldn't have spoken to me as much. I don't thin you should hate it, this story serves as a great example of how you don't need a lot of words if you just pick them right.
6108283 This was just the prologue to the story.
6108291 Oh, ok, I was thrown by the fact that this has a "complete" tag and the chapter is called "the whole story."
6108300 It is. But for some reason that I can't comprehend, people seem to like this story, so I might just rewrite the entire thing and post it as a new story.
I do like this story and would like to see it continued. Either with Chrysalis's reaction to the chemicals or if you removed that ending and continued the part with the babies
6112149 Two options here: I leave this story up, or I delete it, completely rewrite it, and make it a long story. Take your vote.
6112169 Hm, as much as I like this, I would also like to see it continue
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Wait!!! I wanted to throw my own two bits in!! Wat if you kept this story, but wrote a different one about the same topic?
Also, I'm now broke......
Got any bits I can borrow?
6179504 I asked Meeester about it a while back and he said no, not unless I make it completely different.
6186594
Well, ok
But I'm still broke