• Member Since 31st Mar, 2014
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Sleepy Panda

Some people are morning birds, other people are night owls. Me? I'm some sort of permanently exhausted pigeon.


Pinkie Pie knows what Rainbow Dash has done, and she has no qualms about letting her know. The problem is, Rainbow Dash has absolutely no idea what she's talking about.

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Comments ( 25 )

Great twist at the end.

Eleven out of ten. Would read again.

Teeth. Brush 'em.:trollestia:

That's not a spoiler, Junie~:rainbowkiss:

6294151 :facehoof:

I'm half-tempted to delete your comment, but that would look bad. I'll just have to settle for beating you over the head with my pillow.

I only brush my teeth before I go to bed :twilightsheepish:
is that a bad thing?:rainbowderp:

6294161 Dentists usually say that you should brush at least twice a day.

6294164 Maybe I Should do that, I hate getting fillings :pinkiesad2:

You know what I did last summer?! What are you waiting for! :pinkiecrazy:

That was random. But I guess it's Pinkie so that's obvious.

This was fun to read. Good job.

Random, and a bit unnecessary, but still amusing. 7/10 and upvoted. :twilightsmile:

PS (Grammar Nazi alert!): Please learn the difference between a hyphen (-) and an em-dash (—). No, I'm not picking on you specifically— SO many people don't know the difference, and the two are not interchangeable. :twilightangry2:

6300244 I know the difference, but I have no idea how to insert em dashes. :twilightsheepish:

6300254 Ahh. Yeah, that could be problematic. If you're on a PC, there's an alt code for it (I don't know it, unfortunately). If you're on a Mac, it's option+shift+hyphen. Otherwise, you should be able to insert it as a 'special character' and then just copy and paste. Or you can copy and paste this one. --> ( — ) :raritywink:

6300274 Perhaps, but worth it if you don't want Grammar Nazis like me on your case. :rainbowwild:

6300277 Anything else wrong with the story that's actually fixable? :duck:

6300288 Well, since you asked...

I have no idea how she managed to whisper in my ear from such a distance and I don't want to know.

Comma after 'distance'.

I'd try to fall asleep again, but then Pinkie Pie would probably bother again.

Missing the word 'me' between 'bother' and 'again'.

I jumped up, startled, and reflectively dropped down into a battle stance.

I'm guessing you meant 'reflexively'. And since she jumps off the cloud in the next paragraph, you probably don't want to say 'dropped down'— it makes it sound like she got off the cloud twice.
Everything else is stuff I personally would have done differently, but it's your writing style, not mine.
Oh, and obviously the em-dashes. :rainbowwild:

Aw what a twist! I was hoping it'd be something sooooooo embarrassing!:rainbowlaugh:

Read this just before bedtime but not before brushing my own teeth. Soooo satisfying. Also Pinkie Pie spaghetti'd right in front of Rainbow Dash.


I guess Pinkie could smell it?

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