Twilight's curiousity, Pinkie's magic. (under construction!)

by Starlitomega

Twilight's curiousity, Pinkie's magic

Twilight smiled taking in a deep breath of fresh air. Strolling through the middle of Ponyville between her studies became a sort of ritual for her when she felt frustrated or just needed a new perspective on a spell she failed repeatedly. The green grass felt like lush carpet underneath her hooves as she took in the carnival atmosphere of the busy marketplace. Ponies all over conducted business exchanging money, words, and smiles before heading for home with their newly purchased goods. Her wandering eyes spied Applejack's stand and made a beeline for it.

"Howdy Twilight! You look like yer enjoying yourself this fine morning!"

Twilight felt her own smile brighten at the sight of her friend, "It's such a gorgeous day out today, I sometimes have to remind myself there's a world outside the library and go on a walkabout."

"Well ahm glad to see the bookworm in ya crawlin out now and again for a lil fresh air. Whacha needin today?"

"Hmmmm, Pinkie is supposed to be helping me learn how to bake later tonight. We hadn't really decided what to make but I guess we can make apple pie." Twilight reasoned. "How many do you think I need?"

Applejack rubbed her hoof on her chin, "Well for a normal apple pie it would usually take four apples, so why don't ya take twelve?"

"Wait, why twelve if I only need four for a pie?"

A wry smirk crossed Applejack's face, "ya never made pie before right Sugarcube?"

"No, but that doesn't change how many you nee- oh, extras if I mess up…. Right."

"Not if, when. Baking is easy when you know whacha doin, but everypony messes up their first pie, usually their second too. It's not really until the third that it all comes together." Applejack said.

"Sure, twelve apples then, how much I owe ya?" Twilight asked digging for her bits.

"Just twenty for you Sugarcube, honorary family discount." the earth pony returned with a wink.
Twilight pulled out her pouch counting up her bits. "Oh, maybe I should get a few less than twelve. I only have 18 bits."

"AHHHHHH!"

Both ponies glanced in the direction of the scream. Another shopkeeper's stall folded up with him still inside effectively trapping the poor pony and causing quite a spectacle. A few passersby stopped to free him from the accursed attraction while onlookers simply stared in amazement.

"Weird." the unicorn mused out loud. Looking back at her hoof she counted her bits again "Eighteen, nineteen, and twenty. Wait, what?"

Applejack took her bits and dropped them in the bucket while simultaneously passing Twilight the bag of fruit.

"Pleasure doin business with ya Twi!"

Twilight glanced back at her hoof incredulously. "But I only had eighteen bits a moment ago, what happened?"

"Eh, ya prolly miscounted is all, ya'll need ta get outta that library more."

Twilight stashed the bag of apples in her saddlebags. "Well, thanks Applejack. I hope you do well today in market."

"Bye Twi! If ya end up with leftover pie I'll be more than happy to taste some for ya!

~

DING A LING!

Twilight pushed through the front door of Sugarcube Corner. Trotting to the counter she Quickly scanned the shop but saw no trace of Pinkie Pie. Instead, she waved Mrs. Cake over to talk.

"Have you seen Pinkie around?"

"Oh no dear, she doesn't really start work here until noon. Celestia only knows what that mare gets into in the morning." Mrs. Cake replied with a smile.

Disappointment crossed Twilight's face. She knew that Pinkie would come over later but secretly hoped she could get a chance to talk to her beforehand about any other ingredients she may need, "Oh well, I'm here to pick up the baking ingredients for tonight Mrs. Cake." Twilight announced.

Mrs. Cake reached under the counter pulling out a bag containing flour, sugar, butter and the other assorted goods needed to make all sorts of tasty treats, "Here ya go! I hope you and Pinkie have a good time later!" Mrs. Cake said sending Twilight off with a smile.

~

Twilight traipsed through the library with the sack of goods eager to lay everything out nice and orderly.

"What's going on in here?" Spike asked peering around the corner.

"Oh hey Spike, the library looks great by the way. I'm just setting everything out for tonight."

"Tonight? What's happening tonight?" The dragon asked dumbfounded.

"Remember? Tonight Pinkie's coming over to help me learn how to cook! I have so many books about it but I know it would be much easier and safer with an experienced chef around. You better get going soon too Spike!"

Spike scratched the side of his head trying to jog his memory. "OH! That's right! Tonight I'm going to Rarity's to help with the all nighter. Can you believe she promised five dresses in two days?"

Twilight placed the final apple on the counter. Taking a step back she surveyed the nice and orderly piles of ingredients satisfied everything would be just where it needed to be, "This is Rarity we're talking about. I'd be surprised if she set a normal deadline."

"Oh, right, I guess you do know her. I'll go ahead on to her house. I hope you and Pinkie have something good for me when I get back tomorrow." Spike said waltzing toward the door in a love struck daze.

"If I know Pinkie it probably won't last five minutes from the oven." Twilight muttered to herself moving to the main area of the library. The sight of every book being in its perfect spot became too much for her. Using her magic she pulled a book from one of the shelves dropping it on a table. "I've been meaning to get a little more study time in. I'll just read this for a while until Pinkie gets here."

~

Three hours later the table Twilight occupied now supported more than twenty books and three notebooks with different notes cross-referencing different events among the books. Working feverishly she scrambled through one book about ancient magic while making notes on its effects in another book on ancient Equestrian history.

"Twilight!"

"AHHH!" The table, the books, the pencils and Twilight flew as she lashed out with her magic thanks to the shout behind her. Pulling herself out the mess of books she shot an annoyed look at the pink mare standing over here with an indomitable smile. "Pinkie! This is a library! You shouldn't shout!"

"I know that, but I've been calling your name for like two whole minutes now! Do you know how long two minutes is in Pinkie time? It’s like… forever!"

Stepping out of the mess Twilight cringed, half in shame of her obliviousness, and half in pain from the pile of books she shook off. "Sorry, I kind of get wrapped up in my studies when I'm on a roll."

"Yeah! You’re so adorkable buried in your books." Pulling a baker hat out of nowhere she placed it on Twilight's head. "That just means you'll make a great baker! Let's get cookin!" Pinkie said dragging Twilight to the kitchen.

~

A fine white mist of flour covered the kitchen as Twilight pulled the third and final pie from the oven.

"Oooh that looks great Twilight! I can't wait to try this one!" Pinkie said bouncing excitedly.

"You said that about the last two." Twilight grumbled gesturing towards two burnt pies on the counter. In her mind she had to admit this one held the most promise of all as it actually looked like an apple pie and less like an ashen cinder.
The moment the pie hit the counter Pinkie carved out two slices placing them in different plates.

"Be careful, it's hot!"

Glancing back at her own plate Twilight used her magic on a fork to carve out a small piece. She blew on the piece of pie to cool it a bit before trying to down it remembering the last time she failed to do so and couldn't taste anything for a week. Biting into the pie she tasted the juicy apple filling and the flaky lattice covering. In fact, everything seemed spot on except the bottom crust. Instead of being flaky and crisp it was a bit gooey and soft. Placing the plate down slowly her ears fell as her nose inched towards the ground. "Who would've guessed baking would be so hard?"

Pinkie moved over to Twilight grabbing her in a hug. "Oh Twilight, you did a great job on this one, the crust could use some work but you'll get the hang of it. Nopony gets pies right the first time, or even the second, usually not the third, sometimes-"

Twilight mentally drowned out Pinkie as she explored her thoughts. "Applejack was right about the third time usually being the one that comes together the best but it still isn't where it needs to be. Maybe I'm not cut out for baking."

"Twilight! Are you okay?"

Looking back up at Pinkie she saw concern in her eyes. "I think I lost you there for moment."

"I was just thinking to myself, maybe we should call it a night."

"Don't let it get you down." Pinkie's eyes lit up. "We should do this again soon! I know you'll get the hang of it if you keep trying!"

Pinkie's normal enthusiasm failed to rub off on Twilight. "Yeah, maybe we should. I'm sorry Pinkie. I'm kinda tired, I think I'm going to get some rest, just leave the kitchen as is and I'll take care of it tomorrow." she said heading for the stairs.

"Good night! I hope you have some awesome dreams!" Pinkie called out to the dejected mare.

~

Twilight awoke to the smell of pancakes filling the library. Shaking the cobwebs from her mind, she walked down the stairs. Moving through the main area of the library she noted the mass of books and pencils had been cleaned up. Poking her head into the kitchen amazement spread over her face as she took in the spic and span cleaning job mysteriously administered in her absence. "Wow Spike, you did an amazing job of picking up. I didn't mean for you to clean it up by yourself though."

"Clean what up?"

"The mess Pinkie and I made last night, this place was a disaster! Not to mention the pile of books I left in the library area. "

"I didn't clean anything up, it was like this when I got in. Except the pancakes I'm making of course." He said making a show of flipping the pancakes.

"Looks like Pinkie stayed behind after all. I owe her thanks AND an apology."

"Don't worry, I'll be through with these in no time at all."

Moving back into the main area of the library Twilight's thoughts returned to last night's events. "I wonder why the pies didn't turn out last night." Recounting all of the events in her head she came up with only one solution. "I must've deviated from the recipe without realizing it!" Using her magic she pulled down several spell books glancing at their titles until she found the one she needed. "Aha! Personal prowess and powers of perception." Flipping through the book she found the spell she was looking for. "Observation spell: Used to enhance ones powers of observation to supplement their own innate abilities." The unicorn put the book to the side as Spike carefully placed the prized plate of pancakes and syrup in front of her.

"Breakfast is served Madame!" Spike announced in a faux aristocratic accent.

"Thanks Spike, they smell delicious!" Twilight said in anticipation of her newest plan. She really couldn't wait to try out the spell and see just how well it worked.

~

Abandoning her morning studies altogether Twilight decided to try out her new spell. Moving through Ponyville proved to be much more interesting with her new found observation spell. Her slightly glowing eyes scanned frantically trying to pick up every detail she normally dismissed without a thought. Her eyes fell upon Cheerilee's saddlebags as she passed by.

"Hey Cheerilee, you've got a tiny hole starting at the bottom of your bags, you might want to get them repaired at Rarity's soon."

"Huh?" Cheerilee lifted her bags inspecting them carefully. "Oh, you're right! Good eye! I'll head there tomorrow. A stitch in time saves nine after all. Thanks a bunch!" Cheerilee walked off with a smile.

"Wow that felt really good to help somepony like that." Twilight felt a smirk across her face. "Maybe I could be a superhero or something. The perceptive pony! Oh this might be fun!" She continued her jaunt through town until she came to Applejack's stand. "Hey Applejack, need four more apples today!"

"Sure thing Twi!" reaching into her stand she picked out four apples and placed them in the bag. "That'll be six bits!"
Peering inside the bag, a look of horror spread across Twilight’s face." Applejack, all of these apples are bruised!"
Applejack pulled out one of the apples and looked it over carefully knocking an apple off the stand in the process. "Are you kiddin, these are some of the best apples ah have in mah stand!"

Twilight pushed the apple into her friend's face and pointed to the bruise. "SEE? BRUISED!"

Applejack peered carefully at a tiny mark the size of a pin prick. "Sugarcube, I can barely see that spot much less tell if it's a bruise." Peering up at Twilight's determined face Applejack took a tentative step back. "Uhh sugar, are you ok? Your eyes are a glowin." She said apprehensively.

Snapped out of her concentration Twilight looked back at Applejack. A clear sign of concern etched across the orange pony's face. "Oh, that. I cast a spell of observation on myself. It allows me to see things I couldn't see before. I thought it might be extremely useful but I guess it has its downsides too."

Applejack rolled her eyes. "You crazy kook. In life it's better not to git wrapped up in the small stuff. You'll drive yourself crazy with things that don't matter."

Twilight sighed. "I suppose you're right." Out of the corner of Twilight's eyes she spied Lyra about to step on the apple that fell off the stand earlier. Just before she could say anything an indecipherable blur swiped the tripping hazard off the ground. "Huh?"

"What's wrong Twi?"

Turning back to Applejack she saw the same apple on the very edge of the cart. "Did you see that AJ?"

"See what?"

"The apple you knocked off earlier," she gestured to the ground. "Lyra almost stepped on it and it disappeared, but here it is on your stand!" Twilight pointed out the apple.

"Uhhhh I think all that magic is makin ya lose it. You should go get some rest."

Twilight passed six bits over to Applejack. "Maybe you're right. I'm starting to think this spell was a bad idea."
Walking away from the stand she noticed how dirty everyone seemed to be. In her mind she rewound through all the times she shook hooves with them and felt a bit sick at the prospect of touching such dirty hooves. "Now I know how Rarity feels everyday I guess. What about Pinkie? I wonder what I would notice about her with this spell active." Shaking her head she hoped she didn't see her. The idea of Pinkie being dirty or having some sort of disgusting habit scared her.

Something in her peripheral caught her attention stopping her in her tracks. Sweetie Belle sat with Scootaloo and Applebloom making large sweeping gestures while telling a story. She accidentally shook her scoop of ice cream loose from its cone while describing the size of a fish she saw Applejack catch last weekend. Twilight cringed at the inevitable disappointment sure to be caused by the plummeting dessert. Quick as a flash another blur swiped the ice cream up dropping it back into the cone. Sweetie Belle glanced down at the cone none the wiser.
Stupefied at the last second save of the dessert she barely noticed the flash move behind a stack of boxes. "Hmmmm, I have to figure this out." Twilight kept her eyes on the boxes looking for any sign of movement. The blur moved again from the boxes to a carriage. The carriage sat low to the ground obscuring everyone's view but Twilight's as she stood far enough away to clearly see Pinkie Pie hiding behind the wheel of the carriage. "Just what in Celestia's name is she doing?" Twilight wondered out loud.

The pink pony waited until the ponies outside the carriage started a long conversation before reaching around and tightening a loose lug on the carriage wheel that had nearly come off completely. Glancing around frantically Pinkie moved again to a bale of hay. Twilight kept her razor sharp eyes on her last known position just waiting for her to pop up again.

"Oh, I appear to be three bits short today." Mayor Mare said to a vendor selling parchment and quills.

PA-KANG!

A rock struck a sign on the other side of the street getting everyone's attention. The unicorn kept her eyes on the mayor sure in her mind that it was just a distraction. Twilight's jaw fell when a pink hoof carefully placed three bits in Mayor Mare's hoof. The vendor looked back down at her customer’s pile of bits. "Oh Miss Mayor, you do have enough, Look."
Glancing down she recounted the stack, "Oh it appears I do. Wonderful! I wasn't looking forward to going all the way back for three bits." Handing the money over she took the supplies and headed back to Town Hall.
Twilight spied Pinkie moving again behind a barrel. She decided enough was enough. Trotting over to the barrel she carefully craned her neck over the top to see Pinkie frantically looking left and right.

"PINKIE!"

"WHAAAAA!" Pinkie fell backwards onto the ground staring up at the unicorn perched above her. She grabbed Twilight and pulled her over the barrel with her. "Twilight! What are you doing, you'll break my cover!" she hissed.

"Break your cover? What are you talking about?"

Pinkie took a deep breath "I'm the element of laughter, I'm also the party pony, if there's no parties I have to make sure ponies are happy in other ways." She said proudly.

"Sooooo, you go through town stalking ponies?"

Pinkie's face fell at the accusation. "I don't stalk them, I just spend my mornings before work trying to make sure every pony has a good time and sometimes it means stalking ponies but I try not to eavesdrop, I promise!"

"How long have you been doing this" asked Twilight

"A couple of years now. It's a thankless job ya know! I have to use my Pinkie magic when nopony is looking!"

Twilight stared at the pony with a flat look, "Pinkie, you don't have magic."

The pink mare looked hurt at Twilight's dismissive attitude, "Sure I do! I create distractions, move secretly and make Ponyville a better place!"

"Interesting…have you ever done this for me?" Twilight asked already knowing the answer.

"Ummm yeah, I do all sorts of things for you…." Pinkie said with apprehension in her voice.

"Like what?"

Pinkie rolled her eyes. "Do you know how many times you walk through town buried in a book? I can't even count the times I've kept you from stumbling over a rock or a cupcake. Or maybe just rocks, you only once almost tripped over a cupcake. You also have a bad habit of sitting down on the edge of a chair, I have to push them forward otherwise you might fall right on your rump! AAAAAANNNND you leave the library door unlocked far too many times at night."

Twilight felt that last statement jump out at her, "A-HA! At night! You said this is how you spend your mornings, but what are you doing making sure my doors are locked at night?"

Pinkie shrank under the unicorn's gaze. "I can't tell you."

Twilight took a step forward. "What do you mean you can't tell me?"
Pinkie looked conflicted. "It's super complicated, I can't just tell you, it could change everything!"

Twilight felt bad about pushing the issue but simply couldn't leave it like this. "You know you can tell me anything, what's going on?"

Pinkie stared into Twilight’s face with her cerulean eyes, "You make me happy Twilight. I've never met a pony like you before. I wanted to make sure you were ok because you're so smart and nice and you brought everyone together and just make everything perfect. I feel something with you, something I'd never felt before. It's like a party in my heart whenever you're around and I never want it to stop." Pinkie looked down sadly. "I didn't want to say it like this. I wanted to say it when it was just us in the perfect moment. I wanted it to be special."

Searching her feelings deep inside, some of the words out of Pinkie's mouth echoed her thoughts completely. Even though the sudden admission caught her by surprise she knew deep down this had been a long time coming. Reaching a hoof down to Pinkie's chin she pulled her head up until their eyes met. "It is special Pinkie. I feel the same way when I'm with you. I think that's why I wanted to try baking. I wanted to spend more time with you." Pinkie's face slowly lit up as the words washed over her.

"Twilight, your eyes are glowing…"

"Oh, that. Yeah I cast an observation spell on myself, that's how I was able to spot you in the first place."

"Hmph! You cheater, that's not fair. If you hadn't done that you would've never seen me."

Twilight shrugged. "True, but if I hadn't done seen you then I it might've been weeks before we found out how we felt about each other."

"Not to mention before we could do this." Pinkie locked lips with Twilight sending a wave of sugar through her mouth. A deep blush crossed her face as she took in a feeling she had never felt before, locked in the passionate struggle Twilight felt a subtle change come over her. As Pinkie reluctantly pulled away she started to giggle.

"What's so funny?"

"I think I broke your concentration!" She sputtered before falling into a laughing fit.

Twilight realized her observation spell had been broken by the sudden rush of emotions. The blush returned stronger than before. "That's never happened to me before."

"Sure it hasn’t! C'mon, let's go bake a pie!"

Comments

[Wilhelm]

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[Chilly]

Sweet!

I was wondering when you would upload this. I read it on PonyFictionArchive forever ago.

Cute and funny. Upvoted and Fav'd.

[Aegis Shield]

Short, cute, and to the point. I like it.

[Drazen_Flames]

416493 one of the best comments to have been placed as first. I congratulate you sir
That and most excellent story. While I do love me my TwiDash, TwiPie is a very nice second.

[Gabriel LaVedier]

How beautiful! Another fine and beautiful Twinkie story

[Bridgebrain]

I love it You might want to pull out more time between her discovering pinkie and discovering her feelings. Just a thought

[Starlitomega]

416522
it means waaaay more than you know that you remember it and read it twice! hopefully the revisions i made improved it a great deal.
also, nice superstar icon, still one of my favorite games of all time. (number 12 in fact.)

416493
416895
while im certainly glad you like it, I'm not exactly sure i can take this any further. I thought, "what if Pinkie was an unseen force manipulating various situations to try and make everything go smoothly?" (not to sound like Peter Molyneaux.) I decided to couple it with the idea that Twilight wasn't a crappy unicorn either because this was during that sweet spot where everyone and their dogs were uploading stories where Twilight fails at casting a spell. So i chose her to discover Pinkie's secret machinations.
As it stands this is a complete work, but if given enough time and lack of new ideas i will certainly think about where it could go in the future.
Also I've promised on my current Twinkie fic (which is imminent) and i have to keep it going.

417246
The problem is this fic is extremely short. in the last few sections i hint that her calling over to bake with her was another way of getting more time in with Pinkie, but there really isn't a lot of time to build feelings in such a short span of time.
regardless, I'll look into trying to work in more hints earlier.

as always, thank you to everyone who reads, comments, or tracks this story and my others. It's the impetus i use to keep going!

[Chilly]

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First, not enough people appreciate Kirby Superstar or are aware that its' mechanics are what was used when Smash Brothers was built. Good to know you so easily recognized my namesake.

Second, I was never a fan of those 'Twilight screws up a spell' fic. She borders on being a Magical Genius in the show but she couldn't stop messing up spells in fan-fics. What was that about?

Third, yes I do enjoy this tweaked and polished version.

[Baby Seal Burritos]

Hey! I remember reading this a while back!
I like the revisions you made, and I thoroughly enjoyed the fic overall.

[Raynbow]

416493
This is EXACTLY how I feel
Along with d'awwwwwww
:3

[Wing Zero 032]

I have no words to describe how great this fic is

[Mayuhito]

Very cute one-shot. Loved Pinkie's super powered morning.

[Tspaztic]

good character development of pinkie pie and the short shipping scene was a nice addition to the plot. This was written in a way that could actually be an episode

[Pidgeons]

(The following is riddled with spoilers)

A common complaint I have with Applejack is the use of "y'all" to address one person, when it should only be toward a group of people. Granted, the mistake was made in the show, and I'm told that MLP isn't the only show that's done that...but it's wrong just the same.

Your attempt at insinuating that the entire plan to bake apple pies with Pinkie is a ploy to just be in her company is plausible, as in it's something that the reader can imagine on a stretch...but I think it would really help if the narration started to go into brief tangents about Pinkie Pie whenever the subject of her came up in Twilight's thoughts (Assuming that the narration is linked closely with whatever Twilight notices, thinks, and feels That's how I tend to read third-person perspectives that follow a specific character, anyway)..nothing blatant of course and certainly not every time she thought about her. Just enough that the reader might wonder what Pinkie's personality traits and mane has to do with the fact that she's baking a pie with her? Of course that's just a personal opinion.

Sort of on that same note, I find it very interesting that Twilight is so down about the prospect of not being cut out for baking, despite having absolutely no reason...other than being closer to Pinkie Pie, to want that

Twilight's reaction to Pinkie Pie's confession seemed to come out of nowhere. I can't excuse it on the basis of being a short story, because I see a lot of short stories handle this kind of thing better. It would just really help if Twilight's feelings for Pinkie Pie were clear throughout the story, even if Twilight herself was oblivious to it. Even then, a "Now that you mention it" kind of revelation is just...weird.

And that was not the best of places to end the story..

[Starlitomega]

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This is one of my earlier stories, I've learned alot since then and while some might say i should rewrite it, I realized from some of my other stories that you can endlessly rewrite old stories, but it's better to move forward. That's not me saying "NUUUUUUUU! YOU CATN JUGE THIS FIC CAUSE IT'S OOOOOOOOOLD!" because it's still here, and valid for criticism. So onward i go!

Applejack's use of ya'll to refer to one person is NOT technically correct, but she does do it in the show, more specifically, you can find at least one instance of this in "look before you sleep".
Grammar should always yield to characterization, therefore if a character is speaks bending grammar over a barrel, i'll try to emulate that every time.

regarding the perspective, if you look closely, i break perspective quite a few times, it's embarrassing to see looking back on now, but it's something that this story highlight's the importance of. One of the reasons i wanted Twilight to really want to bake well was to communicate that she wanted to understand Pinkie a bit better, and when you like someone, you wanna learn more about them. If you fail at that, it's only natural you might be a bit depressed, it also highlights Pinkie's trait of wanting to cheer Twilight up when she clearly shows her disappointment.

In considering the ending, I think somewhere in my addled mind i somehow had conveyed that Twilight had a crush on Pinkie that she didnt really notice herself. that clearly wasn't the case! So, yeah, outta left field, out of character. Also, i think that i wanted the ending to be kind of like Twilight and Pinkie walking off to the library together, sort of a "into the sunset" thing. It obviously didn't work the way i wrote it.

In any case, this story taught me the importance of timing, taking the time to build a relationship or hinting that one is already in the works, and the importance of proper speaker tags.

I hope that despite all these problems you could get at least some enjoyment of out of the story and thank you so much for taking the time to read it, and even moreso, commenting on it! The only reason i've gotten as far as i have is because of comments and suggestions like yours!
-starlitomega

[Pidgeons]

2057253

I'm aware she does it on the show. The "Y'all" thing I mean. And I'm aware that they do it in other works as well. It just makes me cringe. I don't speak in a country-western or southern myself...at least I don't think I do. Parents' both grew up in the city, but everyone that's ever lived around me my entire life has talked like that...if I see anyone ever use "Y'all" like that in real life, I'll eat my words. I've just never see it lol.

I didn't notice the breaks in perspective. Twilight's observation spell would have been really helpful :P. But even if I had, stuff like that I tend to forget by the time I'm finished reading a story.

I knew Twilight's reasoning for wanting to bake. I caught that, that's why I said it was "interesting" lol :P

There's been times when I defended the sudden formation of a couple, solely on the possibility of mental workings that have no evidence attributed to them at all..so I'd be a hypocrite to completly criticize that (but I did say further clues about Twilight's attraction "would be nice" rather than trying to play them off as absolutly necessary...and I'd actually have to read the story again to see if I missed anything.) When you really get down to it, I think, I think it's just Twilight's wording at the end.

It's Twipie...which there isn't enough of. Especially of this happy, sweet, non-super-weird nature. I've really come to like the idea of Twilight and Pinkie Pie together. Personally I think Pinkie Pie's level of intelligence rivals Twilight's, but her love for happiness and making others happy means a lack of interest in facts and logic which could often me detrimental to her purpose. Twilight on the other hand lets the numbers stress her to the point of mental breakdown. ....sorry I just really like this couple. I think they should be canon! and I think Twilight's observation spell should be canon. that would be kick-ass.

Anyway when I was first reading the story, I thought Applejack had given Twilight the extra bits and lied about it. I was about to congradulate you on emphasizing that the bearers of the elements aren't thee living embodiments of the elements. Did you mean for people to think that? ...completly blindsighted when it turned out it was Pinkie Pie. So if Pinkie Pie is a superhero, is she badass-normal or would you say she has superpowers? Anyway I think that's kickass. With Twilight's magical prowess, they'd make an awesome superhero duo XD

This probably sounds like a really random thought-prowess for something thought while reading the story >_<

Anyway thinks for the review of my review. That's extremly needed. I've only recently been getting out of the habit of sending stories I like "attaboys".

I forget a lot of things by the time I finish a story, and everything I liked about it becomes this meshy amorphous super-nova of goodness, and I end with difficulty in detailing that aspect. mostly.

I thought they were all really in character. They were definatly Pinkie and Twilight...and there just aren't enough stories out there where the characters aren't more than just shared names.

Oh and I forgot to mention: I loved out Pinkie Pie surprise-kissed Twilight XD ....a wave if sugar. That's just the right amount of risque.

I'm definatly taking a gander at you other fics :D Ones like these tend to be more my cup of tea than others. Specifically really happy and sweet Twilight Pinkie romances :P

[Starlitomega]

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For the y'all thing, you should watch swamp people... actually you shouldn't but if you want to hear that usage, that's where to hear it. Being from Louisiana and knowing people who watch the show, i can assure you it happens. Of course i tell these same people they shouldn't watch the show when they could JUST WALK OUTSIDE considering it's filmed less than 50 miles from where i live.

I LOVE twipie, it's one of my favorite ships ever and i do have another twipie fic. I also have an applepie fic (gasp! grab a pokeball!) that I'm particularly fond of. Also, i have an upcoming twipie fic that I've been working on that you might like, but the twidash im working on is taking precedence first. Keep an eye out and feel free to comment on anything, things you like, things you don't like, and things that just pop into your head from a story because such comments are always welcome here.

Starlitomega

[Pidgeons]

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I'm from southeast Missouri.
But as for your Swamp People reference, Applejack sounds more like she's from Texas than Louisiana. Though I haven't met that many people from either state.
Anyway...
This is where I eat my words. (as far as the y'all toward one person, is concerned). ....and they taste like rainbows somehow. so spiiicyyy...
Applepie huh? The only Applepie I've ever read....didn't actually end in a relationship. So yeah kind of disappointing. So I'll be sure to read yours. Some of my favorite shippings don't see enough of the light of day...or at least I'm not finding them. I read one Derpy/Twilight fic once and loved it, but never found another ever again. Well it wasn't really a Derpy/Twilight romance, the story itself was about something completely different, the romantic pairing was just something that ended up happening toward the end. Love Twipie, but it's sooo rare x.x (and I can go on for hours about why the pairing makes sense fundamentally) even Rarishy, which is made an extreme no-brainer by the canon itself, is way too hard to find.
Instead I keep finding....
Rainbow is pursued by everyone but ends up with no one.
Rainbow Humps a lamp post
Rainbow Humps a water melon
My Little Pony: Loveless Promiscuity is Magic... (Especially, heaven forbid, the mature content filter is turned off. Honestly I don't mind sex in fiction, even horse sex, but do they have to be written so badly and do the characters really have to be so indiscriminately slutty...@_@ ) I'll take the blue pill :P
...WTF Bronies? -_-0

I wasn't going somewhere with this. I'm just rambling.

[Pidgeons]

Second time reading this fic. Decided to do a massive search for Twipie, and felt like this was worth re-reading. It's more enjoyable than I remember. I should probably return to this weekly and read it again and again just to remind myself. o.o ....nah I don't think I'd do that but I'm still glad I re-read it.

Funny thing, I forgot all about Pinkie Pie's do-gooding and Twilight's observation spell. I was enjoying the story immensely already, content with the shipping when Pinkie Pie was baking with Twi

...and then come in the observation spell, adding a whole new element to the story and I was like "really? there's MORE to this? Oh yeah...that's right, there was.."
heheheh. It almost makes Twilight and Pinkie Pie superheros. The power of laughter and the mad scientist/magician. And then makeouts!

*looks at other comments*...why is my last comment before this one the last comment? This should get more traffic for a long time to come. >_> Maybe people aren't using the browse feature. That's the only way I even find stories in the first place.

[blakice54]

amazing + =

[Starlitomega]

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Hey, thanks. Twinkie is one of my favorite ships simply because they work so well together. I've got another in the works, but it won't see any real progress made until my current albatross is done.
And if you liked this one, you should check out Truly Irreplaceable. It's not a sequel or anything, but it is another look at twipie. People also tell me Taking a Chance on Love is pretty good too.

Glad you enjoyed!

[pegasistershorty]

2057628 i have seen it before

[pegasistershorty]

2057628 read two weeks

[Pidgeons]

3340262
Seen what? Sorry but it's hard to understand what you're refering to when you're referencing my entire post. I really need to stop being so long-winded lol

3340281
Ah, yeah, that would be a new one, right? Haven't gotten around to reading anything lately. this is my first visit to the site in like a month >_<

Post Script; I still don't like y'all referring to just one person. Y'all=you all. I'm actually all for this word being considered proper English rather than frowned upon by grade school teachers. Not used to referencing one person, though. I don't care who uses it...people from a staged reality show, real southern folk, whoever. I can't be convinced that it's how the word started out, and I think it's just an example of people bastardizing the English language. It's kind of like how people say "I could care less" because that's they heard the saying, when it was originally "I couldn't care less."

...wow I'm addicted to soapboxing.

[pegasistershorty]

3357705 Y'all used in public in that way

[Pidgeons]

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I know people do it. I just can't be convinced that it's anything more than people simply not knowing how to use words. I can't accept it being used toward one person any more than I could accept it if people start using "Ain't" to mean "were not" or "was not" (as opposed to it's actual meanings of "is not", "are not", and "am not".
Y'all is a contraction of "you" and "all." It doesn't get anymore clear than that. It's occasional use by southern speakers to refer to one person just comes off as a mistake to me.

Kind of like how "epic" is suddenly re-entering the English language as a completely different word than it was before. And the existence of "lololol," and people using the word "role" in the place of the word "scenerio" in an online RP.

[pegasistershorty]

3358908 i agree with what you say there

[SuperPinkBrony12]

Though not as good as some of your other works this is still fine. We all have to start somewhere after all. I can tell you've improved greatly since you posted this fic.