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All Secrets and Lies


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I was asked by a friend to write a story of sloppy makeouts between Twilight and Pinkie based on this image. So sloppy makeouts I have written.

When Twilight Sparkle finds herself once again failing in the kitchen, what will Pinkie do to cheer her up?

Rated teen due to graphic sensuality.

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This is obviously the highest caliber writing which should only be taken one hundred percent seriously. :ajbemused:

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What you say in jest, I say in all seriousness. This is a very good, fluffy yet sensual, a hilarious situation turned into yet another affirmation of love between two ponies who have been together for years. It's a beautiful look into the day-to-day lives of a Twilight/Pinkie relationship. :twilightsmile::heart::pinkiesmile:

The only thing I disagree with in this entire piece is how you labelled it 'Mature;' it may be a pretty intense makeout, but I think as long it's just a makeout, this could be rated 'Teen.'

Anyway, this was a fantastic first effort, completely new author who I have never heard of before. :raritywink: I look forward to your future works.

I agree with Krizak, this is really good. It has to be one of the best Twipie fics I've ever seen. Even outside of that, they're more or less in character, it's well written, well structured and a really good story to boot. I'm going to be looking forward to more from you,

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Why thank you, complete stranger I've never met before in all my days! I'm glad you enjoyed this little TwiPie funtime.
Maybe I'll change the rating. I just don't want any poor innocent minds working overtime here.

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Thank you. I'm glad that you liked it. :twilightsmile:

Yes... quite...

Hot stuff! :trollestia: But seriously, it was a fun read! :twilightblush:

Liked it a lot, always a fan of twipie fics.:heart:

Welp I read the whole thing, and all I can about this is...

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You make me feel bad.
See, I made a Twinkie fic, and it got all featured and shit, and I don't want it to be famous 'cause means I have to write more and better and often. It's fucked up. I can't continue it well 'cause I have NO idea what I'm doing and almost a THOUSAND people are tracking and I HAVE NO IDEA how to continue.
:raritydespair:
Help... me...

Ahh, that was good. Cute, not overly cloppy, but not overly safe, either. And I liked the brief introspection concerning the explosive properties of cake. And...

Pinkie just blinked, "You weren't trying to make it explode? I thought that that's what you did all day long in your laboratory and you just came over to do it in the kitchen this time with me."
:rainbowlaugh:

Anyway, a couple errors in sentence structure in the beginning. Nothing major, and it seemed to have been cleared up towards the end, but it was still there. And of course, there's the use of "drug" as a past-tense version of "drag". I don't understand why so many people use that instead of "dragged", the correct version.

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I know that feel, bro.

575043
This may be hard to believe considering I have a single one-shot up right now and that's it, but I know what you're feeling.
What you've got to do is first take a second to just breathe. Did you plan any of your work before you started? If so, go back and think through what you've planned, think about where you were intending to take the story and what your intentions were for writing it in the first place. If you get stuck, read back through what you've written and see if the next step doesn't present itself.
The pressure you're feeling is normal. Getting a lot of feedback and a lot of people looking at your stuff all at once is overwhelming and can make the whole process harder. It's critical at this point to just forget for a minute about those people and focus on yourself. Do you want to continue? Are you able to continue? If it is painful and nothing is coming consider taking a break. Give yourself some time to step back and think it through. If after some space you realize that you'd much rather be doing something else or that you don't think you can continue then let it go. People will be disappointed, not going to lie about that (I've read your story, and I am a fan) but disappointment only lasts a little bit, and I think that people will understand.
That's all I've got right now. Sorry if it doesn't help.

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Whoops. I'll have to go back and fix that.
I can't believe I used "drug" :facehoof: and even worse that I didn't catch it on my read through.
Thanks for the feedback.

Stop, Boner
Boner: No

This was so funny and cute. The characters were completely real feeling. Loved seeing Pinkie acting serious a bit when telling Twi she loved her. Really loved this one-shot. Great Job!:pinkiehappy:

:raritydespair: Why do I like all the ships with Pinkie Pie!?
Oh wait... *avatar*

TwiPie....contemplated this ship as I read....

And now I love it. :heart:

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It's because for one reason or another Pinkie is just so much fun to ship with everypony.
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Welcome aboard. :moustache:
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. :pinkiesmile:

Light, sweet, and fluffy--just like cake. Also a little spicy and a little serious, which is a nice complement. Kinda like putting hot sauce on your cupcakes, y'know?

My favorite part was when Pinkie got a little sappy after the EPIC MAKE OUTS. I just really like the idea that she'd do so, I think, that her softer side would be brought out by EPIC MAKE OUTS.

Wow, I can't believe I read this... Okay... this was good... I like it... I was getting worried it was getting too cloppy, but it seemed to ride the edge pretty well. Good job!

As noone seems to have bothered yet, here it is:
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Good read, and you kept it relatively 'clean' as well! :pinkiehappy::twilightsheepish:

I liked it. Very saucy, but not overblown. Pretty good story. :pinkiehappy:

This story is composed entirely of secrets and lies! :twilightangry2:

love it but it lacks clop for im a suporter of it its bringing more posebilaties in there well im of finding some more twipie

I love it, TwiPie rules^^

twipie is best pony shipping

:rainbowwild:

Twipie
Yield: Infinite
Ingredients:
1 Pinkie Pie
1 Twilight Sparkle.
This Story.

Directions:
Attach this story to the end of any "Twilight and Pinkie Pie become a couple" fic or fantasy.
Stir thoroughly.
Serve extremely well heated.

I think ive found my new favorite ship! :twilightsmile::heart::pinkiehappy: OMG LOVE LOVE LOVED IT

6216500 for when they got done with the frosting

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