After have been expelled from the Royal Guard, completly humiliated, Fire Punch wanders for Equestria until he reaches to the darkest place of all and meet the most nefarious creatures of all. There, he is confronted by the the most dark being that makes him a proposal that will completely change his life and his destiny. Fire Punch will be able to accept this proposal and sinking further into the darkness where he was already plunged? Will he be able to walk through a path even darker than that one where he was already?
Chapters (2)
Is this r63? Cause, if it is, you should tell us that before we read.
Such dark.
Much edge.
Very moral choices.
Wow.
Its too short in my opinion. But good.
Sequel please
King of the changelings so soon? And Chrysalis agrees to give up half of her army without an argument? This seems like something you could do later on, a few months after he became a changeling, when he rises in rank and stature. You also had a few spelling mistakes.
His name is Dark Hole...
...It sounds like the setup to an incredibly bad dirty joke...
I had to dislike the story due to the plot holes, typoes, and lack of character depth. If you fix the spelling and grammar errors, I can change it.
My opinion, no offense intended, sry
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Comical rape isn't funny to people with morals, and I suspect the you're breaking the rules of FimFiction. Could you please delete the comment?
4959853 I have seen much worse posted without people getting upset over it, and that comment has been there for a good long while. I don't think it really needs to be deleted...
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
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It would shove a fanfic rating up to Mature (I read the rules). A mature fanfiction is not what this is.
Whats worse is that it actually depicts the sex scene in progress.
Sequel please
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This is a side story. If you want to know what happened next, read "Twilight and Blue Sword".