That crazy girl that writes random comedies, detailed inanimate transformations, and sad/dark heartwrenchers. $$60,000,000,000 says you can't catch me! I'm the Equestrianoid Typhoon! Peace and Love!
Twilight has been researching Equestria's innate magic all across the land. She's been away from home for a few months, and is expecting to arrive home to a warm homestead and scrumptious apple dishes. She has some difficulty opening the door...
And it's not her imagination.
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Inspired and influenced by the song 'Red House' by Jimi Hendrix.
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... I cannot describe... The freaking feelings this story made me show... I cried like a baby man... Like a freaking child... Poor Twilight...
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Aw.
Don't cry!
But I'm glad you enjoyed. If you read it while listening to Red House, you'll feel what I was aiming for while writing.
3939286 If I read this again... I will cry... But I love it so much... Believe it or not this happened to me... Not the teleporting or any of that, but the thing with a friend/lover moving away because of a death in the family.
Words cannot describe how utterly bland this story is. You make nearly every single mistake that the average 'ooh! I'll write for the FEELS' writer makes, from a length too short to make us care, to contrived and character-breaking reactions that make no sense, and the lack of skill to make any of it work.
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Well I wasn't sad at time of writing, I don't write/prefer fics for/based on songs, and I can't control what my mind chooses to spew forth after one too many shots.
If it helps, I feel bad for writing it a bit.
I'm sorry you feel this way, and I'm sorry you can't enjoy it, but I really didn't expect much here anyway.
Don't really know what else to tell ya.
While this story is solemn, it was designed to offer up a particular feel based off of a particular inspiration. Based off of that, I will say Well Done.
Twilight's tendency to over-focus and jump to conclusions fit well with the scenario, as did her almost mechanical blindness to her surroundings while focused upon her goal. The shift from joyful expectation to sorrowful acceptance and feelings of betrayal was a touch disjointed, but, once again, given the focus and inspiration, it makes sense.
Additionally, there were no horrendous spelling or grammar errors, which places this above much of the regular fare of most fan-fictions... So, once more, well done.
I was anticipating a bit more, especially given the partial note mentioning Manehatten... but we were dealing with a distraught Twilight... and we all know how she reacts for sudden and unexpected events. I expect Celestia would have comforted her and then helped to get Twilight to realize she might be overreacting. I could honestly see the story being continued as she sought out and reconciled with Applejack and her friends. There is so much that could come from this story... it's a great seed to work with.
I would be interested to see what you might come up with if you chose to continue this. Either way, well done.
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I'm gonna assume you're the one who disliked the comments beneath yours...
In all honesty, sometimes even the bland storis are the most realistic, and I can totally see this happening to me.
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Absolutely not! :O I would never downvote a comment for no reason, let alone on a story from forever ago that I didn't really do much for in the first place! I have some class, yknow..
The only downvotes I give are reserved for those who truly offend me. Criticism, no matter how blunt or awfully-delivered is still worth hearing, in any case. :V
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Fair enough, but I wasn't really talking about you.
You can has review!
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I'm ultimately curious just why you would want to read this one honestly. I don't even dispute any of the pans or frustrations you felt reading this. Recalling correctly I was rather..imbibed with whiskey that night and didnt really plan much for this story. Ultimately not proud of it or really looking to gain accolades for it. Keep recommending Coming Home or Sweetie_Belle.jpg. Not my garbage fics lol.
Which brings us back to the original query. Who wished this upon you? I know for sure I wouldn't. :V
Thank you/sorry for the effort and time you (predictably) wasted on my words though. Criticism is always welcome, no matter if it's inherently known by the author or not :V I think you know well enough of my writings that Red Barn was nothing special though.