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Sharp Spark


Nothing says I miss you quite like war poetry carved in your door with a stanley knife.


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Twilight, Applejack, and Rarity have a sleepover. Certain uncomfortable secrets come to light.

Thanks to Einhander and Exuno for their help.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 121 )

I has a sad now.

Anyways, i think this would have been better as the last secret, since now the mood will be totally ruined for a chapter or two...

Not enough heartbreak in fiction. It's honestly hard to tell who's the one I'm sympathizing most with. Thanks again for writing this, SS.

4593630 you ain't seen nothing yet.

Three oblivious mares. Very cute, and I look forward to more. :twilightsmile:

4593630 Perhaps I'm reading between the lines too much, but I don't think that's going to be the last secret.

4594396 no, i meant i think it should have been saved as the last secret

Ah, the delicious pain of a well-portrayed heartbreak. The strange joy that comes from tears shed on behalf of another's pain. Not Schadenfreude - I don't actually enjoy seeing anypony hurt per se - but rather, I am moved and even a touch exalted by seeing it done so genuinely, and having such strong reactions to it.

Whether that makes any sense or no... this was excellent, and I look forward to more. Thank you.

Light and laughter,
SongCoyote

You're non matured featured, boyo!

Oh dearie, dearie me. The particular kind of heartbreak which comes from falling in love with a straight friend is one I know all too well. As wonderfully written as this is, I'm afraid to read more. Without wishing to spoil anything, you did a marvellous job of capturing the feelings surrounding it.

Well, there is a nice, juicy set-up. While it's easy enough to guess what the other two were hoping Applejack would do, it'll be interesting to find out where things go from here. In my own opinion, and in a canon non-shipping sense, Twilight and Applejack have a strong devotion to each other on the show (possibly second only to Dash and Fluttershy), where as Applejack and Rarity easily have the most chemistry to their interactions... Something captured well in AJ's musings of how she can't help but engage Rarity whenever the opportunity arises. It'll be interesting to see if Rarity really has no interest in mares, or simply had been too caught up in matchmaking to consider it.

I hope I'm not the only one who has a guess as to why Twilight's crying, and not because she feels sad for Applejack being rejected...

Twilight likes Applejack, Applejack likes Rarity. Rarity likes stallions. MOOOOORRRREEEE!

Excellent opening. You really characterized the scene very well.

I thought, for some off reason, that this was complete.
Thank god for me it wasn't, cause this can only get better...

Actual video below, sorry.

Nice set up, you can just see exactly how things are going to go wrong and it comes at you like a slow moving freight train.

Should've waited and posted it complete. Suspense really doesn't serve much purpose with this sort of story.

The more I read incomplete stories the more I realize I should have stuck to my complete only policy... :fluttercry: Now I have to wait...

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Good news: You won't have to wait long.

I really like this. It definitely strikes home. I think we've all had something like this happen. I can't wait to see what you do next.

And there's your happy ending.

Wow you weren't kidding... You got another chapter up quick...

Wow, this is captivating. Liked, favorited, and I'll feature it on the blog I work for. :pinkiehappy:

4596796 Story of my life on this site. At first I was like "Right I'm read only completed stories so if they aren't finished I won't be disappointed":twilightsmile:. Lets just say that didn't last long:twilightsheepish:

Hm. I think I've seen that title image used before...

4597217 Yep, you have. I'd be more upset about it, but the author does source the image.

It had a very good start, making use of the first person perspective in a way that really tugged at the heartstrings.

And then all the suspense et all was lost when the second chapter switched to Twilight. Not saying that it's the death knell for the story mind, but it does ruin the impact of an excellent first chapter.

Well, okay then.

I hope, for your sake, you've already finished this, and are just updating day-to-day. Because if you don't finish this masterpiece, these guys *jabs thumb at an angry mob holding torches, shovels, and frying pans* Are gonna find you. And the village delinquent will hover over your shoulder until it's finished, and sharpen his knife every time you stop.

Do we understand each other? Good.

Craine...

One more to go....

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This isn't even the first time that artwork I've commissioned for one of my own stories ends up in the feature box as a cover for something else. I guess I just have good taste (and too much money)? :trollestia:

Seriously though, it's fine, I guess. It'd be nice if writers in general made more of a habit of asking artists and/or commissioners for permission about this sort of thing -- particularly if they actually do know where their desired cover-image originates from -- but, as Steel Resolve already indicated, at least the original artist was sourced. And besides, I kind of like this story. :twilightsmile:

(And by 'like' I of course mean 'it made me all sniffly and something-in-my-eye-y' :applejackunsure: :raritycry:)

I looked up at her, my eyes so blurry with tears that all I could see was a ghostly white shape. “How could you…?” I whispered.

“Twilight, let's not start passing around the blame." She sounded tired, drained. "I admit, perhaps we shouldn't have been so eager to delve into Applejack's personal business, but—”
“No, how could you not love her?” I said.

Man. This part. Every time.

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Ah, I hadn't realized that it was commissioned for another story entirely. I should have looked harder and tried to contact you first. :ajsleepy:

It wound up being a last minute decision when Look Before You Sleep had surprisingly little in appropriate screencaps, and... Well, it's a truly lovely image.

But I apologize and would be glad to switch to something else if you decide that's what you'd prefer.

4598127 I believe my friend was trying to convey that while she would have preferred to be consulted beforehand, you may consider her permission given after the fact.

normally i'd be fine with an incomplete story,, but right now i can't say that: :twilightangry2::twilightangry2:

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Uh, yeah, what he said! :derpytongue2:

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Apology accepted. :pinkiesad2: Although, honestly, whether or not it was intended for another story or not is actually kind of inconsequential, if you ask me (although that it does make it a bit more unfair towards the person who originally paid for it). Basically, you should always ask an artist for permission to use their original artwork first.

However, as was already (somewhat clumsily) said: you hereby have my permission to use this picture for your lovely story. I'm pretty sure Spittfire wouldn't object either. :twilightsmile:

Congrats on getting featured!

4596796 I know that feel! I know it well

Hello Aurora, Bechdel's Law still top-5 most featured fic in Russian fandom. May i hope at resumption? ;) Best wishes.

Rarijack is my OTP of ponies. And now I plan on watching this Twijack. I hate you. Go to hell. An hurry up with the next chapter.

I am intrigued. I am debating whether I should read this now instead of sleeping before work, or add it to my read later list. I guess we'll see what happens.

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I know, right? I always say, "well I'll just read the first chapter and see if it's worth waiting for" or maybe "I'll read this one that doesn't interest me, so I can see if the author is any good" and then like a day later I'm resisting the urge to be that guy that spams MOAR in the comment section.

Back on topic, I'm enjoying this. Applejack seems very in-character, and you did a good job setting up the reveal that Twilight likes Applejack. I assume that's what's about to happen, I typed this on my way to the second chapter.

Edit: Read chapter two. You nailed it. Twilight doesn't act like I would have expected, but in a way that actually makes too much sense for me to mind--that mix of sadness at what she can't have and concern for her friend is so in-character, I love it.

Advice: You got to pack a mint.

... Calling it right now, Rarity has a crush on Twilight.:derpytongue2:

:raritycry: Poor Applejack! This story was amazing! It has a good plot(:trollestia:), character traits, and great story telling! I would be very pleased if there was a sequel!(nudge Nudge:twilightsheepish:)

Generosity, indeed...

Well if it ends here that is alright, but it does feel like there can be more. Overall the switching of perspectives was done well and it was quite feels-y without being overly so for a "sad" story.

What a wonderful chapter! You me me feels!

It is a unique glimpse at the cost of generosity. Can't help but respect and pity rarity... :fluttercry:

Well done...

Cuz'n.

Indeed we shall go bowling...

Soon...

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