I like it good for no real plot

Very nice story. Loved it at the end.

You could honestly use an editor, the grammatical errors in the story were pretty distracting.

3886461 Thank you :-)

Yesh
I APPROVE

Nice! this little story is doing better than I thought it would. Thank you all. (can we get to 30 likes?), yes we can! :-P

Hot.

Ah... Quick and hot, just like my ex(ba dum tsh) thumbs up!

Nice one! +1.

that grammar

I'd suggest this be rated mature.

4306194 Oh! I didn't even see that, thank you. I have now changed it from teen to mature

4306273 Glad to help.

Hi every-pony! I would just like to thank you for all your likes on this story; but could I get just one more like, so that it would be an awesome 50likes! please.... I've been a good brony this year. lol

Hm, that should be possible

50likes!!!! yes, thank you all so much!

Badass mode on storm.Because,all things said,you don't have your superior officer walk in on you having "sexy times" and then say "in for a threeway captain?" XD

The fun had just been doubled....

Huzzah!!

You sir, are in dire need of a proofreader. While the story itself is fine, it is riddled with both spelling and grammatical errors that I think having a hunt through and correcting them could help you develop as a writer.
If you write on a computer, I suggest using a spelling checker function.
If you use something else eg. A phone, then I suggest reading through your work a few times and correcting errors as you go.

I don't usually comment like this, but it would definitely help your writing.

4898393 This was one of my first works. So yea, but I have improved greatly since this. Thanks for the advice

4899657 I apologise, I was unaware that this was an early fic

good read

Adorable