Entry #16 January 14, 2190
I don't know how, I don't know why, and frankly I don't care but some way or another I wound up in bed with Rain last night. When I woke up this morning, it was with a feeling of ecstasy. Then I turned my head to the side, saw her lying next to me, smiling softly in her sleep, manage to put two and two together, and now I feel nothing but shame. I smell of filth and my appearance is worse than my smell, if my reflection is anything to go by. Oh sweet, merciful magic, what would my mother think? What would anypony think if they were to discover this lecherous, adulterous venture of mine? Whatever the case, I must strive to keep this whole ordeal hidden. I don't think either me or Rain would be able to handle the public humiliation. So I've decided that I'll be avoiding her inn at all cost, to avoid arousing any suspicions.. In fact, I think I'll just make it a personal rule never to sleep in another inn ever again. Ever.
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I'm liking the journal entry things but could it be a bit more formal? Or perhaps you could change it up so that he at least sounds like he is intelligent? I see the big words you've been using but how about a little bit more? Like instead of "me" say "thy". This, after all, is supposed to talk place back even before the Royal Sisters. Looking at the way Luna talks could help out a bit
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4017102 Well, in my opinion, a personal journal isn't supposed to be formal. There's the way we speak to our superiors and strangers, and then there's the way we speak to friends. I feel journals should be written in the latter style.
On the subject of the language I use, the lack of "thy" and such things will make sense later on. So just keep checking back. Thanks for the favorite and like!
Bit of trivia, but back in the day, words like 'thee' and 'thou' were actually the informal way to talk, the way you'd talk to your friends and family. 'You' was used in formal situations, especially with social superiors.