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Not bad, but not great... fluttershy's turnaround was kinda weird.
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As long as it was decent, I'm happy. I had it really hard writing this, was hard to get a good story balance, be somewhat IC and whatnot, yet trying to have some meaning behind it. (even though many dominant are sub in bed) I know her turnaround was kinda weird, but it could have been done smoothly by a better author heh
Welp, I gotta say, with how fluttershy acted the entire time. I've never read whatever the first fic you said this was based off of or whatever, but this fluttershy...
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I mean, I dont see this kinda fluttershy, but then again i welcome this fluttershy. Perhaps Fluttershy could truly be like this in bed with a mare of choice. who knows.
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It's another fic I've written, it's my first, and basically about Dash giving Fluttershy head when she's asleep.
And actually, it's quite common for dominant people to "let go" in bed, not being in charge for once is often an appealing thought to some. Same goes for quite many sub's, it's a chance for them to take control, it's also alien to them to be in charge. So the term "It's always the quiet ones" it not entirely just for the lols
But as said, everyone's different, and while I could have made the opposite roles, this fit the theme more. Plus, as said, Fluttershy is a "switch" in this fic, she let herself be on the bottom, but when Dash backed down and hesitated, she took over and lead the way. Trailed off a bit hehe.
559651 No worries. Again, this fic was GOOD. If it sounded like I was confused, didnt mean it like that. :P I enjoyed this greatly. I was trying to say that I dont see this fluttershy in alot of fics, so I was caught off guard when I saw this awesome Fluttershy. So kudos.
Oh, and By the by, I understand that sortof feeling. Im my relationship with my girl, it's always nice to not be the dominant one. It's mostly outta laziness, but I'm usually not other one who uses my brain half the time anyhow. Every now and then, when we "cuddle" I'm usually the one doing all the work, so it's nice to not have to do it every once in a while, what with telling her what to do and such when we are "In the heat" i guess I would say.
EDIT: For those who are about to go "OH MY LAWD, YOU HAD SEX WITH A GIRL, AND YOU TALK ABOUT IT???" Well, this IS the internet. Derp. and Also, you read a clopfic, or rather, a "Romantic" or "Serious" Clopfic. get over yourself. I said practically nothing.
(To Satch, dont mind the edit, it's for THOSE kinda people, you know those kinds? The ones who get horrified by a clopfic, and get even more horrified when people ON a clopfic trades stories regarding experiences? lol)
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I just have a general expectation that people will find my stuff to be quite "meh", since I do lack allot of finesse and emotion, most due to my syndromes. And my inferiority complex. Anyhow, trailing off. And by awesome, I guess you mean "gently assertive and understanding" (or w/e to call it) and not the "well endowed" part? xD (On a side note, just curious: What did you think of that btw?)
I'm glad to hear that.
And that's chill to discuss about. As long as one does not trail off to much. (Ie: Goes into to much detail haha. But yeah, I know what kind of people you mean.) Personally quite a "dominant switch" myself, I mostly prefer to be in charge, and I tended to be a dominant sub when I was doing stuff, if you are familiar with the concept.
561741 Your story was'nt "Meh" at all! I actually enjoyed this greatly. And yep! you hit the nail on the head with "Gently assertive and understanding".
On a side note, it's nice that somepony actually goes into detail. A female's reproductive organ, whether inside or out, is different, so it's nice to go into some detail on it, especially when it's a girl's first time with a girl. To actually know that she was conscience (Is that how it's spelled? Who gives a flying feather) she was to fluttershy's "gift" and her own, practically the same way with males (More like me. when it was MY first time with my girl whom I've been dating for a while now, I was afraid that she was actually gonna laugh at, well, you know. But no, she actually taught me what I missed out on. Ever since, I've been the dominant one for her, but even once in a while, she likes to take control, and me? I enjoy it. Less work. (Gets rather tiring after doing all the work, lol) So you could say I saw a little of me in our cyan pegasus. So that, was a plus.
Did I just trail off myself? Oopsie Doodle.
Overall, this story is fantastic. Why would anypony give this a thumbs down is beyond me.
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Really glad to hear that. I've just been know to produce rather "meh" stories. Quality has really improved with proofreaders though
And nice to know that you though the female endowment part was okay. Was a bit worried it'd be to foreign to most to be able to fully grasp. And not really sure what word you were after there, but I think it would fit xP And while I know insecurity over how ones genital looks is rather common irl, especially for women. (all is pretty much the fault of porn) While I would see Equestria as a place where it would be the standard to be proud/comfortable in ones body, I still wanted to tackle the subject. Sadly irl, far from everyone gets an understanding (nor "educated" partner for their first, often one with only knowledge about either from porn or medical books how females (or males) are "supposed" to look. And seeing how the ones presented there are "refined" and ~5 % of the population actually looks like that... well, yeah...
Anyhow, nice to hear it went rather good at your first. And yeah, depending who's in charge can really mix things up in a relation
And it's chill, as said, I trail off allot, often
As for thumbs down, can see it from people that dislike female endowment, those that just wanted straight up clop, or the like.
562940 Well then, hopefully people will actually read this, instead of thumbing it down.
Anyways, I will bid you good day, enjoy my watch, and I hope you do make more of these kinda stories. I'd be real nice to actually have detail in stories, instead of just "CLOP CLOP CLOP HOO HOO!".
(By the by, if ever you feel like you want any help with anything, lemme know. I've helped a few people write out stories and the like, so yeah, my services can be used without fear that I will stop helping at all, or in want of anything in return.)
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I'm not very good with writing inviting "story info" so that might also be a cause xP The story I've had the most "hate" on without people even reading it has been my blackmail fic. Had people call it rape, ramble on poor Trixie and etc, quite a few points showing they never even read it. Anyhow, yeah, I think most just either wanted "hot steamy sex" or whatnot, or wanted more story. I just kinda tend to do something in between.
And thanks, I will enjoy it. *Puts on monocle*
563415 *Grabs a top hat* Indeed.
559651 No way, I totally remember reading that!
Definitely reading this now. I have to say though, I find it pretty funny how for the first few paragraphs it totally sounds like they're talking like they have dicks. Just sayin'. Seriously lol, read it in that context.
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Well, it was quite a while ago, but yeah, I wrote that too
And well, I blame that on the lack of good "female" terms. Ok well, there's a few good non-formal ones, but most just refers to the amount of lubricant hehe. But yeah, I tend to both write and speak rather "openly" about the female parts. As that is a kinda rare/new thing to do, it can seem a bit alien/male to talk like. So I know most can see it as refering to males or something, but such is not the case
I just write them with anatomical accurate terms.
567864 Haha, yeah. I follow you. I just couldn't resist commenting on it. The whole time I was getting the wrong mental image. I'm not saying that's any fault of yours, but my brain is kind of wired to think of a lot of those wordings in terms of male parts.
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It might take some time getting used to the terms, if one would try 
but yeah, as said, all the terms I use can be applied to a female ;P
It's coo ;P I know I should expect most to make that reference/relation to the term or words. It is originally male terms. So I don't blame you.
I especially love it when submissive/dominant people (or ponies) are switched in bed. It was a bit surprising that Flutters wasn't a virgin. Though, if Dashie had eaten her out in a previous story wouldn't she know how big her sex was?
I always enjoy lemons (clop) where the awkwardness of real sex is present. I don't know why.
576176 Glad to hear it turned out okay. Not too many seems to share our appeal to more "realistic" sex hehe. And as said, while it has references to the previous story, it's in no way connected, technically. Since as said, it wouldn't make much sense in that sense :P
And I don't know why either. I just like realistic stuff I guess
Plus, I find some of these things really adorable. 
Like when the tables are turned as said, sometimes. And the whole "schh..." things, those I got a soft spot for heh.
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872568 Can say this kinda sums up a few things haha xP