Ballad of the Immortal

by pepdog1

Ending No. Two: Living Forever

Twilight turned towards the last grave, Spike's, and remembered how sad she was when he died when the meteor hit Equestria, killing everything. She had decided.

"I want to here live with my friends forever, please." She said, turning back to the princesses. "But, only if that's OK with you..."

Celestia giggled. "It would be my pleasure." Then, she started to spread her wings and her horn started to glow. Luna did the same. Both alicorns closed their eyes tight as they concentrated hard. there was a bright flash of white, and the two sisters disappeared.

Twilight turned around. The once barren had become lush and beautiful once more.

Then, she noticed somepony flying towards her. It was Fluttershy.

"Fluttershy, how come the landscape is like this? It was all dry, dead, gone!"

The yellow alicorn giggled. "Cadence told me about your choice, Twilight. With our combined magic, we managed to send the meteor from crashing into our land!"

Twilight smiled. "So, everypony is alive?"

"If you mean Rarity, Dashie, AJ, Pinkie, and Spike, then yes."

Fluttershy started to fly off. "Come on Twilight. We're going to help Applejack plant the new orchard!"

Twilight turned around to see if her friends graves were still there. They weren't, but instead replaced by one, big, regal grave that had a bush in the shape of Celestia and Luna on it. Twilight walked up to it.

"Thank you. Thank you so much..."

The bush suddenly started to move. It turned it's head and looked right at Twilight.

"No, Twilight." The Celestia bush said. "Thank you."

And with that, the bush turned back to normal, and Twilight trotted off towards her new life.

Author's Note:

This ending probably won't get a sequel, but the other one probably will. I hope you like it, because I had fun writing it. Also, tell me if I have many spelling/grammar mistakes. Thanks for being so committed.

Comments

[Journeyman]

I really want to like it as it brings up themes and ideas I like to see in fanfictions, but the writing seems subpar and unable to grasp the full complement of emotions that such actions and reactions would produce. It's some pretty heavy stuff, but it's hampered by clumsy dialog that does not cover the full scale of loneliness immortality would incur.

[pepdog1]

3688452 I was a bit rushed, so I couldn't put my full potential into it. I kind of just wanted to get it over and done with. Thanks for your input, I really appreciate it and will try to pay more attention to things like that in the future.

[DarkROVinyl]

You know that now I need to drink my self to sleep because this made me cry and lose my manly points

[Sean66067]

3688981 You dont lose man points for crying it means you are sure of yourself and who you are and says you have feelings so cry it shows how true to yourself you are.

[pepdog1]

3690587 I don't need man points. I'm a girl. But I agree with you. Man points mean almost nothing when it comes to stories. But, it is kind of weird to cry from a story a twelve year old made.

[pepdog1]

3689500 If you haven't figured it out already, in this story they can die of old age. But only a very, VERY, VERY old age! This Is important to the next story; the sequel, in which a certain villain will appear in! I won't tell who though.

[Sean66067]

3703029 Ok that was for DarkROVinyl, and the reason someone would cry from this is because of the feelings of dread and lonlyness, The curse of immortality brings. Imagine all your friends and family just die, right before your eyes and you can do nothing. It is a terrible feeling, if I was as long lived as they are I would be trying to kill myself every waking second.That is why people will cry because of a story a 12 year old wrote.

[pepdog1]

10+ likes! Time for the sequel! It will have to wait a bit though, because I'm working on a brand new story. It's called "The Magenta Assassin", and I think you'll really like this one!

[Moonlight Sparkle Rocks]

cool story bff

[pepdog1]

3731125 Thanks, BFF! Can't wait for your first story!