If only there were a "Bittersweet" tag...
Mrs. Sullivan is used to death. One doesn't get to be sixty-seven years old without experiencing it. But she never thought that she'd have to bury her own grandchild - especially not her six-year old granddaughter. The night after the incident, however, she is taken to a world where magic and love might wash away the pain in her heart.
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I read this earlier, and I will repeat what I said then about it now—
I liked it; it was well written, emotional, and stayed with me. It's a bit short to make any real deductions as of now, but...
It's got me hooked.
Well this just ended abruptly.
This is nice, but I'm not sure how this will develop. I will be watching this.
Wait.... "I miss mine."?
That line seems to be confusing its focus. Is that Fluttershy speaking, or Mrs. Sullivan, or both?
Or did you mean Fluttershy misses her Grandmother?
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Fluttershy is speaking, though I should have made that a little more clear. I've fixed the line now. Thank you for the catch!
I'm not entirely sure why, but...in the last chapter, the phrase "brown, almond shaped eyes" plucked at my heart strings more than you probably expected it to. I think I remember the phrase from a book a read a long time ago. It's funny how the little things stick with you.
But reminiscence aside, I think what you've written is a fine piece of work, and certainly original-a grandmother lost in Equestria is certainly something you don't see every day. Youve earner this favorite
Is the title a reference to Caroline's spine?
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You can certainly take it that way, if you wish.
Please continue with this, you've got me emotionally invested and I definitely want to see where you take this. :)
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Don't worry about a thing, sir. The third chapter is currently going through revisions, and the fourth is being written. :)
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The second chapter has been revised to not end as strangely as it did. Thank you for your feedback.
Simply beautiful, really— it is slightly clichéd that Fluttershy was the one who found her, but all in all, you did a wonderful job of portraying the characters. I can feel the emotions you are trying to convey, and that's what matters most, is it not?
You're doing well; I most certainly wish to see more.
Oh, I'm sorry. Must've...had something in my eyes there.
Hm? Oh no, I-I'm not crying...
Please continue...