ER MEH GERD IMA GONNA DIE IN A HOLE FER MAY SINSSSSS!!! I feel teriblle for loving anything to do with button and sweetiebelle having sex but the two just are so amazing together, your a good clopfic writer where as you ad some story as opposed to just pure sex, It would be nice if you could ad some clop like how University days does by adding a different mature story university nights.

His Mom must have been watching the whole time

4868596 That isn't out of the question.
4860004 Well, if you missed that author's note I added at the end, I should tell you now that I'm not writing any more clopfics. Ever.

(Probably )

UUUUUGGGHHH FINE... I will go and find a new clopper to satisfy me. ( not really but hey you are a great writer, funny at that. maybe you could try some romance tradgedy between your two favorite lovers... just an I dea I got from two other fics: In an instant and Playing with my Heart. both of witch are great and you should read.

4877380 Thanks for the compliments anyway. I dunno, I might check those two stories out if I have time.

(is browsing button belle group)
(decides to read NSFW for the fun of it)
(sees familiar author in ANW,ANW group)
(rather dramatically does a spittake)

LANCE?!

5031420 *quickly* T-this was written ages ago! I didn't even go by Lance Skyes when I wrote this!

5035711 Do you think you could do a similar story with Spike and Apple Bloom?

5052588 No, I'm afraid I can't.

5063708 Okay just wondering.

What the fuck did I just read...

I don't even like clop...

Ah, fuck it. I did it for fun. Also that is one shitty mom.

After reading this: ... Well, off to play some Balloons Bloons TD to get that image out of my mind *Head explodes before I get to even type in the website*

1. WHY didn't Rarity send her away while she was "having fun"? I mean, that us PURE LOGIC. Come on, man. That's just ridiculous

2. Why. In the living hell. Does Sweetie Belle not know what she's doing. Be real here. Don't they teach sex ed at like, six or somethin nowadays? We see children getting pregnant so..

And 3. SHE WAS LISTENING THE WHOLE F*CKING TIME!! WHAT THE HELL MAN!
....best mom of the year.

5384510 Your criticisms are noted, and I promptly laughed my ass off at how you delivered them. Thank you.

Hi I am 12 this just made me try to play 5nights at Freddy so i can get this out of my dreams but that made me what to read more clop plus I could not stop reading this because button mash is one of my favriot pony I love my little pony.

Have fun.

You know, that name "Lance" it rings a bell in my head.

And I don't know why.

Hmmmmmmmmmm

Well, screw it's for another time.

I made a story that is 10+ for people who couldn't handle clop. Hope you guys will watch it. And thank you Lance Sky, thanks for inspiring the idea to me. Good story though

5684342 More like jacked the original story and removed the clop. A very stupid mistake on your part even announcing the theft--a very stupid mistake indeed.

Lance Skyes is best SweetieMash author.

I think the Rewrite is better, but in a sense, it seemed a tad bit confusing. i don't know why, it just was. i liked the rearranging of the games, like renaming JoyBoy to GameColt, or them playing Mareio Kart 8. this was the first clopfic i had read, and i think it's probably the most twisted, yet the best. i think whether you make a sequel or a spin-off is up to you.

HOLY.... FUCKING.... SHIT... You, man, I don't know how the HELL you made such a good clopfic at your first attempt. this is like best clopfic ever. what the hell now I'm mortified for life

two different sides to my opinion.

For a first timer's clop fic, this isn't too bad but you made a couple first timer mistakes.

And after a few minutes of laughing to himself, imagining the looks on the faces of his readers when they read that last sentence, the author reversed time within his story and resumed writing.

This type of meta writing is a big-no-no. Most readers do not like it. I understand you put this in as a comical effect but just avoid doing something like this again in the future.

Secondly, your formatting needs work. A writer's rule of thumb is usually hitting the enter key twice between paragraphs.

*grabs random paragraph to provide an example only for it to be formatted properly when she copy and pastes it* What the fuck?

Okay, so, scratch that last one sorta, you still need to properly format it so that it displays like this:

Button Mash sat up and looked at Sweetie Belle with a confused expression. “I'm sorry, you kind of lost me there,” he said.

Sweetie Belle sat up too and faced Button. “Well, I was thinking, whenever Rarity has one of her sleepovers, she sounds like she and her coltfriend of the week has a lot of fun. So I was wondering if we could... try some of the stuff she does.”

Button nervously raised an eyebrow before responding. “What kinds of things are you talking about?”

Instead of this:

Button Mash sat up and looked at Sweetie Belle with a confused expression. “I'm sorry, you kind of lost me there,” he said.
Sweetie Belle sat up too and faced Button. “Well, I was thinking, whenever Rarity has one of her sleepovers, she sounds like she and her coltfriend of the week has a lot of fun. So I was wondering if we could... try some of the stuff she does.”
Button nervously raised an eyebrow before responding. “What kinds of things are you talking about?”

Beyond that, nicely written for a first timer.

5927960 Thanks for the help. I'll try to start applying this to my other stories in the future.

I was just thinking... I see my sister Rarity have sleepovers with other stallions all the time.

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5249390 That is pretty much my sentiment for this story

Fun read though

Personally, I liked the Rewrite better than the Original, but overall it was a great story

my rating:10000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000/1

5983620 lol ikr

Lol I love the re write I heard he original on youtube and this version I liked very much Great work! I liked how Button's mom knew what happened but yet excepted it :)

6812748 Thanks for bringing that to the attention of readers with very fucked-up imaginations.

A normal mother just hurt button with a shoe (true story..Well in my country)
But button mom just keep listening XD
After that i hope sweetiebelle dont get pregnant -_-

7370763 First of all, thanks for the lesson. Will be kept in mind.
Second, dare I even ask, what does "Furry Wet Dream: The Movie" have to do with this?

theres a new button mash tag

she felt her mouth suddenly become flooded with a warm but foul-tasting liquid

. Semen taste good not bad.

Honestly, the rewrite was one of the best clopfics that I have ever read! I really enjoyed it, and I encourage that you continue to write what you do!

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For some weird reason, I like this. Am I reading porn?

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I mean yeah