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Raymanguy


Blah, blah, blah. Words and jokes and stuff.

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Twilight Sparkle has always loved stealing things. Ever since she was little, making plans and carrying them out with something of a payday. Now, she feels that she's ready for the BIG ONE! But even she, with ridiculously elaborate plans, can't do this alone. So now she must, with Spike's help, find the Five. The five mares who have become legends in their field. Which is good because Twilight needs to best of the best if this is going to work.


Author's Note: There is some lore to this alternate universe you should know. First off, Celestia and Luna are legends bordering on myth. Think of them as King Arthur, there was a king named Arthur but some of his feats may have been a hyperbole. The country is run by council by three (corrupt I should add) head ponies and one delagate from each of the towns across Equestria. Second, Twilight and Shining Armor are orphans. He still joined the royal guard. And lastly, this takes place in a semi-modernized Equestria. Please criticize below and hope you enjoy the ride!

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 12 )

This story has serious potential. I hope to stay updated with this one. Although you mightwant to ad a little bit more description of location. Like are thy in the library or dors she even live in ponyville.

THE BIG ONE, GTA 5 reference:twilightsmile:

This is going too be good.:pinkiehappy:

Another thing is this going to be like PayDay by any chance if so your the first to make the elements Dalles,Wolf and the rest.

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Sorry if I wasn't clear, but they live in the library that Twilight was in at the beginning of the show only that it was abandoned. I don't plan on much of the story to take place there so didn't give it much of a description. Sorry.:pinkiesad2:

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I actually didn't think about PayDay, and now that I have. Time to add it to the plot.:pinkiehappy:

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As soon as possible.:twilightblush:

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"Gasp" this story just got cooler.:moustache::moustache:

this should be a fun read

Ho ho, this looks fun. I spotted more than a few errors though, I'll totally proof read this chapter and the next, if you send me the next one :heart:

I Just kept hearing Bain's voice insted of Spikes when he was reading the "Database Entry" for Aj
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