Many Railways in Equestria have been losing bits and customers because of Equestria's Nationalization plan, which would bring all the companies under one roof. One such Railway is looking for ways to keep its identity. And salvation comes not in the form of one, but two humans that have suddenly arrived. And with them, ideas, and concepts for running a railway. But get this, neither of them have ever run a railway in their lives!!! So, a railway is left with two options, one is to just be nationalized, the second is to take these humans in. and see what happens. (Ponies will be Anthro.)
Chapters (9)
Politics in a HIE, and taken seriously?! This shall to be interesting...
i love it
Railroad Tycoon anyone?
That... felt off.
It is not bad but something about the whole story feels off. It is like your characters are not working properly. The fact that the humans had to introduce themselves to each other inside of wherever they ended up is something I do not get. Your transition set up was not very clear. Do you mean to tell me that they were chatting over the internet before mysteriously arriving?
On top of that there is a lack of descriptions for the characters. The whole thing seems a little rushed. One moment they are home, the next they are not only in Equestria, but in-charge of a rail way. You didn't even have them prove they were not bluffing. Sure I can understand the rail owner hiring them if they had shown him some of the plans first but just on their word alone?
Same issue here so I am not getting my hopes up. But for this chapter not only is there a lack of description for the ponies and the humans you are also failing to talk about the trains themselves. It took a trip to google to learn more. I am beginning to suspect that you merely have a fancy with trains and are not an avid fan. The lack of description are really hurting the story. I need more than just a name of something to form a picture in my head. Describe the engine. It was more than just a train, the engine you are talking about was 6 meters tall, if not taller. It was all metal with a black coat. It had three massive wheels supporting the the front of the engine and providing pulling power. That description is just what I managed from a look at it's picture.
and now I am caught up. But as always my complaint is just a general lack of description. The characters spend more time talking in your story then you do describing whats happening and what they look like. If you want this to be good then that is gonna have to change. Now the over all idea of your story is good. I do like the plot that is going on. There is little in way for the world of equestria given in the show it is nice to see the ideas of other.
I like it to a point but I agree with the other guy, it lacks in detail.
Yay!
Trains!
Yay, More trains are being added to the fleet
awesome
Nice story, and (as can perhaps be told by my nom de plume) I heartily endorse the work of Sir H. Nigel Gresley as the finest of any sort found on the iron road.
But...
By providing them with a B17 you have pretty much done the equivalent of solving the "Fokker Scourge" by handing out Harriers to the RFC. For an axle load increase of about two or three tons, it will double or triple the available tractive effort for the big trains, holds the track like a gazelle, comparatively, and basically makes the whole thing a pretty much forgone conclusion. The thing is that if we are looking at wood-clad 4-4-0's, it is entirely possible that they don't have the metallurgical knowledge to build boilers or valve gear strong enough.
Also - 100A boilers? Thompsonian Heresy, I say sir!
*Realizes that I'm surrounded by train nerds*
*Slowly backs out of room with a kitchen knife in hand*
*Drives away and takes a salt bath*
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Yes, yes. I concur.
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I do realize what he said, and I have worked on a plan with him to make it more realistic. In the form of, lets say... An engine shed fire!
3998871 COME BACK IT WONT HURT... FOR A COUPLE SECONDS!
Come back bruv
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Was Equestria ever a British colony? That would explain why the ponies know English...