First move
“So Spike is with Scootaloo?” Rainbow Dash asked, trying to confirm what the princess had said. “And neither one has made a move on the other!?” More shocked, and interested in the simple fact, than interested in their safety.
“Yes, and I’m just waiting for one of them to make a move on the other.” Luna said, happily stroking Tia the locus, “I’d be interesting.” Curious as for their thoughts, she took the risk of ruining the childrens relationship. “Who do you think will make the first move on the other?”
Both mares confident, and overjoyed at the thought of their, “child” taking the other along for a joyride excited them. With almost perfect synchronization, they called out, “obviously my-.” Stopping at the sound of another overconfident mare, the stared each other down.
“Spike obviously is going to make the first move.” Acting cocky as most eggheads did, she pulled up a little fact on Spike, “he even went after Rarity. And even after being rejected, he still went after her!”
Not hearing any of it, Rainbow decided it was time to step it up, “Scootaloo is so going to subdue Spike. Who wouldn’t fall for her?! Only reason i adopted her was because of her persistence.” Finding a slight need to over exaggerate by just a little bit, she decided to brag. “She even got me to adopt her in ten seconds flat.”
A good ten hours had passed of the two mares bragging about their child being better, when luna decided to take the cake. “I think they are going to be respectful and let the other make the first move.” Getting angry glares from both the ponies, she backed away. “We could just wait till something happens. Right?”
Rainbow Dash cracked her neck, “then it’s a bet. If I’m right, you’ll have to let me check out the audio tapes you have hidden in the back of the library.”
“Those are meant for the blind, it woun’t help you much. And if i win…,” Thinking her choice over, she chose the best option out of all her mind. Far more important to her than the 200 bit late fine she had on all the Daring Doo books and way bigger than the promised picnic that never happened. “If i win, you’ll have to cut your hair straight.” Rainbow Dash, shocked by the wager, accepted the challenge.
“If you’re both wrong, you both have to pay for any wedding cost they might have later on.” Getting ignored, she looked to Tia. “Atleast you heard me little Tia!” petting the bugs head, she smiled, and waited for the first move.
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yay nice chapter.
3883500
what dose that have to di with anything? and i'm glad you've read up to chapter 3
Do you need an editor? Cause I could be one. A lot of the situations in this chapter confuse me. Why aren't Dash and Twilight panicking more? Why is Celestial a locust?
3883630
i don't know, its twilight and rainbow... they knew who thier dealing with. spike, and scootaloo.
but i don't panic when somethings not where its saposed to be.(my pencil for example/
)
but Tia is not a locus. Tia is the name given to Luna's pet Locus.
ya.... just got bored and did that
as for an editor, i don't like having one to often. it's kinda like a slavery issue.
i don't perfer using editors.
but one would be apriciated.... some what
3897766
i guess i did take a while fro a two short chapter
sorry about that. i'm going to end this in the most epic way posible!!!!!
weith scootaloo dieng, and spike killing himslef with a rusty spoon!!!
actually, no
but it'll be interestingly epic
4054494 thanks for the coment, and the watch
4069854 this was not ment to start anything.
and i'm planning on re-editing the chapters.
didn't edit them to well a year ago
Can't wait for an update.
Also I like the story so far, keep up the good work.
4071117 sorry to disapoint you
but it's going to be some time before anupdate happenes.
the story's going to have it's grammar corected
and glad you enjoyed it
4075591 Well I understand about how you feel about making it perfect, just don't wait too long until you update the story. Also to error is human, we all make mistakes so take your time.
Oh and this is for you.
4075726 i don't crsave perfection. i just got tired of people complaining about it
4084566 I can fully understand how you feel on that one
, but just do as Pinkie would say and SMILE!!!!!! 
4084581
i don't smile. nor will i in the recent times.
4084657 But everyone should smile, and how can you say no to this face
4086133 i can say no to a derpy becuase i've died on the inside. nothing more nothing less.
also, my favorite pony is Octavia
4088334 Hmmm, you sir are a tricky one but for you here you go.
th02.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2011/256/e/c/octavia_nurse_by_pyruvate-d49pmxy.jpg
To help you come back to life on the inside.
4088657 as soon as i saw a link with an image, i got a crazy idea.
don't even open the image.
applejack.ponychan.net/chan/files/src/137057299099.png
Well you said you were dead and your favorite was Tavi so I decided to help you with your dead problem and give you a pic of your favorite pony. Do you not like it?
4089027 just didn't expect an octi nurse picture. as for did i like it, sorta.
if you'd like to continue with my "dead" problem, please continue with a message
it;ll help with the story coments
4089350 I'm always willing to help a friend in need and I decided to try another pic that you might like. Enjoy.
31.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m5xixapP9N1qc5ffho1_1280.jpg
4089531 not really.
i like vinyl as well
4089705 That pic had Vinyl in it as well. It really is going to be a challenge to find a pic that you might like. Try this one.
i.imgur.com/lGtHL.png
4089757 nope, i've had that picture since i became a brony.
look up "changeling hugs" on google image's while safty search is on,
ON
4089771 What if I don't have safety search? Should I be concerned on what pops up?
4089782 just checked.
and nothing really disterbing popped up/
fc01.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2013/065/0/4/_request____changeling_hugs__by_ficisism-d5x7d3u.png
safety search is ment for the MLP fandoms creepy ness
4089771 Never mind. I loved what I found. Me Gusta.
fc05.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2013/004/f/a/chrysalis__hugs__by_tomdantherock-d5qf4ex.gif
4089792
mlp has to little love for changelings
and u would hug crysalis. just becuase i like changlings
my brain basicly popped 40 pounds of LSD, so i'm kinda brain deD
(LSD is a drug like acid, but worst
)
4089789 I love that pic, and actually I don't mid changelings. They're just misunderstood.
4089800 so miss understood
it nearly breaks my heart. (just for the lolz) but it's already shadered
.
meow meow mother f*** i'm a train
4089810
What? 
4091303 it's sad that they are so missunderstood. it nearly breaks my heart, (but it's already shadered
)
my brain was dead
4093519 This is to help with your shattered heart.
derpicdn.net/media/W1siZiIsIjIwMTIvMTEvMjYvMTVfMzRfMDdfOTQzXzE2Mzg0OV9fVU5PUFRfX3NhZmVfZmx1dHRlcnNoeV92ZWN0b3JfY2hhbmdlbGluZ19odWdfY3VkZGxlX2FydGlzdF94eW90aWMiXV0/163849__safe_fluttershy_vector_cute_changeling_hug_cuddling_artist-xyotic.png
4094175 this will help you on your quest to making me happy
derpicdn.net/img/view/2013/10/26/457201__safe_solo_derpy+hooves_cute_pixiv_letter_mailpony_derpabetes_artist-colon-yukandasama.jpg
also, please reply to this in a PM(message), it'll hlep some what
4094274 Too cute
4070857 Sorry about that man. Your story has a good concept and plot; it really does!! I just couldn't help complain about the English.
4176311
i've been trying to make time to edit the grammar and some of the story, but, i never have time to. sadly.
but the grammar is something i've always sucked at, so sorry it was bad
4176311 its been 8 weeks since you comented that. and i just got back on this story after so many months of neglect..
could you help me some? like grammar tips and the like?
4494086
Sure, is there anything specific you want to know?
4494244 no. but i think i;m fine for the simple things.
edeted the intro i'll get teh rest tomarrow, then end this pointless fic
4494269 don't end this fic its not pointless its one of my favs this story has 40 favs 28/10 likes/dislikes so it is not pointless
4495359 thier is only so much you can do to keep a patiant in the E.R. alive. after a while, they'll just die. this fic is that patiant. it has to die sooner or later, and i want it to die sooner than 3 months from now
and i had to give the most depressing explomation becuase you put that smile song in comment.
i hate that song
4495784 u hate it lol i like the smile song
4495840 just great, some one is gonna upvote your coments and downvote mine.
its to happy, and i don't like it becuase it's just to high pitched singing
4496409
down votes wow
4496826 i'm not going to talk to you here.
bye
4497043
the way you say that is just plan rude what is up with you lately why have you been such a grump, I don't even know if I consider u a friend right now.....
do you mind if I add this story to my Scootapike group I started?