i'm a brony who just wants to have fun, and make stuff people can enjoy
Scootaloo and Spike do something terible in Ponyville, they have to get out of town and fast. No one who knows where they are, and everypony is getting worried, especially Twilight and Rainbow Dash. Spike and Scootaloo, no friends and no real home, only the friends they have not meet yet.
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Hmmm so far so good, ill fav and like it and see how this will go.
Will read later, but on first impressions it looks like you need an editor. I would be happy to help out.
Love,
Pip
3325064 thank you. i was hoping a nice person would come.
3325034 thank you.
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Quick question, and I hope you aren't offended, but is English your first language?
Love,
Pip
3326209 actualy, no, german was a start, but english was the major (not even going to try spelling it.) i learned.
i'll send you a message
3326219
Alrighty.
~Pip
I'm loving this story
3339833 i'm glad you do.
your picture... its just so 
and cute
And when exactly is the next chapter?? B-B-B-B--But I love this story! I demand more!
3378354 what do you mean when is the next chapter?
and glad you enjoy it
3379537
I mean like............................oh doesn't matter. for somewhat reason I thought that it was October 2012 was the latest chapter on there. awkward
3383781 oh, i know that feel, and moment.
its going to be here soon, and i find that funny
3384795
................I do not want to ask why.
3387483 you read it as 2012 so its funny
no need to ask
3389168
Hmmm I guess it is.....Yes it is then!
3392572 okie. sorry for not getting a chapter up anytime soon. life problems and what not.
)isn't even typeing it yet
(
3396161
don't worry, I have loads of stuff to do and I never (literally!) get a chapter out of my storys. trust me, so if you read one of my storys don't expect another chapter too soon.
3396704 ohk, okay i was going to stay up all night writeing the next chapter fro all my stories.
how the next pleases you!
3399851
Oh, now your just getting me excited!
This really is a cute little story.
I love how you incorporated those drean characters and the files, that was nice. The dark dream of Scootaloo's really was quite heart wrenching though. 
If there was something that I'd have to pick negatively about the story so far, it would be the lack of imagery in some parts. Some parts have great imagery, others are more telling then showing but that is easily fixed. There are some errors in spelling, word use and grammar, but none that are too bad. Overall, that story is adorable and I'll gladly keep an eye on it.Let me know it you need any help and have fun with the story.
3620617
scootaloos dream wasn't heart wrenching.
that wasn't even close to heart wrenching,
YOU ARE WEAK IN THE HEART!!!!!
but thanks for teh read, and i'd like yu help. sorry for the imadry, i was going in and out of stuff.
3621272
Oh, you;re right! My heart is weak as hell. Glad to read it. The story is cute and good.
I especially love that it's Scoots that's paired with Spike in this one! 
3622288 i don't get teh last part, and i don't care, i'll try figuring it out later.
Don't reply, i'm glad you liked it
Aww, poor Scoots.
Oh,why did she have to dream that? WHY?!?
*calms down* Sorry, I got a bit overexcited.
Well, I'm off to read the next chapter!
P.S.
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i was derpy.
and i don't even know... it gets betteer later on
hope you enjoy
yay nice chapter.
You didn't hear anything, I'm just a bush. Lol
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what dose that have to di with anything? and i'm glad you've read up to chapter 3
Do you need an editor? Cause I could be one. A lot of the situations in this chapter confuse me. Why aren't Dash and Twilight panicking more? Why is Celestial a locust?
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i don't know, its twilight and rainbow... they knew who thier dealing with. spike, and scootaloo.
but i don't panic when somethings not where its saposed to be.(my pencil for example/
)
but Tia is not a locus. Tia is the name given to Luna's pet Locus.
ya.... just got bored and did that
as for an editor, i don't like having one to often. it's kinda like a slavery issue.
i don't perfer using editors.
but one would be apriciated.... some what
Yay!!!!!! You updated the story
3897766
i guess i did take a while fro a two short chapter
sorry about that. i'm going to end this in the most epic way posible!!!!!
weith scootaloo dieng, and spike killing himslef with a rusty spoon!!!
actually, no
but it'll be interestingly epic
Good job
4054494 thanks for the coment, and the watch
I have to say that the English is horrible, but I understand to at least get into the story. Still, its bad enough that I have to give it a 2 in Replay Value.
4069854 this was not ment to start anything.
and i'm planning on re-editing the chapters.
didn't edit them to well a year ago
Can't wait for an update.
Also I like the story so far, keep up the good work.
4071117 sorry to disapoint you
but it's going to be some time before anupdate happenes.
the story's going to have it's grammar corected
and glad you enjoyed it
4075591 Well I understand about how you feel about making it perfect, just don't wait too long until you update the story. Also to error is human, we all make mistakes so take your time.
Oh and this is for you.
4075726 i don't crsave perfection. i just got tired of people complaining about it
4084566 I can fully understand how you feel on that one
, but just do as Pinkie would say and SMILE!!!!!! 
4084581
i don't smile. nor will i in the recent times.
4084657 But everyone should smile, and how can you say no to this face
4086133 i can say no to a derpy becuase i've died on the inside. nothing more nothing less.
also, my favorite pony is Octavia
4088334 Hmmm, you sir are a tricky one but for you here you go.
th02.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2011/256/e/c/octavia_nurse_by_pyruvate-d49pmxy.jpg
To help you come back to life on the inside.
4088657 as soon as i saw a link with an image, i got a crazy idea.
don't even open the image.
applejack.ponychan.net/chan/files/src/137057299099.png
Well you said you were dead and your favorite was Tavi so I decided to help you with your dead problem and give you a pic of your favorite pony. Do you not like it?
4089027 just didn't expect an octi nurse picture. as for did i like it, sorta.
if you'd like to continue with my "dead" problem, please continue with a message
it;ll help with the story coments