Twilight Sparkle practices Dream Magic, but an uncivilized pink pony messes it all up. Is three in one dream a crowd?
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Watch our heroes heroically sleep in complete safety of an old library! Weep as you take a stroll through their innermost thoughts and feelings - and also as you tear your hair out trying to figure out what's going on! Prepare! For the world of the dream!
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good intro has tension
Was that a Buffy reference? I do believe it was.
Interesting tale. I'm pretty confused overall. But I like this Spinkie Pie coupling.
I can see a mirror spinning in my soup.
That's how confused I am.
I do like the shipping, though, it's a very interesting one.
This fic is very much like a dream... in that it makes no freaking sense. I mean, I guess there's some Pinkie/Spike ship in there somewhere? I guess? But I gave up on trying to understand the story halfway through, and like a dream, I can't retain anything that actually happened. You're clearly a skilled writer, don't get me wrong, but I hope you write something more comprehensible next time!
I must exclaim my love and hate for this story. First the love, very well written, has the humor and events of a crack fic without BEING a crack fic (I despise those things.) Overall it reminded me of Alice in wonderland, sensible nonsense. Enjoyed it greatly. Now the hate, you made me want to change my story to pinkie spike instead of well rarity spike, which means you did an excellent job getting me, the reader, to connect to the characters. Best mlp fan fic without oc's I've read .
Why of course! It makes perfect sense!
Especially in particular the eloquent way with which the recursively intelligible paragraphs intertwine with a diverse meaning and blended comprehension which surpasses the notice and grasp of mere mortals.
what light you have cast upon the true literary ingeniousness which lies within all of our minds with this, oh so great, achievement.
Complementary is the cohesion of each and every sentence in rigid meaning withheld throughout the entire story from beginning to end without laxity or remorse towards the illusion if sanity of the subjects were to be considered, while in production of this veritable stone wall of text.
Such competence you show, embedding the recursive message of incomprehensibility inside of that most structured and grammatically correct masterpiece of writing.
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"yeah: you took words, put them in fully valid sentences, then placed them in correctly applied paragraphs and thus made it read like complete gibberish all the while spamming uncountable (unneeded and unused) details at a rate far too fast for the brain to comprehend"
No, really: This is nearly an exact recalling of what happens in my nightmares. (a pun, oh what fun) "Apart from them happening in the setting of my own life and ending up with me being naked for some reason (why always my clothes?)" A rapid series of events excruciatingly vivid and oh so many missed opportunities piled up with total lack of conscious control of the world I inhabit while it changes seemingly at random (to my every whim) until i force myself to die some horrible death (If i "Wake up" within the dream) and thus mercifully end my cortical suffering.
but yeah great effects,
realistic description of the dreaming world,
Good switching of perspectives,
good use of language,
All grammatically correct (as far as i could tell)
Just please don't write something like this again.
It was a horrible pain to read, taking me a painstaking ~ 20 minutes to do so
Good work, make something else with your great writing skills (+1)
P.S. I will not/cannot vote since this is all offline: I will have read it atleast 12 hours before the time of posting.
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That was truly fascinating. It seemed to be mostly about the relationship between P.P. and Spike, with Twilight's parts scarce. I was especially intrigued at how surprisingly melancholic Pinkie became at times. Will you be making another chapter?
BWAH! SO much sense is SO MUCH SENSE!
very trippy dippy with like of lots and all around!
I liked that! Though I'm personally not a fan of SpiPie myself.
What is this I don't even...
This is like a crack fic mixed with the confusion potential of inception and spiced with MLP and shipping...
Brilliant.
I fucking knew that Pinkie's odd trying-to-be-sophisticated speech was her subconciously striving to be more like Rarity. So Spike would like her. Totally called it! Feel like a boss now
Anyways, good story! Sure its sometimes confusing, but I'm guessing that's intentional and doesnt hurt the story fatally IMO. It IS the story in a way. You really, REALLY and dare I say accurately capture the eerie feeling of being in a dream, which is NOT an easy thing to achieve 
Point of critique: the Funky dreamstuff, while being enjoyable to read goes on for too long, it starts to get aggravating after a while. the Story needed a bit of streamlining, making it a tighter package. You may find that a bit vague but I cant put it any better than that 
That was my 2 cents of opinion and criticism, make of it what you will. Overall a very good read though, you should be proud of this 
Woah.... I'm so confused... Umm, good story.
All of my wut.
I CAN'T READ IT... MY BRAIN HURTS!!!
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