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This chapter took a turn I expected and one I didn't expect. I leave it up to you to figure out which is which.
I had a lot of fun writing it and I am eager to see what you think.
Enjoy!
hmmm i was kinda expecting a little more twilight/rarity butting heads about the whole movie stick. but good level of feels.
Arargghhhh! My Sparity feels! It's been stabbed! Oh well. I still look forward to developments between Twilight and Rairty.
My Sparity boner has been demolished... thanks a lot brah.
I just hope Spike ends up with someone by the end of this, the guy needs his own girl.
I noticed a subtle consistency with canon in Fluttershy's recollection of Dash's porn: those two are best friends who care for one another and have a longstanding friendship, but they often fail miserably to connect...Dash even considered pranking her once. That ambiguity between them makes for a lot of disagreements and keeps their relationship interesting. Nice that you brought up such an important detail.
I may have mentioned this before, but the only other author I can think of who gives equal treatment to all three characters in the Twarity love triangle is Sam Cole. It's always a pleasure to read fanfiction in which Twilight and Rarity give more than two shits about Spike, rather than just dismissing him because he's too young to understand anything. Even here, he's too young to understand everything, but is no less involved or capable of handling his part.
Now, come ooonnnnnn threesome!
Ow! right in the Sparity! Theres only one cure. And that is rarity x twi + spike!
wow im glad I added this story to my favs. I saw the whole Twilight x Rarity thing coming a mile away. Also agree with the others, threesom with spike or hope he gets his own mare, the lil guy deserves it
I feel like you have a set of dice that you roll at the start of each chapter to determine the characterizations of everyone in the story.
They act wildly inconsistently, is what I'm saying.
Still quite an enjoyable story, even if the entire mane 6 is taken away and replaced by a new set of changelings between every chapter.
My Spike feels are tingling...........and now they are dead..........I hope Spike comes out of this one alright, Im happy for Twi and Rarity but damn, Spike is gonna get hurt.
Saw the lesbian ship and the ship-sinking from a mile away. But I am glad that the white elephant in the room has been allowed to leave.....Now since it's more than 50/50 that Rarity and Twilight are gonna turn into lovers, it's only right that the two of them should try to get the matchmaker his own female companion---unless you want to create a huge 180 and say that he's a colt-cuddler.
I still think that the best way to apologize to Spike for not reciprocating his feelings is to have the threesome with Twilight--it takes care of the one-night fantasy with Rarity, Twilight and Rarity get re-acquainted intimately, the Sparity gets resolved, and hopefully it get concluded with a bit of a nice, clean ribbon.
Now it's time for all the other mares to discover Rarity's bisexual (I think) nature, as well as Twilight's confession. It's not gonna be common knowledge that Spike has those same feelings for Rarity and will have to grin and bear it (goddammit ), but it should be a surprise (to them, at least) that Spike actually ENCOURAGED Twilight to confess.
Also, to me, this is the first time I have seen Fluttershy coming out of the closet to Applejack. Usually that happens when she's talking to Rainbow Dash, if not at all. I wonder how that's gonna happen.
People can mourn the loss of Sparity if they like, I do so love Rarilight. Those of you who didn't see this coming................SURPRISE!!!!
Poor Spike. But sometimes things like this happens. Keep going
I'm a man searching for a truffle in a salad. This is good, but it's lacking a certain richness.
Not sure where things need to go, but I would certainly like to see more filming, perhaps a meeting with Luna?
You rely too much on the human world, microwaves, televisions and clocks break the flow of the story, though... I suppose you have to watch it on something. Guess I assumed it was on 16mm or 35mm for a projector. Also, a window is a clock; you can say mid-morning in any setting but 10:30am only in a modern setting.
'Under construction' score: 4/5 I'll be keeping an eye on you....
Well never been a Sprity fan so I don't mind it didn't happen but I really think spike needs a girl but not one of the 6 I have a sugestion though Interesting on how Fluttershy came out of the closent to AJ but that is really typical five times out of ten the confession always goes to a third party especially if they are comfortable with each other as friends and have the same belief structure like AJ and Fluttershy about what Rarity did. I think the Rarlight happened a little fast though but sometimes the best parts are after the initial get together now we get to see what will happen with their relationship and how it may or may not help Rarity with her troubles I also see a budding thing eventually happening with Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash too and I think that is the twist you didn't expect I WANT MOAR SOON If that is alright with you.
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Methinks that'll totally happen when the movie gets released and becomes the fastest-selling porn flick in the history of Equestria. ^_^
3367206 3367213 3367254 3367407 3367452 3367571 3367594 3367943 3368029 I didn't realize, but probably should have, how much everyone here loves Spike, so I'll definitely try to plan something for the guy. I agree he's really been a trooper in all this and he deserves something.
3367515 While I can't claim to be in the possession of any dice, I see your point. I will cite how everypony responded to the photo shoot compared to how they responded to the porn movie. I failed to capture proper characterization in either of these regards. It's definitely one of the weaker points of my writing, in that I can capture some superficial stereotypes of the characters in this show but struggle with exploring them on a deeper level. I'm glad you at least still find it an enjoyable read; I feel like my ability to entertain is a lot more developed.
3368554 Yeah, the Fluttershy thing was the one that came out of left field for me. I just wrote it as it came to me and it felt right, so I kept it in.
Thanks so much to all of you for sticking with this story so long! I had no idea it would get to be this long and I'm glad you're all still reading and leaving me positive feedback. It's not my strongest piece on a technical level, but it's a lot of fun to write and I'm glad that you're all enjoying it.
Good history, bro. But, Spike must have your mare.
poor spike i hate when stories break his heart like this and leave him hanging it just ticks me off.
3371115 Well... its break his heart, or ignore him. Either way people get upset. Unfortunately not all stories are Sparity, so he can't always be happy.
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Think of it this way. He wants Twilight to be happy, and this way Rarity can set him up with her sister or a pony his age. Rather than partake in Pedophilia. Since technically Spike was hatched in the same day as the Sonic Rainboom, and technically the reason AJ left for Manehatten was her parents dying, and resenting the farm / wanting to see the world. So technically since all the CMC are the same age. And Spike hatched / was born around that age. Rares getting Spike laid would be the same as her bedding her sister, or her friends.
Not saying Wincest isn't cool, but canon Rares isn't a pedo. So this way Spike can be with someone his own age, and still have the friendship of a good friend. Either that or he'd be left in the dark for a while, but I doubt with how Rares has been shown in this fic either her or Twi would do, or do for long.
3373936 spike x rarity wouldnt be pedophilia i hate when people think of it that way
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It would be though. Or at the very least Foalcon. Since if Spike = CMC age. And CMC + Mane 6 = foalcon. Then Spike + Mane 6 [minus Twi whose technically his mother] = foalcon. No reason to get mad at it. It's a cute ship, and he's adorable. But even in the show they call him a baby dragon, whose biologically no older than the Crusaders. Calling the Crusaders + Mane 6 faolcon, or Pedophilia. And not doing the same for Spike whose litterally as old as they are is hypocritical.
Or since technically ponies aren't human we can skip calling it pedo, and stick to calling it foalcon. I read foalcon, and I read Spike Ships so I have no problem with that. Since ponies and dragons aren't humans, and aren't necessarily treated in human terms. But none the less Rares wouldn't bed anypony her sisters age. So why'd she bed a dragon of the same age group idk?
3373995 I understand your perspective but there are a lot of Sparity fans reading this story and I don't think you're going to win any of them over. The logic is there (an interesting example of the transitive property as it relates to shipping), but I think a lot of people are willing to ignore it because I think they can relate to Spike since his love for Rarity is unrequited. That's at least my take on why Sparity is so popular.
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Oh don't get me wrong. I'm all for SpikeXRarity, but logically, I was just stating that "Rawr!!! I hate Rares not being with Spike!" Is not only close minded, but is ignoring that Rares is the Element of Generosity, and with her with Twilight and how nice / kind you've made Rares here. She in my opinion won't leave Spike's heart shattered, but would as she did with all her friends is talk to him (as the author am I correct in that assumption that she's going to talk to him and try to mend his broken heart?), and as a delicious subplot could easily try hooking him up with one of the CMC, and get him a good GF.
Yes part of me think that a RarLightXSpike might be interesting, but honestly I don't pick up that vibe in this fic. If anything I pick up a big sister/good friend vibe from Rarity. And the only reason I can think that she'd leave his love non-requited is because she cares for him, but didn't know until know how to break it to him without ruining a good friendship. If that assumption is wrong, then I apologize.
Good story though. I'm really loving what you're doing, good characterization. Keep honest to the characters,and most importantly you seem to take their emotions and personal feelings into the equation making this a really good read.
3375511 Well, I'm glad you like the story. Thanks for reading!
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You're welcome . I do hope that Spike gets a happy ending though, and I'm happy for Rarity and Twilight. They deserve for something good to happen to them finally.
3377065 Fuck I think I meant Applejack to say that. I'll change it right now.
I've been reading this on my vita. great so far, now, if only I was able to read it at school inconspicuously......( I turned 18 last sunday, but I still go to school. I want to try to get a job as either a graphics designer, or a software prgrammer.)
Few little subplots fleshed out here as well as what was the underlying story, so this one's going to be a hard act to follow, story-wise.
Good to see Spike making his own mind up about things. He may not yet be as worldly as his friends but he knows enough about his situation to come to reasoned decisions, and while he may not be making the best ones with regards to his immediate happiness it may work out for him in the long term. Not every story gets a happy ending but it'd be suitable if something turned out all right for him
It comes to mind that we've not seen Applejack and Fluttershy interact too much in the show, so putting them together for a spell will be an intriguing way for the story to go. With their similar mindset regarding the central plot and a "confession" needing to be talked through, there's plenty of mileage in that track. Hope Pinkie got Dash sorted out
Glad things didn't go too far too fast (though maybe a little faster than it may generally work out). Twilight's going to have to do a double take in the morning when she realises she's not alone
Fucking lesbians.
It should be + me.
But, do continue.
Well I kind of expected this, but it isn't the turn I would have chosen. I just feel it's way too cliche to ship the Mane Six with each other. I would have kept Twilight lusting for Rarity, but I also would have Rarity unable to return the affection, because she's into stallions (one in particular at the moment). At the very least this would set things up for a bittersweet ending, with a hefty side of awkward.
As a final note, maybe it's the whiskey Rarity drank, but I think she decided she loved Twilight back a little too quickly, don't you?
>The sentence seemed to hang in the air, it’s implicit meaning clear
*its
Might I suggest a threesome?