After the treacherous happenings of In the Background, Octavia and Vinyl managed to escape with only scars and nightmares of their time in the Everfree. Octavia, on the other hand, is now being haunted by nightmares that are slowly revealing that the mysterious alicorn of nursery rhymes exists and has freed himself from his imprisonment. Are they all chess pieces in a large plot to kill the princesses in a power struggle that caused the sisters to split in the first place?
**This is a sequel to In the Background. If you have not read it, it would help in understanding what all is going on in this story. Comment, Rate, and Enjoy.**
Chapters (11)
I am liking what I read! I'll definitely be tracking this one.
And something that bugged me from the last story: is Eyn Spyyr pronounced inspire?
Frostwyrm
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It is very close to being pronounced as: Inspire.
Glad to see that you are enjoying the story.
And to the one who thumbed down the story, please give a reason as to why the story wasn't satisfactory so that I can address the issue. It always helps us authors to get the different types of feedback, negative or positive. Please and thank you.
I love people who go to stories and give them one stars(or thumb downs)...
Die in a fire!
240994 Can't tell if wants those people to die.... Or is one himself...
As for this story, it's awesome. Didn't even read it and I thumb this bitch up fav it, and track it. In the background was fucking boss, and this is looking like it's going to be even better. Course, at the time I posted this comment I did read it.
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Lol those who bomb stories without reading them just to do it... in my opinion if you have a valid reason not to like it then vote it down, but whenever I vote something down I have the courtisy to write in the comments what I believe is wrong and give some constructive criticism to fix the problem.
244930 So you want those people to die in a fire, and you are not, in fact, a person who does that. Kool. When I thumb something down, I tell them why. To many frigging grammar mistakes, or things like that. One or two. Meaning spelling, and punctuation I point them out. 3-5 meaning Formatting errors, Spelling errors, and Punctuation, I point them out unless it's too bad. Much more then that I just plan give up saying it's a grammatical travesty and tell them to take a grade school grammar class then try again.
like a wise mad man once said. Here, we, go.
great chapter bro!
249009 I very much enjoy your wise man. I bet he was quite the joker.
I'll be holding a much higher standard in the quality of this story than the last one. Only downside to that, chapter releases will be slightly slower, but this story won't disappoint.
249059 I'm sure it won't.
WEWT!! UPDATE!! And I doubt Eyn went down that easily. All this planning to go down without taking out the whole of Canterlot? I doubt. I very eagerly await the next chapter. You have me thoroughly caught in your web that is this story.
[Edit] P.S. First!
Whoa. So he isn't dead.... I didn't figure he'd fall pray so easily. I eagerly await the next chapter. Keep up with the awesome.
Shit just got real... Or... was real... Time travel is confusing. Love your story man. This back story for Eyn? Very cool.
508494 This will make his intentions a bit clearer. You have to understand where he is coming from before he carries out his plan. The end result won't make any sense if I just took you to the concert and had the events and conclusion of the story, it would be terrible and make sense only to me. So I had to get a bit creative to give Eyn a powerful backstory. Slowly you will see something emerge out of his memories.
509351 You speak the truth. The only other thing you could've done is a mass reveal kinda like in Psych. When all of a sudden everything comes together in one mind blowing scene. But with everything you got going on, I think this works better. Scratch that, I know this works best.
That's one epic cliff hanger you left me with. I'm going to enjoy the next chapter!
Everything is coming together now. It's all starting to make sense.
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Part of it is making sense. How this all relates back to the present time is still up in the air. I should be able to write a bit faster now because College has ended for the summer.
639187 That's awesome bro. It's a full blown federal crime that this doesn't have more viewers. This is awesome. Your an awesome writer.
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I am just not well publicized. It might be read eventually by someone, but as of right now. It is obscure.
Here we go! Shit gonna get real soon. I am quite excited! Random thought that popped into my head while reading. My thought's on how Eyn is going to take his revenge, is while he is in Octavia's body (That's what she said) he was altering her genes or something so when the time is right, he can fully take command and perhaps grow a pair of wings and a horn to use his full Alicorn gifts to the max. Like a baws. That's what I think anyway. Must past that I'm not sure enough on anything to voice my thoughts. Even though I'm not REALLY voicing anything. Just words on a screen.
WELL NOW that's interesting isn't it
There is no true definition of evil - and this story has done a damn fine job of portraying that! The way you have characterised Eyn really justifies his own point of view, and makes it seem that he isn't at fault. (This is even more challenging with Discord...)
Loved the "gift from a friend", especially Rael Ize.
Definitely expecting a continuation here! Lyra has a lot of question to answer.
The only irk I had was in the previous chapter, where is was difficult to tell if Eyn was part of Octavia, a projection (in some sections), or back in physical form.
Anyway, a nice conclusion to a great story!
Frostwyrm
And more sappy stuff and tears!
Yes manly tears cried for a good story are still manly tears.
Congratulations on both stories, this and the one before this one.
Both of them should be read atleast twice now.
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It is isn't it?
Thank you for enjoying my story and commenting, it is always greatly appreciated.
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That was one of the themes I wanted to capture in this story. Villains are normally easily hated and them losing feels good to people. I looked at that and decided to throw that away. I wanted a villain that was hard to hate, one that had a good reason for his actions. I made the generic good guys be bad guys and the bad guy into a good guy. I equally wanted to break another common narrative element and make the main character not a main piece in the central conflict, but more of a bystander to restrict the reader heavily to truly bring out the mystery of what was going on, equally with the sensation of helplessness since truly nothing could be done. No pony was given super powers or inpony (inhuman) strength. The next story will see the return of all of the previous holders of the Elements of Harmony along with the return of the Elements of Disharmony.
The mystery and irk that you had about what Eyn was at that point is a planned element I wanted to include. Perception was another major element I looked at. I tried to condition the reader with some of the elements in the early chapters about the perceptions of reality. Eyn's existence in the end of the chapter can and should be questioned. He did study the psychology magic and he can warp reality better than any other pony.
Thank you for the review.
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So will the third story be read twice, or will it require that they be read three times?
Thank you for enjoying the story. I'll at some point be writing up the third and final installment of my series. I still need to outline where that story will be heading. I know where it will start and who will be in it, but I haven't really concreted the central conflict. So a third story will be released in the near future.
Onto the next chapter!
Now THAT is one big ass plot twist. I did NOT see that shit coming. Deer in the head lights, I can only wait and see what hits me.
Onwards friend, TO GLORY!
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Yes, they shall be read through three times again then.. Can't resist reading things over and over, kind of loopy, but good.
Rael Ize = Eyn Spyyr
So epic, I bet Luna knows, but I have to wonder if Celestia knows as well.
Very interesting, glad I clicked the link. Big fan of both Lyra Bonbon and Octavia Vinyl, wonderful pairings.
So~ooo looking forward to reading more and wondering if there will be more chapters in the near future?
Keep up the good work
Just to clarify, I am not referring only to this story, I'd love to read more of what you write
2438260 You are actually in luck and quite lucky, I am starting up the final installment to the Eyn Spyyr trilogy, so we aren't looking at a few chapters but potentially 20 or so with upwards of 100k words, at least that is what I am shooting for. I technically have the Opening finished, I am just proofreading it and letting it go through my Beta Reader before posting it. Thank you for reading my story. I always appreciate the feedback.
so i'm gonna take a 1000m shot here and say that Eyn Spyyr maybe planning a assasination but as to where octavia and vinyl come in is still a mystery. hmmmmm...
-happynoname56 or trueshot
shit i didn't think it would turn out like this, but if i have learned anything from movies the pawns (in this case octavia and possibly vinyl) would carry out what was unfinished by the master. cant wait to read on later
till then im happynoname56 signing off
Now THAT was a bloody good story.
Lots of small errors and whatnot, but not nearly enough to overshadow the epicness of this fic. Very, VERY impressive