Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash discover the body of a pony just outside the Everfree Forest. Not just dead, eaten! They seek help from the new town sheriff and his deputy. But it's soon clear that they'll need a lot more help than that. Enter J. Edgar Hoofer, head of the recently formed Equestrian Bureau of Investigation. The case doesn't turn out to be as simple as either party thought. And the closer they come to solving the case, the more they realize just what evil is lurking around the normally peaceful town.
Shout out to my best buddy Ravebrony42 for allwoing me to use his OCs. Credit to rem-dog for helping me name the OC character of J. Edgar Hoofer.
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Well.....that was uh......different. 0.o
Carry on.
Oh, and you used 'site' instead of 'sight' twice.
2944035 Oops, I can fix that. Like most of my stories, I started writing this late at night. And yeah, it's different I know. After so many romantic comedy stuff, I wanted to change it up some, and I've had this idea in my head for a while now. But of course I'll still be working on my TwiMacVerse. I hope you meant different in a good way. lol
2944844 Yeah, it's a good way. I normally steer clear of stories with a Dark and Tragedy tag... but then again, one of my own has those two!
2944852 Cool cool. So, I'm not so awake to notice where I spelled sight with site. Can you quote the sentences where I used them? It'll be a lot easier to edit the mistakes.
2944874 Sure. Turns out that it was only one instance. Too be fair, I read this just as I woke up..
So yeah, there you go.
2944889 Actually, there were two; I fixed the other but couldn't find the second at first. lol Thanks
You'd think that after his family shunned him, he'd be a bit more lenient with how to address ponies, especially after Twi told him not to call her princess.
Okay, so these police ponies. This is who I have them visualised as...
Sheriff Blue Knight.
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Deputy Hum Free.
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And even though it's not the same film, Pencil Pusher.
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2978979 Well, I didn't create the character. And despite his rocky family background, I'd see him as upholding certain traditions based on conditioning and such. Here are the mini bios by my best friend Ravebrony42
2979891 Fair enough, I can understand that, but like it says, Twilight doesn't want to be called that. If he's conditioned as such, surely he'd respect her request as princess? It just seems a bit convoluted to me.
But yeah, that's who I immediately thought of when reading about them.
2979916 Well, I was going for humor.
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