Hm. Floating Fortress? Pocket Plane Palace?

Altogether, it's... really a bad idea. She can't hide it, and they'll know they have a time limit. If they don't manage to just sabotage whatever it is, anyway. They'll be desperate, and desperate people do crazy things. Next logical step if they're in protective custody is kidnapping the little sisters to draw them out or bombing their houses at a distance.

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Not really. The Cult of Harmony isn't outright malicious, they aren't even very crazy about this concept of having to kill the Bearers to force the Element to find a new one. Malicious acts aren't really their forte, at all, not to mention this is a very sudden act of desperation that Twilight hasn't let anypony in on, save for Celestia. Information might leak here and there, but the whole purpose of the secrecy is to hide the purpose of what's being built, and who it's going to belong to, and what it's going to be used for.

You came close though! I'd say....lukewarm on your guesses.

Can't wait to find out what Twilight's plan is! Also, there a couple of formatting derps; two italicizes and one bold are not correct, look for <i> and <b> and you'll find them.

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Gah! I should have caught those when I was proofreading! I've failed as a proofreader! My life is ruined!
*commits Sudoku and gets crushed by numbers*

3093048its cool man, it's cool! Lifts the numbers and reanimates the guy. Now u can prevent other mistakes.

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But I'm a girl. It's kinda in the name. Samantha.

Anyways, more comments! They make me feel like I'm actually good at something!

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That's because you are, Samantha.

Now you know why the lack of readers upset me so, too!

My guess is Twilight is requesting a personal airship, in order to keep mobile. Fits the title. Military training is required in order to work with the Royal Guard crew.

I wonder if we'll be seeing an alternate path to Twilicorn in this story.
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Well, she has let slip to Quick Cure that she's preparing something for a month. With her luck, he's one of the cultists. Or at least Cure will unwittingly inform them. There's that "Sun Diarch" comment, hmmhmm.
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Also, if the sex in this story is graphic enough that you want to make separate chapters, I believe you need to give this fic a Mature rating or sequester the sexual chapters into an additional Mature story.

If not, I don't think T-rated "sex" or Sexy Discretion Shots require sex-free chapter versions.

And goodness, with the amount of crap you're heaping on our poor ponies (terrorism, psychopaths, assassination attempts) and the overall atmosphere of fear and paranoia, I think a Dark tag is warranted. In addition, a Gore tag for graphic violence.

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Ah-hah! Correct on both guesses! This is an airship-centric story that's also an AU story that leads towards a different way of Twilight becoming an alicorn. Take note: this is a very different path, and Twilight's magic is beastly by the time she becomes an alicorn. In other words, she's even more potent than she already is in the show, and she knows how best to put it to use in tandem with her airship.

It's going to be so fun to write....!

As for Quick Cure, well....I'm not going to spoil that. I'm just going to leave that possibility out there. I will say this though: the 'Sun Diarch' comment was intentional~!

What you're saying about the sexual stuff is true though. Honestly I wasn't sure how to approach it, and I'm starting to think that it would be far, far simpler to just say 'screw it' and just leave the sex in there. Mostly because the more I think about it, the more I realize that the growing relationships in the story are going to be a major focus during downtime when they're in the air and on land, and sex whether you want to admit it or not is often a big part of relationships for most people. To try to cherry-pick the 'important' bits of bonding and character development from those sexual moments would be difficult if not impossible without making it just as offensive to those that have no interest in such a thing.

Sooooo yeah, I mostly went with Teen because I wasn't sure where I was going with that at first. You do make a very good point though, even if that content isn't here NOW doesn't mean I have any right to downplay what the story's actually going to be. So I'm gonna go fix that!

I don't really think the 'Gore' tag applies though. Hrm....well, actually I'll have to ponder on that one. There are some scenes later that are pretty dark, but not outright 'blaaaaah guts everywhere' kind of gory or anything.

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Yeah, I don't know where the limit for "Gore" lies. Maybe you really need gorn-level gore for it to apply.

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I would assume gore applies when I start writing things like 'Her blood rushed from the slice in her stomach while her hooves desperately grabbed for her spilling guts, frantically trying to keep a part of herself where it belonged' or something along those lines. Excessive bleeding perhaps doesn't count, but gore is more like....getting organs torn out or something like that, I would think, or being dismembered.

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.....You're sort of forgetting something. I think the dark and gore tags might be applicable here. The dark tag at the very least (which you've already done). While it might not always be gory (or rarely ever, in fact), I think it might be worth thinking about in later chapters. I'm not gonna spoil anything for our readers, but I think you know what I'm talking about.

Woooooo~ Cryptic bullshit~
I am a totally normal pony with no twisted or violent thoughts in her head.

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Hrm, you have a point. I DO love to be excessively descriptive sometimes, especially when it's so important! I suppose I should just throw it in as a precaution.

you sir are evil. you and your cliff hangers!! ugg... cant wait till the next chapter! great story!!

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Actually, I'm just a procrastinating, writer's block'd sonuvabitch at the moment. Not quite evil, but almost there!

It's a shame this story has fallen under the radar so far.

How are you holding up?

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Well, my writing mood is getting better, and some progress has been made on Chapter 5. But I've got Taming the Rage's sequel(s) to work on as well, along with this clopfic idea that's just too damn good to pass up on writing, so I'm keeping busy!

Thank you for asking though!

Hmmm, it seems that Twi is going to seriously kick some cultists' flanks in the future
I'd like to see this continued

If this story does not include "Badass Twilight", then I will be severely disappointed. Still going to like it either way! Great work so far!

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Actually, there's going to be plenty of badass Twilight in this story! It's sort of an exploration into the kind of pony Twilight would become if she got into the same kind of profession as her brother. Well, sort of the same. Military and whatnot.

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Glad to hear it! Been forever since I've updated it, but hey.

This isn't dead! Promise! I'm trying to poke Fire to keep writing, since he's got the only copy of Chapter 5 at the moment. And most of the ideas up until a certain point in the story.

Alright, I'm invested now. You're gonna have to finish this.

My money is on a set of six Harmony-powered giant robots that can fuse together.

"Fine with me! I can put my parties on hold if it'll make Twilight feel better! Not to mention if somepony kills me, I won't be able to make ponies smile more, and Rarity wouldn't be able to make her dresses, and-and Rainbow Dash wouldn't get to be in the Wonderbolts, and....y'know girls, why are we arguing with her?"

Pinkie is having to be the voice of reason, here. Does anyone else find that odd?

"Well, there is one thing, Twilight....you forgot it, when you made your list."

"Hm? Wh-what, what'd I forget?"

Celestia chuckled softly. "Well...."

Gaaahg! Cliffhangers! How I hate 'em!