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let me Give you a bit of advice AN only goes before a,e,I,o,u never y or any other letters you shouldn't need an editor to fix this for you
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i'm a rebel
R.I.P. Story, you died a victim to the "inner demon/voices in the OC's head" Cliche. May your death serve as a reminder that voices in your head is a terribly overused plot point in Original character stories and is rarely, if ever, used well.
7664245 A cliche? I didn't know that...
7664345 I have read, more times than I care to count, Stories where said OC has multiple personalities in his/her head, Sombra possessing someone, and the whole Inner demon/angel thing. Its a fine plot point, It's just really hard to pull off well and creatively. For the most part people end up rehashing the same old garbage over and over thinking all the while "Wowee this is great! I'm so proud of my new and innovative plot development!". Its just to bad because almost always its completely unnecessary and quite frankly such a curve ball you would have to use the Hubble Telescope to see where it cam from. Your story, Intentional or otherwise, has an OC that at times is hard to take seriously. Sure he has his moments were he feels genuine and serious, his storming of the Diamond dog Burrow and his interactions with Chrysalis, being two examples. I urge you great caution in this merging of Sombra's persona with Isaiah, If the goal is to take the threat of Sombra seriously than perhaps it is time for Isaiah to drop the whole Bashful Country huntsman attitude and adopt the more stoic soldier who sinned his ass off to survive the apocalypse that he clearly has within himself. I honestly wish you luck, your gonna need it in spades to fend off the kind of Cheese this could bring down upon this fic.
7664424 thanks for info
I like the story, but the amount of grammar mistakes is just way too high for my taste. A couple per chapter is one thing, one every or every second paragraph just rips me out of the story every time. I really recommend you get an editor/proofreader, especially for the earlier chapters. As it stands, it's simply not enjoyable for me to read.
7753476 eh what's up doc
7820496 send it in the pm
7891942 thanks
8040350 when I do have one, they end up disappearing on me completely.. and yes I'm looking for one but again when I did finally find one they disappear.
8048730 Yes yes It was.
Fucking hell! Another great story that stopped getting updates!
8099247 I haven't stop writing just very busy
So. Many. Grammer. Mistakes.
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The fact that I'm German and real picky about grammer is not lost on me and I find it ironic.
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Please tell me something I don't already know please don't even mention that I get an editor.... already went though five who didn't tried to fix anything before they disappeared on me
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You get editors and they didn't do shit? Those must be shitty editors. Most likely skimmed through the thing.
8289730 and the worse thing that happens with almost every single editor I find
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Raises her brow a tad Looks like you might need to stop employing 9 year olds then and find someone who can get shit done.