Shining Armor is conflicted by his inner most emotions towards Cadence. He questions his love for her and his sexuality. He wants to feel the warm beat of another pony's heart, but he's not sure if he wants a mare's heart or a stallion's. These feelings prove a worthy opponent, maybe too worthy.
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Dude......that was awesome...u basically just summed up the entire gay hate era in one awesome story....I will go on a rage if this isn't in the featured box by tomorrow ..nice job dude take a like favour and watch!
Okay, this story right here? It's got potential. Real potential to be really good. Unfortunately, if I were to list the reasons I can't click thumbs up, I'd be here all night. Dialogue, grammar, pacing, everything is off! All these things are important. A story simply can't be carried on concept alone. Don't get me wrong, I want to like this, I really do, but in its current state, the only word to describe it is 'mediocre'.
I recommend finding yourself an editor to look over this. Linking powers activate!
Much lols were had
Great story
2729879 Can you please elaborate so I can improve my work better?
2732474 Well first of all, the story moves at a breakneck pace, zipping through scenes like Rainbow Dash, then there's the use of all-caps in dialogue, and of course the ever present fact that this story, while ambitious, comes off as the sort of poorly written mess that unfortunately plagues a good many if not most M/M stories.
As I said, you should get an editor to look over this. See this link? These guys can give you much more in-depth help than I can just in your comments section.
The misspelling of "crystal" in the title led me to expect Shining Armor/Chrysalis as a pairing.
2732474 i love this story!!! can you write some kind of sequel please?
2747962 Oops. I didn't mean to spell it like that. :p
2748326 Eeyup.
2750911 YAY YOUR THE BEST PLEASE OH PLEASE OH CAN YOU MAKE IT A CLOPFIC TOO?!!! THAT WOULD BE SO AWESOME!!! A SHININGMAC FIC IS AWESOMENESS TO THE AWESOMENESS INFINITE!!!!
Very moving im almost crying but its a great story