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Fluttershy has a secret. A secret she guarded dearly, for the sake of a treasured friend. But now that the secret is out, she'll be forced to make the most difficult choice of her life...

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cool do more

This is pretty good, short and sweet. Very well done.

F**k me:rainbowderp:, that was six hundred words of perfection and emotion:pinkiegasp:, very impressive.

I would want to see more of this. Its pretty good.

Ok, no lie, I came into this fic thinking "700 words? Shit's gonna suck."

Thank you my friend, for gracing me with the honor of making myself look like an idiot. This story, while short, was amazing. :pinkiehappy:

That was a very beautiful vignette.

You have destroyed my expectations for a super short fic, 5 stars.

very nice didn't expect something this short to be this good well done:pinkiehappy:

Oh my god. I know the feeling of wanting something sooo bad and seeing someone else achieve it with out even trying or wanting to.

fortunately I eventually DID achieve my goal. After two years of trying and watching as one by one other people were granted what I wanted I finally gave it one last 'Hoorah!' and laid my cards on the table! Then I finally got it!

lol There is no life lesson that can't be solved the T.T.G.L. way XD

this is gonna get featured. i know it...

Wow, what a position to be put in. The ending is what got to me the most, I guess ignorance is bliss eh Rainbow?

Wonderful, 4/5. The plot/message was solid, but it could be better presented, it was a bit dry really, but touching all the same.

Have a good one.

More please? :fluttercry: I believe this fic could easily be made bigger, and actually be more than one chapter! (Its complete

Ezn

Old school.

Much better than I expected 600 words to be. Could definitely be made into a much larger story, but this was still very nice. Keep up the great writing!

~SolidFire

Living the dream indeed... was this written before the 1000-word limit existed, out of curiosity? I came by Fimfiction around the end of Season 3, so... yeah.

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It was! This was written back in season one, though it was posted here a while after that. Yeah, I guess I would have to expand it to post it here now...

Your Trixie fic got featured in a callback blog. I've read it before, and eventually may add my own review, but that will take some time since the way you wrote it was sheer genius.

Saying that, it's a rather profound story for being so short. It's bookended by Rainbow Dash cheering out loud about a Wonderbolt being in town, fantasising out loud about joining the Wonderbolts. Then, in the middle we find that Fluttershy, the shy, skittish one whom barely flies (and in fact, it's telling that the longest I recall her staying in the air using her wings instead of staying grounded is in Putting your Hoof Down, in the scene where she's a big bully to Pinkie and Rarity, though that episode hadn't aired as of this story being posted) is a talent of such wonders that Spitfire, singled out in the text as captain of the Wonderbolts, makes her an offer only seeing her flying at night in private.

There's a lot of people in real life who can emphasise with that, where no matter how hard they train or practice at something some other person has such raw talent they don't even have to try to be better. Heck, Trixie even gets flanderized a bit in fanon into being like this with magic to Twilight (though Twilight does study lots). Fluttershy, to her credit, understands this and values her friendship with Rainbow Dash too greatly. Bonus if the events of this story were to take place after Green Isn't Your Color, where she did this exact same thing to Rarity and doesn't wish to risk it again.

So, good work author! Not very often I can read through a story in a few minutes and then stop to think about how beautiful it was that so much could be said in so little.

May I adapt this into an audio drama?

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