Time Passes Slowly By

by MasterFrasca

Reflections

I slumped on the wall, sliding down until I was in a sitting position with my hooves spread in front of me. My life had to be over. There was no way that that could have happened just now. I never imagined that she would just leave me like that. I thought Twilight and I had something going for us. I thought we were in love. Little did I know she would kick me to the curb and tell me that I was just another one of her assignments. I was just this month’s project to her, nothing more.

She had come up to me and asked right out if I was single. She had asked me that exactly one month ago. I had no clue she was looking for love then, much less love with me. I was just a simple clock repair pony, nothing special. I had always looked at her from afar. She had peaked my interest during that moment I saw her at Pinkie’s signature “Welcome to Ponyville” party. Her profession, her mane, and her personality all helped to shoot an arrow of love through my heart. I had tried to keep my feelings to myself, because what would a hero like her want to do with such an isolated pony as me. She was the savior of Equestria, stopping Nightmare Moon’s wrath cold, while I was just the pony who had broken clocks brought in to be fixed.

But she had asked me, not Blues or any of the other renowned Apple family stallions. She had asked me for a date. She had been blatant and awkward when she said it, yet calm and sincere at the same time. That first night she had asked me, I knew that we were going to have something wonderful. We went out and had dinner at a local café, turning quickly from passing strangers to two ponies in love. That dinner was the beginning of the best times of my life.

Oh the wondrous nights we shared with each other, going out and gazing upon the thousands of stars in the sky. She would point out all the stars and name them by heart, and I would make up different constellations and show them to her. We laughed making out funny shapes with the millions of glowing dots in the night sky. There were days we spent together where she would come to my shop and I’d show her all the different machines I kept in the basement. She was astounded at the amount of things put into making and repairing clocks and other devices. We would sit down there forever while I tried to explain how a clock works so well, and why some needed wound up or why some would never work again. She was always eager to have me show her how a part worked or how to use a certain tool. After a few days I even had her help me fix a clock. I told her where the piece would go, and she would levitate it into place.

She had seemed so happy and energetic during those nights, learning about the inner workings of clock in town. She was always eager, too, to show me something new when she could think of it, and as the days went by she grew happier as we grew closer. One peculiar thing she always did was take notes while we did just about anything, but that didn’t bother me one bit. A few times she even brought her best friend, Spike, out with us. He was almost like a son to her, and she always knew how to look after him. All these fun times had led up to this fateful day: the day things changed.

Ironically, the pegasus ponies had scheduled a small storm for today, and Twilight had asked that I come over to the library for some “emergency.” I had thought that, after all those hours spent in my little workshop, she was going to show me something special. I had taken my coat to try and keep dry in the pouring rain, but since I had no umbrella, my head got the bulk of the rain. By the time I had arrived at the tree, my mane was dripping with water and plastered to the top of my head. I tried to shake some of the water out, but my head was thoroughly covered, and I gave up just heading to the door, dripping wet. I knocked on the door, hoping that she had something I could dry myself with inside.

I didn’t know I would never make it through the door.

She opened the door and once she saw it was me, she said plainly, “We need to stop seeing each other. My studies on dating are over, and I no longer need your services.”

She had quickly shut the door on me, and I just stood there I shock. I should have known that the Princess’s only student would have never taken a true interest in me, and yet here I stood, a fool who thought he had found his soul mate. The notes. The fact that we had never kissed. The blatant question that started it all. All these signs raced over my head as I trudged blindly through the forest of love, not realizing the quicksand beneath my hooves. My only option is to go back to the shop, back to my monotonous Twilight-free life.

Clocks were the only things I understood anyway…

Comments

[TheMareinTheMoon]

d'awwwwww

I like this pairing now....

[OminousBrony]

Screw you and screw this "Fic" if you want to even call it that

[MasterFrasca]

191105 Woah buddy. What's the hate for?

[Mobius of the Moon]

Short, but cute.

[ieatpoooooooop]

D'awwww
Nerdy romance sadfic...
Good tho.

[OminousBrony]

191112

I highly doubt Twilight would do what happened in your fic.

[Yasahiro]

Please write more!
Or Celestia's reaction and hers or Twilight's perspective!
Now that I think about it, just like now calling Twilight's friendship "Studies of Magic of Friendship" it could be possible that Celestia really wanted her to find love yet she called it "studies on dating"
I need to know moar!

[AmazonRiderRX]

Why did u make twilight into trolllight that's wasn't cool

[Eldorado]

191152

Sorry bro but without any sort of exposition or explanation for any of Twilight's cold-hearted behavior, this doesn't make any sense at all. Maybe the whole point was to portray Twilight as cold and cruel because it's from Whooves's perspective and that's probably how he imagines her at this point, but when the reader brings an entire collective knowledge of her inherently good-natured personality to the table, you get a pretty jarring collision that just ends up breaking your credibility.

If this actually had a beginning and an end and some legitimate character expo instead of one disconnected and unrealistic montage of "Twi wouldn't do that. Or that. Or that..." then I think you could be successful here. But, as it stands here, you went a bit wide of the mark.

Oh well. Still a better romance than Stephenie Meyer could write.

Also I hope you know me well enough by now to understand that I don't mean to sound so negative. When something's bad, I focus on the good to offer encouragement (rainbowfluttergummy), and when something's good I focus on the bad and try to make it perfect. But on the whole, even if I don't approve of his quite immature "rate 0.5 and flame the comments" approach, I'm gonna have to throw in with OminousBrony on this one.

>$0.02

[Magical Trevor]

... Sorry, but that was just kinda... Lacking, just a bit. I mean, I could understand if this was the BEGINNING of a fic, but as a one-shot? I'm left disappointed, sorry. There's too much info missing to make anything satisfying. At least, IMO, for a one-shot, it could have used more detail. A different ordering of events might have helped as well, as the climax was kind of right at the beginning, and you don't really do that... There has to be SOMETHING to build up to it. I felt like I knew the entire chapter right at the beginning, and that just made it feel like a waste of time to read. I won't deny that you can't write well, it's just how it was executed that felt lacking...

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

p.s. I was merely trying to give constructive criticism. If you have something to say against me, please keep it civil, as I am only trying to help. Thank you. If I can think of how to better explain why I didn't care for this fic, I shall make sure to add it as well.

[MasterFrasca]

191384>>191296 Well thanks for the criticism on why you guys didn't like it. I guess this fiction could be categorized as a flop, but I knew that one would come up eventually. I just wasn't on top of my game while making this... oh well...

Well, I guess I'll just go back and work on my other romance everyone seems to like more. Again thanks for the advice.

[Swokk]

I thought it was a happy fic. I was wrong. I can't be wrong.
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[Cloud Shimmers]

And then he went home and saw a strange pocket watch opened it and found a magic blue box. Right?

[Lucefudu]

I am actually saddened to see so many people who don't appreciate one story whose only purpose is existing.
This fanfic is meant to make us wonder and think about the possibilities. It is not wrapped up for a reason. Its just a simple tale, told from somepony. This portrays his thoughts about a single subject. This is a Slice of Life.
Sure, it has near-zero plot. But it has more than infinite implications.

I for one, love it and appreciate it for what it is.

[BarrenBaron]

hey you just released a chaper for a different fic your doing (also with a doctor twi pairing) where it's raining heavilly out...
and it's a dating/romance fic...

Hmmmmm...

[soulwinds]

There should be a continuing chapter, to explain what happened to twi and why she became like that

[taokami]

I haz a sad nao

[zzzena]

i actually like this one, just long enough to get the message across, but still shot enough to be a nice quick read.
a different fic with the same paring, with a happy ending in the future perhaps?