Occasionally, I write things. I have to admit I'm pretty bad at it. Occasionally, I edit things. Same story there really.
Dr. Whooves reflects on his short fling with the girl of his dreams, Twilight. He didn't realize that the relationship wouldn't last very long, nor did he know that the love he was getting was tainted.
Antoher short love story written up in class. This time it's Twihooves, but the relationship dosen't work out as planned.
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d'awwwwww
I like this pairing now....
Screw you and screw this "Fic" if you want to even call it that
191105 Woah buddy.
What's the hate for?
Short, but cute.
D'awwww
Nerdy romance sadfic...
Good tho.
191112
I highly doubt Twilight would do what happened in your fic.
Please write more!
Or Celestia's reaction and hers or Twilight's perspective!
Now that I think about it, just like now calling Twilight's friendship "Studies of Magic of Friendship" it could be possible that Celestia really wanted her to find love yet she called it "studies on dating"
I need to know moar!
Why did u make twilight into trolllight that's wasn't cool
191152
Sorry bro but without any sort of exposition or explanation for any of Twilight's cold-hearted behavior, this doesn't make any sense at all. Maybe the whole point was to portray Twilight as cold and cruel because it's from Whooves's perspective and that's probably how he imagines her at this point, but when the reader brings an entire collective knowledge of her inherently good-natured personality to the table, you get a pretty jarring collision that just ends up breaking your credibility.
If this actually had a beginning and an end and some legitimate character expo instead of one disconnected and unrealistic montage of "Twi wouldn't do that. Or that. Or that..." then I think you could be successful here. But, as it stands here, you went a bit wide of the mark.
Oh well. Still a better romance than Stephenie Meyer could write.
Also I hope you know me well enough by now to understand that I don't mean to sound so negative. When something's bad, I focus on the good to offer encouragement (rainbowfluttergummy), and when something's good I focus on the bad and try to make it perfect. But on the whole, even if I don't approve of his quite immature "rate 0.5 and flame the comments" approach, I'm gonna have to throw in with OminousBrony on this one.
... Sorry, but that was just kinda... Lacking, just a bit. I mean, I could understand if this was the BEGINNING of a fic, but as a one-shot? I'm left disappointed, sorry. There's too much info missing to make anything satisfying. At least, IMO, for a one-shot, it could have used more detail. A different ordering of events might have helped as well, as the climax was kind of right at the beginning, and you don't really do that... There has to be SOMETHING to build up to it. I felt like I knew the entire chapter right at the beginning, and that just made it feel like a waste of time to read. I won't deny that you can't write well, it's just how it was executed that felt lacking...
~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria
p.s. I was merely trying to give constructive criticism. If you have something to say against me, please keep it civil, as I am only trying to help. Thank you. If I can think of how to better explain why I didn't care for this fic, I shall make sure to add it as well.
191384>>191296 Well thanks for the criticism on why you guys didn't like it. I guess this fiction could be categorized as a flop
, but I knew that one would come up eventually. I just wasn't on top of my game while making this... oh well...
Well, I guess I'll just go back and work on my other romance everyone seems to like more. Again thanks for the advice.
I thought it was a happy fic. I was wrong. I can't be wrong.
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And then he went home and saw a strange pocket watch opened it and found a magic blue box. Right?
I am actually saddened to see so many people who don't appreciate one story whose only purpose is existing.
This fanfic is meant to make us wonder and think about the possibilities. It is not wrapped up for a reason. Its just a simple tale, told from somepony. This portrays his thoughts about a single subject. This is a Slice of Life.
Sure, it has near-zero plot. But it has more than infinite implications.
I for one, love it and appreciate it for what it is.
hey you just released a chaper for a different fic your doing (also with a doctor twi pairing) where it's raining heavilly out...
and it's a dating/romance fic...
Hmmmmm...
There should be a continuing chapter, to explain what happened to twi and why she became like that
I haz a sad nao
i actually like this one, just long enough to get the message across, but still shot enough to be a nice quick read.
a different fic with the same paring, with a happy ending in the future perhaps?