I decided to make a fic where Fluttershy does something out of character, and the idea has been in my head for a while, and I decided to bullshit around with it in my free time.
The cover is shitty, sorry. uou I drew it in like ten minutes. I'm kinda just going with whatever comes to mind with this one, and I do not have an editor, so I hope it's not too awful. Also, if you think it's bad, tell me exactly why you think it's bad rather than a comment saying "Ew". I'm super cereal, people.
Chapters (2)
There is nothing too bad that makes this unreadable, but you might want to invest in tabbing new paragraphs, as well as cleaning up your "enters" with dialogue and actions, it has a wall-of-text-but-not-really-a-wall-of-text feeling to it that is hard to explain. (sorry I can't be more helpful)
I'll keep reading this to see where it goes, but one more thing, is it hinted that Rainbow crushed Angel with the food bag?
haha, i think the picture is awesome!
i like it! =3
when do you plan on picking this up again?
Cool.
Have you tried getting an editor? Not that I'm complaining....