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Rarity's been hiding a secret, even from Sweetie Belle. And it makes the least sense of all, because Rarity hates getting dirty. Because it least of all makes sense to her friends. A Space Marine is designed to keep the Imperium from falling, but Rarity, she protects Equestria from harm. And it's pretty hard keeping that from her friends.

This is the first story of a "mini" series of the Mane six in a Warhammer 40k setting.

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It's different. Still cool though.

I kinda feel bad for saying this but you got the marks of armour wrong, Aquila pattern is mark seven, mark four is maximus pattern.

hu. guess pinkie is a inquisitor, twilight is chaplin, flutters is a khorn bezerker, AJ is a nurgle person and dash is a terminator. or something like that...

This is really fuc#ing weird! Please continue!

Great concept, might consider slowing down a bit and expanding on what the scene is though? Like visuals, smells, sounds... :twilightsmile: Just a thought

Could use a bit more detail in the ork camp, and a bit more descriptions of her sneaking around, but your general writing is solid and the idea is awesome! :pinkiehappy:

Chapter I, only chapter?:duck:

Comment posted by Talvox deleted Apr 10th, 2013
Comment posted by Talvox deleted Apr 10th, 2013

Alright, thanks for the fix on the Aquila power armor. Skyrim was telling me it was Mark IV. >:U (mods. :3)

2405777 Ah, to be honest it doesn't make much of a difference, I'm just a collosal nerd.

Epic story, but missing something, MORE, FRICKEN, MORE

now i'm curious. where did she get the armor? is she an astartes somehow? was she human once? i mean otherwise the imperium would have murdered her.

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