My Success and Her Despair
Applejack left the bakery, the door swung shut behind her. She frantically looked to find Spike walking away slowly with his head lowered.
"Spike! Spike, wait!" Applejack called out only to see Spike turn his head back towards her with a disgusted glare.
Applejack could see the hatred in Spike's eyes and it hurt her deeply. She put her hoof over her heart and began breathing heavily. She feared that she had just let the love of her life slip through her hooves.
"Applejack, will you please leave me alone?" Spike sighed.
"I can't do that sugarcube." She put her hoof on Spike's shoulder and turned him so that their eyes met.
"Applejack, what're you..." Spike couldn't finish his sentence. The next thing he knew was that something warm was pressed against his lips. Spike's world felt like it had slowed down. He felt very light and felt blood rushing to his face. In his confusion, Spike just closed his eyes.
When it was over, Spike was ready to blow his fuse, he looked up only to have his anger quickly dissapated when he saw the tears in Applejack's eyes.
"Spike... I told you once, and I'll say it again. I love you. I'd make you the happiest dragon in the entire world. If only you'd say yes to me." Applejack's face was bright red and had tears running down her face. She was dead serious about her feelings and Spike realized that this is what love is. He realized that his relationship with Rarity wasn't love. It was a one sided relationship and Applejack was right, he was being used.
Spike was speechless, what does one say in a situation like this?
"I... I... uh..." Spike stuttered, failing to form a coherent sentence. Applejack put her hoof on Spike's head and said,
"You only have to say yes or no. If you say no, I will leave you alone and I wont think of you anything more than just a friend, but if you say yes, I will try my best to make you happy."
Spike stared at the ground, thinking what he should say. It felt like they were the only two in town, and the summer breeze gently rushing past their ears was the only thing they could hear.
"Applejack, I... I... y-y-ye-yes..." Spike couldn't comprehend how hard it was to form such a simple word. There was so much weight to it. Applejack wrapped her arms around the little dragon and more tears began to well in her eyes. However, they were not tears of sadness, but tears of joy. Applejack's whole world was just made brighter and it gave her a warm feeling inside.
"My gosh. All I can say is thank you! I promise that you wont regret your decision!" Applejack tried her best to keep her excitement contained.
"So what do we do now?" Spike asked.
"Well, lets go for a walk and try to get to know each other better." Applejack suggested, unsure of how practical that would be, considering that they have known each other for some time now already.
"Uh, sure, that sounds like a good idea." Spike nodded, "Where should we go first?"
"I'm not sure, lets just start walking and see where it takes us."
The two continued down the road and talked about their favorite things and other hobbies. This was what Applejack wanted all her life. She finally had the time to be with Spike.
They were just in the middle of discussing what kinds of foods smell the worst when they crossed paths with Rarity, Spike's former love interest.
"Oh, what a pleasant surprise running into you two here." Rarity greeted with her usual elegant demeanor.
"Likewise, Spike and I were just discussing what kind of foods smell the worst." Applejack said.
"Yea, so far we've agreed that potatoes, radishes, cucumbers, onions, asparagus, and pickles smell the worst." Spike listed.
"But cucumbers and pickles are... uh... n-never mind. Anyway, speaking of food, I was just on my way to Sugarcube Corner, Pinkie, said she had some emeralds that I could use in my next big project." Rarity's eyes lit up with excitement.
"Oh, me and were just at Sugarcube Corner and well, um... Spike..." Applejack bit her lower lip.
"Let me guess. Spike ate them didn't he?"
"Yea, sorry about that, we didn't know that they were for you." Spike apologized.
"It's fine," Rarity sighed, "I'm not too worried about finding some mere emeralds. So, you mind if I join you to... well, where are you heading?"
"Not sure, we're more focused on talking than walking."
"Oh? Why's that?"
"Well, we just wanna get to know each other better with random conversation."
"Get to know each other? You lost me there." Rarity said with a puzzled expression.
"Well, you see, I saved Spike from a pack of hungry timber wolves today and the way he's paying me back for saving his life is by well... dating me." Applejack blushed.
"Oh, I see... Wait, WHAT?!" Rarity exclaimed after realizing what she just heard, "this is quite a surprise. I didn't know you were like that. Either way, I'm happy for both of you." Rarity smiled.
"Thanks, Rarity, it means a lot to hear that from a good friend." Applejack tipped her hat. "Now, shall we continue talking some more? I bet with a third person, we could come up with more things to talk about."
"I'm terribly sorry, but I am afraid that I'm going to have to decline your invitation, as fun as it may be, I just remembered that I have to meet up with Twilight. There's something important I have to discuss with her." Rarity quickly sped off towards the library, hoping that Twilight was there.
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yaaaaaaaaay !!!!!!!!!!! new chap D': i had waited for so long
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Oh God. I wasn't going to get to stay away from it forever, was I? Here it is - Romance. Now romance isn't a concept I'm completely opposed to, it's just never really struck my fancy. To me, the genre is like those interactive hentai porn games that I get pop ups for while I'm browsing completely unrelated websites; People apparently really like them or they'd never exist, but I just don't see the merits. Most romances feel too rigid, idealized and forced for my tastes, so with a few exceptions I rarely dive into the genre. Doesn't help to have a title like "The Apple of My Heart", does it? A pun and a reference to a central organ often used as a metaphor for the substance behind human emotion sure spells out originality. Do you know what's next to the heart, TheExhaustedBrony? The lungs - as in I'm not going to hold my fucking breath!
Before this review can be dismissed as a flimsy, hate-filled rant delivered by an antisocial, loveless dullard allow me to reiterate in giant, flashy, diamond encrusted letters that I do not hate romance stories. A romance can really sucker me in if it's well established, well paced, avoids cliche and happens between two characters that I honestly want to hook up and "The Apple of My Heart" falls flat on it's face at all four hurdles.
The "Well-Established" hurdle:
If you're like me - jaded, withering and not as smart or handsome as you've convinced yourself you are - then you require a firm context for your literary experience. Exposition is the cornerstone from which you build your narrative, essentially serving as the "this is what you need to know to get the story" explanation. The explanatory information that this story omits is the evidence behind Applejack's feelings. I'm not buying that she likes Spike, I haven't been given any distinct evidence to conclude that. The story just concludes it for me. It shouts, "Applejack likes Spike! No, you don't get to be shown why! Now read this and feel things!" That combined with her rather creepy exuberance make me reach for the restraining order rather than the tissue paper - to wipe tears with! This isn't weird!
The "Well-Paced" hurdle:
As the girl I liked in high school was quick to remind me, being really upfront about your affinities is more likely to creep out your potential partner than inspire empathy. There's no sufficient build up to make me root for Applejack so she comes across as desperate and deranged - two adjectives that do not describe her character. Sure love makes one behave in strange ways, but there's no context or string of emotional logic behind her behavior. The big confession of love happens like four sentences in, and the dialogue that follows comes straight from a middle school girl's soppy diary. I want my stories to play like a classy date that follows a natural progression of activities, and the pacing in this story is like having your significant other walk in, blow a load in their pants and pass out on the sofa. It leaves me disappointed, a little pissed and canceling some really wonderful dinner reservations.
The "Avoids-Cliche" hurdle:
If you're one of those strange people that honestly thought the Twilight Saga was original and inspiring, then you might find "The Apple of My Heart" much the same. However, those of us that have IQ's larger than the amount of states in the union will soon deduce that this story is cliche-tastic. Party A has liked Party B for some time, Party B discovers this and - despite being uncomfortable with the discovery in the beginning - grows fond of Party A. Then Party C shows up to initiate the love triangle. How quaint. The story reads like a rigid, formulaic love-story checklist rather than a naturally budding romance. Love is not methodical, and when you constrict your love story into following an algorithm it becomes hollow and forced.
The "Happens-Between-Two-Characters-I-Honestly-Want-To-Hook-Up" hurdle:
Despite my ego trying to convince me otherwise in a frail attempt to garner self-esteem, I do not posses an incredible memory and can only recall the particular episode referenced as one where Applejack and Spike interacted in any capacity. So unless you're the president of the Spijack… erm, Appike… uuh, Applejack-Spike ship fan club, the coupling might strike you as completely arbitrary. Arbitrary is to originality what analogies are to cleverness; unconnected at best and piss-weak at worst. The relationship could work, but as established earlier I lack both the context and the ethos to want it to.
To continue the lasciviousness of the analogies, "The Apple of My Heart" is to romance what shakily masturbating and falling asleep in your own jism is to sex; it's purely self-indulgent, shallow idealization rather than an lovely organic experience. Yet I can't shake the feeling that everything I dislike about the story is what the folks who do read this stuff love. So, if you'd like a story that spits a sudden romance between two characters that have barely interacted directly into your mouth, then "The Apple of My Heart" appeals to you very specific literary niche. However, if you don't like that sort of thing and prefer romances with chemistry and build up then "The Apple of My Heart" will lose you about four sentences in. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to go back to feeling alone.
3433351 This is amazing! Thank you!
This soo good I can't believe no updates lately but keep it up love it
For a story this good i'll wait as long as i need to. Most Excellent.
I love this fanfic. To tell you the truth I believe spike and aj will become a great couple.
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