Yo guys, it's <\HBAT|WORK/> and I am not a writer. Not in the least bit. So if any of you guys ever read any of the stories that were made before August 2013, it probably wasn't from me. Hypstir out!!
You are a teen and your parents does not approve of your love for an inanimate character, but one day you find yourself right in front of her. What would you do.
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...you're really not making a strong case for yourself here, dude.
I dont think its bad... but it needs some work... nice concept though
Not bad, but it could really use some work. It just doesn't feel...organic.
This seems interesting, you get yourself an editor and I may read it. Oh and fix the errors in the description
Delightfully horrid.
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Oh hell
nope
Know what I'd do if Fluttershy manifested herself into existence? I'd try to comfort the obviously terrified mare and hopefully earn her friendship. But my dick isn't getting anywhere near her.
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Think of where her head is in relation to you. Yeah it is.
Oh, oh my god. This is bad. Not like, trollfic bad, just creepy, serial killer photos-covering-a-wall type of bad. Like, this fic touched me and I can never show you where bad.
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You're tearing this family apart, Charles!
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I swear to God, I think this fic was written as an incredibly subtle homage to The Room.
It smells astonishingly like tears, flopsweat, and shame.
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I-I just—wow. Just wow.
1701794 Let me rephrase that. My NAKED/ERECT dick isn't getting anywhere near her.
meh i was lazy a fuck when this came top. I never wanted this as serious just a y'kno fuck it. But on the brighter side I am gettin serious about an OC i made and I am actaully puttin thought into this and not just derp words together and roll the fuckin dice. (sorry for cursin but meh) Also I was never really gud at ship, just sad, dark, and action really. I hate stories without dept so I was goin to discard this and i wanted to see if anyone else agreed and this is not a reflection of me on any level I do not have an addiction to fluttershy nor am i a pysco-pussy who bitches about a toy
. - Orpheus Spectrum 
My emotions while reading:
No offense
meh i was lazy a fuck when this came top. I never wanted this as serious just a y'kno fuck it. But on the brighter side I am gettin serious about an OC i made and I am actaully puttin thought into this and not just derp words together and roll the fuckin dice. (sorry for cursin but meh) Also I was never really gud at ship, just sad, dark, and action really. I hate stories without dept so I was goin to discard this and i wanted to see if anyone else agreed and this is not a reflection of me on any level I do not have an addiction to fluttershy nor am i a pysco-pussy who bitches about a toy
. - Orpheus Spectrum 
This could work I guess but your going to need to write another now that the Grammer Nazis have attacked your fic.
Get a editor and work on it!
Dude, I like this story. not the best I've ever read, but It's still really good. I don't know why so many people have disliked it. Could be better written, but it's better than what I've got on the site. I hope you do make more chapters for this, this was pretty good in my opinion
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As I say this again "I know it is bad, It was intentional, I was not serious. If your going to hate then please hate on the serious Fiction I make instead. Okay. Great, I don't like writing Ship Fictions and I don't intend to do so, if you like sad, dark, action type fictions your in luck because that is what I do. NO SHIPPING! This is a Beta test I already knew is horrible so stop bitching please." Now that That is out the way please expect a deeper story than this crap I threw together.
- Orpheus Spectrum
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Why would you put your name at the bottom of your comment? I can clearly see that it's you by your name to the left of your post. Why have it there twice?
Hmmm... nope.
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It is a thing I do whenever I post something or anything. it is just to show my "Politeness" so to speak. It would be rude just to write something even though my is specified, I at least need to show my gratitude okay?
- Orpheus Spectrum
It happened too fast, and Fluttershy felt a bit too upfront and confident.
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Wow... Well, This certainly needs work, obviously. It was an ok concept, but you executed it terribly. I suggest finding a decent co-writer that would be willing to help you along the way. Overall, this story can be saved, only by doing a major re-write, and filling in a lot of holes in the story (no pun intended)
Good luck, and stay awesome!
i repeat this isnt serious i was never going to finish this so its just random ok? I dont want to continue this!
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I'm pleased to hear that, because there is a thin line between loving a show and needing a therapist, and the poor soul in this fic didn't just step over the line, he pole vaulted across.
Okay I got good news. I am making an OC story called "A Lonesome Spark shadows a Pegasus" yes the name is long but you will understand once you read it. Let me tell you this, it is not ship and it is very sad but happy, well bitter sweet. It is also kind of dark to an extent so don't expect something like "Darkness of Love" or "The Spread of Darkness" type of dark but type that would make you think. So stay tuned, I have some friends who are helping me with grammar and plot sequence and other stuff like that. I am going to give you the name of the "First" chapter, it is a prologue and it will catch I promise.
- Orpheus Spectrum
P.S.
I do put my name even though it is listed, I do out of manners when I am informing or saying something important and not just a regular sentence.
Fiction - A Lonesome Spark shadows a Pegasus
Chapter 1 - Fate Sparks new Life
There you go. And with that let your imagination go wild.
- Orpheus Spectrum
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maybe she is okay because he is an animal